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Haha, sure thing. I'll do it with my next batch of recordings, which will probably be... tomorrow? Not sure. But yeah! Feel free to send me lines.
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One thing. "As Revan kept converting people to his cause against the Mandalorians and the Mandalorians themselves kept destroying worlds, including the nuclear bombing of Serroco. The "Revanchists" had to intervene." That's a sentence fragment. It makes sense if you replace the first "and" with a comma, like this: "As Revan kept converting people to his cause against the Mandalorians, the Mandalorians themselves kept destroying worlds, including the nuclear bombing of Serroco. The "Revanchists" had to intervene." Is that okay?