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ALRIGHTY, I"M BAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAACCCCKKKKK!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

Sorry I never completed the story. Just kinda forgot about it, ya know? But I think I'll start again on it. Not like I really have a whole lot to do in college or anything. So if you start seeing more posts and parts of the story cropping up here and there, read 'em. If you're interested. I have to revise it a bit, cause I looked back over it and some of the story didn't go the way I really wanted it to go. Plus, I recently found out there is a mod that continues the dark side ending, so after I play that, I'll work on the story with some new ideas.

 

Thanks for reading it back then, and hopefully you'll like the new and continued version when I post it.

 

Expected date of post for first few chapters: Feb. 15th.

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Oh, by the way, the mod I talked about was called "Escape: Yavin 4" - without the "" marks - and you can find it on jediknight3.filefront.com. But, and this is just my opinion, I wouldn't bother downloading it. Now, kudos to the creater for making it. I know I wouldn't be able to...I suck at making stuff like that. But (again, just my opinion), there are somethings he could have done a lot better.

 

Like not using a Samus skin for certain jedi, or a Darth Maul skin. And checking up on the background story of Jaden as provided by the game. And one last thing I found pretty annoying, the overkill aspect of it. I played it on regular difficulty setting and was killed within the first 20 seconds...a trend that continued through all the levels. Ok, I'll admit I cheated and put on god mode eventually.

 

Other than that, it was actually somewhat ok. If you like that sort of thing, download it and give it a shot. You might like it.

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So, quick little update.

 

1) Does this sort ofthing even belong on this forum list?? Admins, any help please??

 

2) If anyone at all is actually paying any attention to this ongoing project (btw, if you haven't figured out yet, this is my idea for an expanded JA convesion mod), I have a personal preference of writing Jaden as sort of a re-emerged Revan. Any ideas?? Bad? Good? ive me some ideas or just bash the idea, it'll help me out.

 

THANKS EVERYONE!

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Soo...nevermind. Due to complete lack of intrest by myself, as well as anyone who ever read my original script, I've decided this project just isn't going to fly. Thanks to the people who liked my original one. Maybe I'll write it again in the future...but that will be a long time from now. So peace out!

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Not even a first paragraph ?

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Alright here you go:

 

Landing on the hellish ice planet had been just that...hell. The X-wings' thermal shields hadn't been working at full capacity since the repairs had been made. "Damn droids..." He shouldn't have to rely on them anyways...Jaden was a top-notch repairman among his fellow students. He'd never had problems making something work, even his new lightsaber. Jaden studied the hilt for a few more seconds, remembering how painful the process had been. Sure, he'd gone on pure intuition, but even a luckless rodian could have realized that refractory crystals and Verpine focusing lenses don't mix with high-voltage power systems. Jaden had the scars to prove it...

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Soooo, here's my idea:

 

I don't know if it's just me, but it seemed like even though you play as Jaden, he/she didn't really get many chances to shine, really. I mean, Jaden sorta did, but I mean they didn't really get to show off any talents besides fighting. Kyle just kinda came up with all the ideas and what-not. SO, to go along with my idea of having Jaden be like a newer-age Revan (but not as good, b/c as we all know, Revan is THE ****), I'm changing some of they key storyline elements in my new script. Nothing too serious, but a few changes here and there.

 

To start off:

1) I feel like Jaden shouldn't be human. Maybe near-human, or something. I'm thinking of making his family being descended from a line of disgraced Mandalorians, with a small bit of the original Taung blood still surviving in the family. Jaden will later get a chance to redeem his family's honor and become a "real" mandalorian later on.

 

2) The lightsaber he has in the game to start off with will actually be his second one. I'll come up later with a reason for not using his first one that he built. BUT, don't worry, it's not like he lost his original or something, he just doesn't like using it.

 

3) I want to have Jaden be more like a rogue Jedi, or just a neutral Jedi, kinda like Corran Horn or Kyp Durron. Not afraid of battle, and seeing the need for immediate action, but also wise enough to understand the risks and be a little cautious. In my mind, this makes Jaden more *human*, in a sense. Oh, and he won't follow Luke's orders most of the time. That is a definite change.

 

WELL, that's all for now, I'll be posting more of the story later this month ( i think ) and will begin making details on the progress available. ALSO, since I always intended this to be made into a total conversion mod, thus adding more to the story, I would appreciate any advice or ideas from you big modders out there, especially if you think parts of it could be possible to make. ADMIN: I KNOW THIS MAY NOT BE THE BEST AREA OF THESE FORUMS FOR POSTING THINGS LIKE THIS, SO IF YOU WANT ME TO MOVE IT SOMEWHERE ELSE, PLEASE TELL ME. Well, that's a wrap for today, so tune in later for more updates.

 

As always, thanks again to anybody who actually reads this.