stormtroop Posted July 11, 2002 Share Posted July 11, 2002 As the empire steped from his starship into the death stars hanger.The general was there to greet him with open arms like a brother or something.The empire ignored the genral rushing pass him he ran to the back of the hanger to the lift he could sense the light side here.He reached for his belt suddenly swinging his arm upwards with a red saber in his hand as he was approching the top floor.The light side was becoming even more unbarable the empire maid mara jade was shaking all though see was tring to hide it from her master.I cna sense your felling mara whats wrong with you.you know you cant hide your nerves frome me said the empire.I know master she replied.DINGGGG.Went the lifts bell.Darth vader and mara steeped fromn the lift quick go back int o th lift mara.Vader swung his light saber suddenly in a horzantall block.Smashing a young rebels saber away the empire jumped up in the air it seemed like miles he then came smashing down just missing the rebels side with his saber.So you think you can beat me young rebel.There was no reply well shouted the lord.Suddenly and swiftly vader swang his sword at the rebel while still shouting.The empire went into a frenzy suddenly probally the silence that did it.The empire was swinging and smashing anything in his way the young rebel pushed his hood off and grabbed his saber.The rebel was blocking everyswing as the twos lightsabers collinded toghether buzzing and spiiting everything of there sabers was blowing,everything inside the saber blew To be contined hope you enjoyed that i was so bored so i wrote this.im making a website based on the 70 page story i wrote including the sample up the top:lsduel: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 11, 2002 Author Share Posted July 11, 2002 did anyone like my story well did you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 11, 2002 Author Share Posted July 11, 2002 anyone whants me to contine with it pls reply and can you rate this little thread page.by using the rate theard ppage down at the bottom:amidala: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JrKASperov Posted July 11, 2002 Share Posted July 11, 2002 It's so full of bad spelling that it becomes unbearable... I.E. it's Emperor, not empire.... And use some capitals and stuff, it really adds to the reading pleasure.... *consider this non-offensive* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyle d'Tana Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Originally posted by stormtroop did anyone like my story well did you? I liked your story:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 Yeah i was rushing it on a school computer up my school and its keyboard is a bit acward see im getting the internet at the end of the monuth so ive got toget used to using the acward keyboard.Thanks for the tip as well ill be putting the sencond part up as well.and to the other post im glad you liked it im going to make a website with storys and pictures on soon if you whant me to email the whole story to you email me @ seniorure@hotmail.com. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
obi Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 That must be a biga** death star to fit an entire empire:D anyways, I've been working on my skills, so I'm gonna try somethin too. "And you do realize the importance of this matter, don't you?" Leia Organa said. "Certainly! If we cannot recover this planet from the remnant, they will have a strategical advantage. With our losses already at a high, we cannot afford much more damage." Wedge Antilles said, as he sat back in his chair. "I have been debating with myself on whether to send in an assault team or not." "I could come up with a plan, if you would like, and Krutos would be ours again." Wedge said, hoping his words where reaching Leia. "Yes, that would be acceptable. Go and create an assault team, along with a plan, General."Leia said, as Wedge rose from his chair, bowed, and left her office. Then, something unexpected happened. She looked out of her office window, so high up on Coruscant, to see a round black dorid staring at her. She was frieghtened, and she just continued to stare back at it. Then, she noticed a small red light blinking on the side of it, and then a loud screech. A metallic object burst through the window, and pierced her stomach. she Laid on the floor, losing a tremendous amount of blood. She tried to scream, but failed. She looked at the droid, which then flew away. She realized that if she did not get help quickly, she would surely die. She wondered where then droid had come from, and who sent it, but this was no time to ask questions. She drug herself with one hand to a comm link, and as she was about to activate it, she got a light feeling in her head. The world around her started to spin, and all became a blur. She laid her head back onto the ground, stared at the cieling, and closed her eyes. The outside world just kept doing what it always had. Speeders ran all over, bells where ringing, and everyone went about their business. the end. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zindell Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Pretty Impressive, I'd be interested to see what you have on your site when it is complete. Thanks for the Sample Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yoda_623 Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Yeah, good story. I'll be sure to read more of it as it comes out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 by saying the empire i mean just darth vader and thanks zindell ill post the site up when its finished.actually do you know a host or site where i can build one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 thanks as well yoda_623 do you think taht at the start of the page lucasarts would put up a starwars story section and let me become a mod of it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyle d'Tana Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Ok stormtroop, you can send it by email Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 alright it will be ready nxt week youll recive it maybe this sat or nxt o.k:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
obi Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Originally posted by stormtroop do you know a host or site where i can build one WSMCAFE is a free web site builder. Thats what I used to beuild my Academy. Anyways, I don't think they will make you a mod of a forum, no offense, of course. I've been here over 2+years and I ain't a mod yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 yeah dont worry about the mod thing thanks for that site name Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 once the sites finished ill be sending news letters once a mounth including a story and ill be sending storys to members homes if they whant it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 Dart Vader steeped prodally onto the dusty planet of mos-espa he pushed his cloak aside and sat down on the ships plantform bay.He thought to his self that the place was awful quiet.Suddenly Vader heard a loud gun shot followed by 100s of tusken raiders as they all opened fire Vader swing and side steeped he then grabbed his saber and blocked every single bullet.Then the raiders ran into a near camping site and dissapeared.Just as vader deactivated his saber he sensed a young rebel around the area without any warning vader drew his saber and marched off Vader marched off into a old abbandoed village.A young rebel creeped up behind him he drew his saber and whoosh vader backflipped away.Its been a long time rebel aka.Lucke skywalker.Your going to die this time replied luke.Without any hesistation Vader swung around and just missed luke.The two then engaged in battle both were eager to see there oponent to die blocK Swwwing smassh these were all the sounds from the twos sabers. Then in a desprete attempt Vader used the rest of his powers in a final blow agaist luke and what a sucees it was lukes saber blew and luke fell uncounsious To be contined hope you like the story i was bored again so i wrote my sencond story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kit fisto JK Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 how many of these will you make:confused: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 12, 2002 Author Share Posted July 12, 2002 These are just samples at the moment but the full storys on my website im building will be plain action probally 20,as series one contain 10 and the sencond on contains the same as well.Why are they rubbish Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
armadillopillow Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Vader swing and side steeped he then grabbed his saber and blocked every single bullet i wasnt aware there were bullets in starwars Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
armadillopillow Posted July 12, 2002 Share Posted July 12, 2002 Its been a long time rebel aka.Lucke skywalker. do i even need to say why this is so wrong? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 13, 2002 Author Share Posted July 13, 2002 no.1 by saying bullets i meanlasers and there is actually bullets as the tuskens use them Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 13, 2002 Author Share Posted July 13, 2002 and sencondly i did mean luke not lucke Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stormtroop Posted July 13, 2002 Author Share Posted July 13, 2002 sites now up and running on http://stormtroop55.tripod.com/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WolfmanNCSU Posted July 13, 2002 Share Posted July 13, 2002 Alright, I am visitor number 2. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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