Darth_Yuthura

I think that's how I view myself I guess. I'm not so vain as to say I'm extraordinary lol

And I notice that you tend to skip from past to present tenses on certain words and sentences. I think it was the last paragraph, instead of putting 'ed' on the end of a word, you put 'es'. Nothing big.

I liked the update nonetheless, it's really coming along. The dialogue between Alayna and Visas is great, definitely has emotion in it. And you portray the Exile as imperfect, which is great.