Darth_Yuthura

No, I welcome critique.

And I know where apostrophies go - didn't I put them in? God, I've really gone down hill with my writing. Thank god college is around the corner... I need some harsh teacher lectures, and quick! lol

I do know what you mean with the sentences, but I just despise short sentences, that go like this:

He walked out of the room. Looking left, he saw a wall. He then looked to the right, and saw another wall. It was amazing.

Worst example ever, but you get what I mean? I notice it so much in other peoples writing, that I try to avoid it... obviously I use it sometimes, but not a fullstop every two seconds. I guess it's made me want to completely ignore fullstops altogether but I'll get my head sorted out soon.

You know what I find funny? You two are American and I'm English. Americans miss out 'u's on words like armour and favour... but obviously the English don't. I doubt people will notice it, or be bothered by it if they do, but you can definitely tell it's been written by different people.