Darth_Yuthura

How long is it, so far?

Maybe since HOP needs to focus on his TFP and school, he would like to skip this next chapter. Then again he left his piece on a cliffhanger, and people would likely want to know what happened. I think he should start off chptr 2 (makes most sense).. then you 2nd and me third.

If it's gone overboard, look for things you've repeated, or thing that shouldn't be in it, yet. I mean, you've got a whole story to write about Exile restoring the order - she doesn't need to think about it all now.