Adavardes

Okay, I just realized I haven't responded. I read it, but completely forgot to comment.

My first thought after I'd finished reading it was, "Another pair of Jedi falling in love and having a kid?" I don't really mind the topic, but it gets kinda old. :/ Of course, here I am talking, the queen of the 'lets-kill-off-the-parents' group...

Other than that, I didn't see anything wrong with it. I would cut down on the good vocabulary words, though. The sentences would flow a little more smoothly with only a few, IMO.