Darth Badguy Posted July 23, 2007 Share Posted July 23, 2007 Well, I tried writing a fanfic before, a KotOR I sequel, but it wasn't realy worth reading. I hope this story will be better, I have already thought out the major 'red line' of the story, I will only post one chapter at a time so I can use comments. O yeah, and I'm Dutch, so expect a few mistakes in the spelling... Word went mad at words like Sith, lightsaber, malachor etc. so I didn't check it with the spell and grammar control. PROLOGUE The Exile watched Traya disappearing from sight as she fell into the core of Malachor V. He felt it when she finaly died. It was like a part of him was ripped from his body and mind. But not an important part, more like a piece of dead flesh that hasn't had a purposes for a long time anyway. The Exile stepped back from the edge of the platform and walked back towards the doors of the Trayus Academy. No. Not the Trayus Academy, he thought. The Exilius Academy. His Academy. The Academy of Lord Exilius, the one that was exiled. CHAPTER 1: Assuming the Title As he entered the Academy, the newly self-appointed Lord Exilius saw a woman bowed above the body of Sion. As he approached, he recognized her; Brianna, last of the Handmaidens. Brianna sensed him and turned towards him. "So it is done?" She asked, stepping over Sion's body. "She is dead?". Exilius walked towards her before he answered. "Yes, it is done. The core of Malachor V will be her grave. I am the Dark Lord now." Brianna turned away from him and started walking around the round room that had become Sion's last place to rest. "I thought you would say so." She replied. "The Dark Lord of the Sith.". Suddenly she started laughing. Not a laught of joy, but an hysteric laugh. "What's left of the Sith? Maybe a few Sith Assasins that you didn't find on your trip to the Trayus Core! There aren't any Sith left, nor any Jedi!" Exilius followed her on her walk around the room. "That's not true. You are left. And Atton. And Bao'dur. We four will be the first tachers of a new Sith Army. Together we will rule this galaxy." Brianna turned around, and opened her mouth as if she would reply, but the moved quickly towards Exilius and kissed him. Just as sudden as she started the kiss, she stopped him. She turned her head away from Exilius' and moved towards the door. The door opened and eight people came in. First were Atton and Bao'dur, the last of those two followed by two spheres, Remote and G0t0. Behind them followed six Sith Assasins, unarmed. As soon as the Assasins saw Exilius, they kneeled instantly. Atton and Bao'dur walked on till they reached Exilius. Bao'dur just nodded in a silent greeting. "She's dead?" Atton asked. "Well, since you're standing her, I guess she is... The Ebon Hawk seems unrepairable, but I think you can get a better ship as Lord of the Sith. I mean, you are the Dark Lord of the Sith now, aren't you?" Exilius didn't reply, but passed along Atton and Bao'dur, walked trough the door leading to the Academy and waved his hand to close it behind him. He had to think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted July 23, 2007 Share Posted July 23, 2007 This looks good Darth Badguy. My only problem is what is the Exile's name? Other than that, I like the Exile's Sith title and I'm looking forward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Badguy Posted July 23, 2007 Author Share Posted July 23, 2007 This looks good Darth Badguy. My only problem is what is the Exile's name? Other than that, I like the Exile's Sith title and I'm looking forward to more. Well, I couldn't think of a good name and besides, all Sith Lords don't use their real name anymore so I don't have to think about it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Empress Padme Posted July 23, 2007 Share Posted July 23, 2007 Looks good. Minor mispelling. I agree name would be nice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Badguy Posted July 25, 2007 Author Share Posted July 25, 2007 I will think of a name, perhaps it will come back later For now, here's another chapter. CHAPTER 2: Sion's Lightsaber Exilius walked back to the circle room, but instead of Brianna, Bao'dur and Atton he expected to see, there was only G0T0, floating in the middle of the room. "So there you are." G0T0 said while floating towards Exilius. "You have done as I asked you. The war that instables the Republic is over. You are the leader of the Galaxy now. I trust you will do what it takes to keep the order in this Republic." Exilius looked down to the floor and chose his words carefully. "There is no Republic anymore Goto, it's an Empire now. The last thing Traya told me was that the Republic would fall and an Empire would rise." He looked up into G0T0's red eye. "I think the time to do fullify her last profecy is now. I appoint myself as the Emperor of the New Sith Empire." G0T0's voice had a clear threat in it when he replied. "I can not allow that. The Republic is the base of all trading. An Empire rulked by one man will go down for certain. If that is your plan, you must be stopped." Exilius turned his mouth into a sad smile. Before G0T0 was able to load his guns the existence of the droid ended in one red flash of a lightsaber. As he deactivated the lightsaber, Exilius realized it wasn't even his own. It was Sion's. He examined the lightsaber a bit closer. The hilt looked like the lightsaber would never work, as old and rotten as Sion had looked himself. He activate the saber again. The beam that came from it was wider than a normal saber. Exilius grabbed his own lightsaber from his belt, activated it and crossed it with Sion's. He looked amazed to what happened. The lightsabers didn't block eachother as they were supposed to do, Sion's lightsaber just cut through his own lightsaber, just like it had sliced throught G0T0. Exilius deactivated both lightsabers and went looking for the others, while thinking about the amazing posibilities of this lightsaber, that wasn't stopped by other lightsaber. He hadn't crossed sabers with Sion when he blcoked the entrance to the Core, he had taken him out with nothing but the Force. Exilius didn't want to think about what would have happened if he had chosen to fight Sion with a lightsaber. He walked on, wondering where the others had gone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted July 25, 2007 Share Posted July 25, 2007 Short chapter, but has made my favourite Sith Lord in the KOTOR series, more interesting to me. Looking forward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Badguy Posted July 25, 2007 Author Share Posted July 25, 2007 Is your favorite Sith lord Sion or the Exile? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted July 25, 2007 Share Posted July 25, 2007 Is your favorite Sith lord Sion or the Exile? When I said favourite Sith Lord in the series, I meant Sion and I admit that I prefer a dark side Exile to a dark side Revan. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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