Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 C&c? Er. Comment and constructive criticism. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Mabye it is a hint. Mwaahahaaha. Working on ch 2. Trying to deside whether or not to tell you what happened to Milla. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Mabye it is a hint. Mwaahahaaha. Working on ch 2. Trying to deside whether or not to tell you what happened to Milla. Ah! Don't tell me! That'll ruin the whole thing! And it might be a hint? Really? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Losing inspiration. I've got nothing. *Cries* Where the hell is my muse. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Have you tried messing around in a journal? Sometimes you have to sit and think a while before typing something out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 I shall try. I'm probably only gonna make this story like 5 chapters like the other one. Next chapter Sasha will find out where Milla is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 http://www.livejournal.com/users/shinzuku/2613.html Here's where Sasha fine's out where Milla is. It's really short. I'm short on inspiration. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Klia Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Dun Dun Dun! I'm reading it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tahnee Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Hmm...well, I like it. But I feel like it needs more description--we get the events (which are awesome), but we don't get a clear picture of the scene they're happening in, if that makes any sense. What do places and especially characters look like? We've got all these new people, like the random Psychonauts and Milla's cousin Amari in Ch. 1, but I feel like we don't know who they really are or what they're like. I mean, we don't need their life stories, but a little embellishment wouldn't hurt in some cases. I do like it, though. I'm just nitpicking. It's a habit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Oh... so Amari is Milla's cousin! It was hard to tell. Amari, the name, sounds Asian, almost. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chipmunkrfuzzy Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 http://www.livejournal.com/users/shinzuku/2613.html Here's where Sasha fine's out where Milla is. It's really short. I'm short on inspiration. not bad... though I have to say, no matter how hard i try I cannot imagine Sasha saying " What the Hell" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetz Darke Posted October 15, 2005 Author Share Posted October 15, 2005 Hehe..manlady. Oh and the Becky/Jasper is not my fic. It is from my deranged friend who I shall call deranged friend. Don't tell her I said this but... she's deranged. A lot of my friends are deranged. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetz Darke Posted October 15, 2005 Author Share Posted October 15, 2005 http://www.livejournal.com/users/shinzuku/2529.html Ch2. Milla's lost. No one's seen her. Sasha's left. And nothings making sense anymore. Quarentee: If this fic is any better then it sounds, you get your money back. I enjoyed this. It's funny ^^ And if I had PK I'd probably be tempted to light the birds on fire too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Klia Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Is there anyway we can request this to go into the Art board or some other name like that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 not bad... though I have to say, no matter how hard i try I cannot imagine Sasha saying " What the Hell" How about now http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/21077554/ Not my picture Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Well, that doesn't count as swearing. It counts as 'inter-acronyms'. But I love that picture. X3 And it's better because someone asked if Sasha was a boy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 so... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 ^^^That was a total waste of post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 And dangit, Klia. Your avatar makes me want to hug Captain. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shinzuku Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 So... ch3 I can't write fight scenes http://www.livejournal.com/users/shinzuku/3042.html Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Klia Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Woot! Sasha went for Milla. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarthAve Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 aww, that's sweet and awesome that Milla cussed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Hm. I can't see Milla swearing. But Red is an ass. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Klia Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 Alright to keep is from Awwing the whole entire time I will share with you notes from my notebook and maybe later I'll type up the writing excerise I did, yeah it was a Psychonauts excirse but it was just a retelling of an event that happened so pretty plain stuff there. Ideas are ideas for fanfiction. Strikes mean NO I will not do them. Everything else is open for my brain. I really like Oleander meeting Loboto. That's why I asked in the other thread...Oleander, a poisonous flower. Ideas Lungfishopolis New Year at Whispering Rock Oleander meets Loboto? Loboto Lives! Oleander's Magic Act Mikhail and Maloof Do stuff! So what are your ideas. Anything that you wrote down..don't be ashamed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purple Squid Posted October 15, 2005 Share Posted October 15, 2005 I know why Oleander and Loboto teamed up. They have the same voice actor. Makes perfect sense, the world goes round! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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