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That... is the greatest theme song EVAR. I especially like the dun da duuuuuuuuun part. :3

 

So, today my teacher took me to the side of the class to show me pictures of the anime convention she went to, and she specifically showed me two (nerds)people dressed up as Sasha and Raz. Anyone we know? :0

 

D0od that song is awesome! And I live in California now? Again? You guys are awesome!

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OMG OMG OMG.

 

Teacher, Psychonauts?

 

Rad.

 

I wrote a story about Vernon for Lit and now everyone thinks I'm a rad writer and loves Vernon and thinks Psychonauts is rad

 

Except for the girl with no opinion, and no hope of dating anyone, ever.

Is she republican or christian?

 

Kidding, is she a SUPER CHRISTIAN. (one who only does what is strictly told to her by the bible)

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Okay! It's been a long week, I'm dead tired, and I also seem to have spontaneously developed ADD, so there's no catchy write-up or anything. Alas.

 

But! Two to Tango is FINISHED. Part Three is now available at my LJ or at FF.net.

 

I'm going to go engage in some victory drink--uh, dancing, and then go pass out. Whoo!

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Upon reading Two To Tango I have this to say.

 

The first couple of paragraphs are spot on. One tiny nitpick I have to add though is that Sasha just suddenly appears and I have no clue where he is. Where is he in relation to Cruller and Milla? I have been very specific on things like this before but I know you are a great writer and it is a compliment when I am nitpicky.

 

Yet again I love your inclusion of Oleander. Oleander is amazing in this.

 

When Milla drops by his lab early Monday morning (completely unannounced, per usual) with a new assignment, she’s rather surprised when Sasha smiles and asks her how she’s been.

I think this sentence would read better if you took out the parentheses and tucked it in somewhere else.

 

I would do more but it is late and I do want to enjoy this instead of nitpicking at it.

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Heh, thank you for the nitpicks, though! I do tend to have wonky sentence structures and characters appearing out of nowhere, so it's always good to know when it's happening.

 

Glad you liked Oleander, too! :)

 

Wonky sentence structure? I think not. Writing in the present is a hard challenge for writers and I would consider them a robot if they didn't get anything wrong.

 

Heck, I didn't have to say anything about the characters. You got them down.

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