[FIC] A General's Grief

[Ztalker]

Thanks again for the support

Obi-Wan meets with the Rebellion, and meets certain people that appear in the movies too.

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Rebellion

‘Ben…wake up. We have to go now.’ Obi-Wan gets wakened by Bail Organa. ‘Can I first have some breakfast?’ –‘Quit being this cynical, Ben. This is important. We will fly to the waypoint. They will pick you up there.’ Obi-Wan stands up and says; ‘You don’t have to do this Bail. You know you are needed here. I can fly there myself.’ –‘It’s not like the Imperials will blow Alderaan to stardust for this, won’t they?’ Both man laugh as they make their way for the hangar. They both step in a grey speeder and make their way through the deserted streets, and forests. After flying a half hour, they get a message on the com. ‘Unidentified vessel, stand back. This is Captain Nuatile of the 15th airborne squadron. You are under arrest for treason.’ As they message repeats itself, 3 Tie-fighters approach from the forest edge in front of them. ‘Crap!’ Bail panics as he searches for the com-system. Suddenly, two Z-95’s appear from below them, and frontally charge the Imperials. Bail and Obi-Wan speed to the checkpoint, as the fight rages above them. ‘General Kenobi? This is Mon Mothma. Come in fast, we have to go before the Imperials send reinforcements.’ Bail parks his speeder right next to the Corellian Corvette where the message cam from. Obi-Wan jumps out, turns around and says: ‘Thank you Bail. May the force be with you.’ -‘Same to you, Ben.’ Obi-Wan force jumps on the entrance ramp, as he sees his friend speed away. He then walks to the central room, where he finds Mon Mothma. ‘Welcome back general. These are desperate times, in which we could need your help.’ Obi-Wan sits down as he says: ‘Maybe we can exchange services.’ –‘What do you need?’ –‘I need the fastest ship you can get me, and trustworthy soldiers. I need to save an old friend.’ –‘I…I will try to find some men.’ –‘What is it you need me for then?’ –‘Let’s dock with the fleet first. They are in a Nebula right now. We can speak about your mission there.’ The flight to the nebula went smoothly. The escort of Z-95’s didn’t have to do anything. Right after the dock with the Medical station, Mon Mothma and Obi-Wan walk into the council room with the central projector. Several people are sitting around it. The holo shows a Z-95-like ship. It has 4 wings instead of 2 though, and looks far more stabile and powerful. ‘Ah! Welcome general! It’s good to see you again.’ The Mon Calamari commander walks upon the amazed Jedi. ‘You and your people saved us from the Quarrens in the clone wars. We are in your debt forever.’ –‘Now I remember. Master Fisto helped you in this civil war during the Clone Wars, didn’t he? You must be commander Ackbar then.’

–‘Yes, you are correct. What did become of Master Firsto by the way? We’d love to honor the man that freed us.’ Obi-Wan lower his head as he speaks. ‘The Emperor killed him. Together with some other Knights like master Windu.’ –‘Oh…I’m sad to hear this. Defeating the Empire will now taste even sweeter.’ The Calamari walks to the hologram as he speaks. ‘We have allies around the Galaxy master Jedi. Remember the manufacturers of your Jedi Fighter?’ –‘Yes. Incom did a great job.’ –‘They designed a new ship, under pressure from the Empire. They still sympathy us though. They’d rather give it to us then to the Imperials. The Imperials don’t know we have this data, and certainly don’t want to lose this ship to us. We are getting stronger, you see.’ He puts his finger near the holo. The Incom T-65 ‘X-wing’ prototype. Armed with four laser cannons, Proton Torpedo Launcher. Four realspace Engines provide stability and pure speed. Combined with the excellent firepower an interesting ship for us to get.’ The Calamari stops speaking as he watches Mon Mothma’s face. ‘And you are going to steal it, General Kenobi.’

 

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Sneak preview:

A mechanical breath fills the comm. channel.

‘Commander Thrawn, I will take care of this rebel vessel. This is none of your concern.’

[Diego Varen]

‘It’s not like the Imperials will blow Alderaan to stardust for this, won’t they?’

 

Obviously they don't know what Darth Vader's plans are. Another good Chapter.

[JediMaster12]

Obviously. Kenobi stealing a ship? Hmm so many questions and yet I like what I am reading. Keep up the good work. Just a suggestion however. I tend to get confused about who is speaking what and to whom. I suggest that you separate each piece spoken by a different person. An example would be like:

Jaina said, "..."

 

Her brother replied, "..."

 

Something like that and it would help to keep your characters organized. Good job however and I look forward to seeing more.

[Ztalker]

Thanks for the support

I though about the way of writing you mentioned, but i just liked to try it this way. I think i'll use the form you are suggesting in (possibele) future stories, since it's easier to write, and it hides my grammatical errors a bit ^^

 

About stealing the ship:

In the Sw databank, it's clearly said the X-Wing was a Imperial prototype, until 'someone' stole it. I just made it Obi-Wan.*

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Mission

‘Okay. How hard can it be?’ Obi-Wan looks at the Mon Calamari and Mothma. For a second, they don’t reply. Then Mothma answers. ‘They keep it at Project Death Star, general.’

-‘In that case there are more efficient ways of committing suicide.’ The Calamari laughs as he try’s to answer. ‘You do know it’s main cannon still isn’t working, don’t you?’-‘Talking about efficiency. How old is that thing? 9 years or so? And they still don’t have it operational?’ Obi-Wan seems surprised. ‘In that case, the main engine isn’t functioning as well. It runs on the same crystals and power supply as the main cannon.’ –‘So you studied the plans Bail send you?’ Mon Mothma seems surprised too. ‘Yes. It’s quit useful to study a doomsday weapon you know. You should look at their disposal trench, it’s…. -‘We don’t have time for this Obi-Wan. If you can get the X-Wing, we will provide military support. You have to leave now, because the main part of the Imperial fleet is fighting in the Outer Rim. Bothan spies show they are slowly retreating. You need to go fast.’ Obi-Wan nods his head as he walks to his cabin. ‘I will leave tomorrow early, okay?’ As Obi-Wan walks away, Ackbar replies. ‘May the Force be with you, General.’ –‘Thanks. I think I’ll need it.’

Obi-Wan experiences a night with many nightmares. He sees the duel on Mustafar, the death of his master. Obi-Wan wakes up. It’s time to leave. Obi-Wan sighs. ‘I wish you where here Qui-Gon. I could use your help.’ Obi-Wan clicks his lightsaber on his belt, and walks to the launch-bay. When he opens the door, the whole place is empty, except for one person. As he walks into the light, his Mon Calamari face becomes visible. ‘Sir, what are you doing here?’

-‘General, you are one of the last Jedi. One of the last members of the order that saved my planet. I can’t let you go without my best wishes.’ –‘Thank you commander. It’s the first time since ages I actually feel Jedi again instead of a prey.’ –‘I also want you to have this.’ It’s a box filled with holocrons. ‘This is Master Fisto’s diary. May it inspire future generations of Jedi.’ –‘I…I…I don’t know what to say Commander Ackbar.’ –‘Just be silent and go. You have a mission to tend too.’ Obi-Wan enters the Z-95 cockpit, starts the engines, and waves Ackbar farewell. As he makes his way for hyperspace, he thinks of Luke and Leia, the Jedi-twins. The holocrons, now hidden in the spare part canister, could be used in their training. ‘I can’t train them yet. It still hurts to much.’ A little tear appears from his left eye, and makes it’s way to his chin, where it falls on Obi-Wan’s lightsaber. A Jedi blaming himself, a Jedi crying, a general’s grief.

After a long journey, the Hyperspace engines finally stop, and Obi-Wan awakes from his meditation. In front of him lies the Death Star, the Imperial base. ‘Unidentified vessel, prepare to be pulled in by a tractor beam.’ It was part of the plan that Obi-Wan would enter the Death Star this way. Incom’s office was located near the hanger. Below him are the shipwrights of Bilbringi. He can clearly see the future Star Destroyers. One of them is bigger then the rest, and different from shape. It’s name? The Executor. ‘So they are indeed losing ships in the Outer Rim. It seems they can be beaten. He quickly scans the shipwrights. If the rebels see this, they will probably be even more excited. ‘This is General Thrawn of the Relentless. Please identify yourself!’ –‘I already…’ A mechanical breath fills the comm. channel.

‘Commander Thrawn, I will take care of this rebel vessel. This is not of your concern.’

-‘The Emperor ordered…-‘The Emperor gave ME command of the situation.’ Again the mechanical breath. ‘You are out of your league general.’ The general slowly answers.

‘I’m sorry Lord Darth Vader, just don’t disappoint the Emperor like you did last time.’

As he is slowly pulled inside, he feels a small spark of joy from the station, shortly followed by an enormous hate burst. ‘Crap. He knows I’m coming.’

 

 

Sneak preview:

-‘There is still hope, Anakin. I sensed the good in you when I arrived.’ –‘That’s a lie, old man, and you know it’s true. Search your feelings. It were your teachings that betrayed me. YOUR ignorance that made me what I am today.’

 

*=Now you see i fixed another SW-thingy too. In A New Hope, Darth Vader clearly speaks : 'You shoudln't have come BACK.' So i made Obi-Wan visit the Death Star, to fix that

[Diego Varen]

Another great Chapter as always.

[JediMaster12]

That's good. You know I never noticed that because I was caught up with big bad Darth Vader. Another good chapter. It's nice that you show the human side of the Jedi, especially Obi-wan because in Ep. 3 it looked like he could barely hold himself together. I think what Obi-wan says when he's in a tight spot is, "Blast!" Sounds alot better than crap in my opinion but it is your story and I'll enjoy it just the same.

[Ztalker]

You are right about the 'blast.' I just wanted Obi-Wan to look a bit..angry. He blames himself after all.

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Padawan

The Z-95 is pulled aboard, and placed on a landing pad. The room is already filled with Imperial soldiers. The cockpit slides open, and Obi-Wan climbs out, very slow. ‘You are under arrest, Jedi. Surrender yourself, and save us the trouble of shooting you.’ Obi-Wan slowly turns around, as all the soldiers form a circle around him. ‘Where do you plan on taking me anyways?’ –‘Lord Vader requested an audience. Consider yourself lucky. Mostly we just shoot rebel scum like you.’ –‘That really doesn’t seem a good idea to me. I’d rather…’ All the soldiers ready their guns. ‘Fine, rebel. On my mark…’ The commander never speaks the complete sentence. Obi-Wan pulled the officer near him, and holds the scared soldier as a shield in front of him. ‘You wouldn’t shoot a senior officer, now would you?’ He then whispers something into the officers ear. With a gloomy face, the officer speaks. ‘Retreat men. This man is no rebel.’ One of the soldiers asks: ‘Sir, we have strict orders from Lord Vader, I strongly..’ With a straight blaster shot, the hostage officer shoots the soldier. ‘I said retreat. Get to your barracks, and stay there!’ All the troopers lower their guns as Obi-Wan and the officer walk out. As they enter the turbo lift, Obi-Wan asks:

‘Where can I find the Incom offices?’ The officer replies with a glazy stare, shortly followed by a mumbling ‘Just down the corridor on deck 17.a, Sir.’ –‘Thank you for your kindness.’ Obi-Wan opens the door, where three surprised troopers look up. ‘He drank to much last night, got to go, bye!’ The officer is thrown out of the lift, as the troopers stand up. The lift starts it’s way down. ‘Captain?’ –‘Yes?’ –‘I didn’t know we have a cantina?’ –‘Nor do I, nor do I.’ The lift keeps going faster, until deck 17 appears on the screen. Just as Obi-Wan steps out, he sees the face he feared so long. Lord Darth Vader, waiting for him down the hallway. The last obstacle to the Incom offices. Obi-Wan walks up to his former padawan. A mechanic breathing fills the hallway, and bounces of the walls. ‘You shouldn’t have come, old man.’

-‘There is still hope, Anakin. I sensed the good in you when I arrived.’ –‘That’s a lie, old man, and you know it’s true. Search your feelings. It were your teachings that betrayed me. YOUR ignorance that made me what I am today.’ –‘I don’t wish to fight you, Anakin.’ –‘But I do.’

With a little poof the red lightsaber lights the area. Shortly followed by a blue one. The duel commences, as the two last Jedi battle each other. Obi-Wan is pushed back across the hallway. There is no escape for the old Jedi. With all the strength he has, he charges forward using Force jump. Vader doesn’t expect it, and damages his left arm. He then force pushes a canister to Obi-Wan, who splits it in half. ‘You have grown strong Anakin. Strong and stupid.’ –‘It is you who betrayed our teachings. Your ignorance destroyed the Jedi. Your incompetence destroyed me. Your arrogance destroyed the Republic.’ –‘The Dark side isn’t stronger, Anakin. It’s only more easy to follow. Turn back to the light. You can still be redeemed!’ With a hard ‘NOO!’ Vader charges into battle again. The tired jedi master can’t fend of the mechanical monster any longer. His lightsaber is pushed out of his hand, and he falls on his knees. ‘Is this what you want Anakin?’ –‘That man doesn’t exist. There is only Dart Vader.’ –‘I can feel the conflict within you. Give up.’ For one second, the dark Sith doubts. In this second, Obi-Wan rises, pulls his saber back, and hits the device on the Sith’s belly. The Sith falls down, writhing in pain, as the mechanical breath turns into cuffing.

‘You still have much to learn, Vader. I have no desire to kill you. That’s destined for someone else.’ With this words, the teacher leaves the padawan. He walks to down the hallway, into section A. As he opens the door, bright light blinds him for a second. Behind the door lies an hangar. The engineers look up, as the tired Jedi enters their room. An old human walks up to Obi-Wan and shakes his hand. ‘Welcome master Jedi. We expected you. The X-wing is loaded and ready for departure. We have erased all files regarding it, and stuffed the build plans into the navi-computer.’ The general takes a second to reflect. ‘Wait. That means you will be accused of treason.’ –‘And we will be shot yes.’ –‘I..I….I’m sorry. I didn’t know this.’ –‘It doesn’t matter, Master Jedi. You have to leave now. And as Obi-Wan steps into the X-Wing, he sees the door is being bashed in by troopers. The engineers all shoot back, but are no match for the troopers. Obi-Wan quickly activates the engines and shields. The troopers try to shoot him down, as he tries to make his way for the exit. He enters space via a trench, and dodges the half-operative turrets. As he punches in the coordinates, he thinks about his encounter with his padawan. ‘You where right. You are more machine then man. There is no good in you.’

[JediMaster12]

Nicely done. You have a way of showing how Obi-wan developed his opinion of Lord Vader which he gives to Luke years later. I thought Rebel spies stole the plans from the Emperor and Princess Leia was custodian of them. Will you show how that comes about? I am dyig to see more.

[Diego Varen]

Nice to see Darth Vader in a Chapter. I'm suprised Obi-Wan left his Apprentice alive, although if he did, there would be no OT.

[Ztalker]

@ JM12: Well, that's the case with the Death Star. Bothan spies took the plans for the Deathstar, gave it to Leia, who tried to run it too Alderaan. But Vader intercepted, and she putted it in R2. About the X-Wing, we don't know much yet. The Exanded Universe just says that at one point, it was stolen from the Imperials and brought to the Rebellion. As a respons, The Empire developed the Tie-interceptor.

 

@Pottsie: He couldn't kill Anakin anyway, in my opinion. He left him to burn on Mustafar, why wouldn't he just kill him with his saber? I think he blames himself, and that's why he cannot kill his former apprentice. You can also see this in the fact that he actually lets Vader kill him. I think that had two reasons: Distract Vader from Luke, and end his misery. He knew he couldn;t kill his Apprentice, so he chose to keep teaching Luke in a ghost-form.

 

All this is based on the officla SW database. I;m just adding some stuff to it

Zonema Sekot also excists by the way. It's the homeplace of the Yuuzang Vong. It's descirbed in the book 'Rogue Planet' by Greg Bear.

 

O yeah:

Thanks for the ongoing support

I'll try to write some more in the weekend, and try to use all your tips and trics.

Thanks again

[Ztalker]

Briefing

Obi-Wan enters Hyperspace, and once again enters hibernation sleep, a Jedi technique. He over thinks his adventure, and realises something is missing. He was attacked on Tattooine, again on Alderaan, but not here on the Deathstar. This must mean this so called ‘left-hand’ of the Emperor operates outside of the Empire. Obi-Wan knows the Emperor has so called ‘right-hands.’ His personal spies, assassins. So what’s the story about this ‘left-hand guy?’

Suddenly, the Hyperspace is broken. In front of him lies the Medical frigate he started his mission on. ‘General Kenobi! You did it! Proceed to docking bay 3, good job!’ Mon Mothma’s voice sounds more happy then Obi-Wan ever heard. He advances through with a smile on his face.

As soon as he steps out, the engineers clap their hands, and Mon Mothma and Ackbar run towards him. ‘You did it! You stole the X-Wing prototype! I can’t believe it, the Force favours us.’ Ackbar just nods, as he inspects the vehicle. Obi-Wan jumps out, and says: ‘I don’t want to be rude, but I held me end of the bargain. Now I have to get to Sekot.’

Mothma stops smiling as she says: ‘We have assembled two commando teams, and we have a Imperial shuttle for you to use.’ Obi-Wan’s face embarks a smile. ‘Thank you, Mothma. This might be the last time I see you, so one bit of advice: Some kids from Tatooine are eager to join the Rebellion. They’re just kids, but they already fly better then most of us. Might be interesting.’ –‘I’ll keep it in mind general, we can always use good pilots. Good luck on your mission.’ –‘Good luck with the Rebellion too. May the Force be with you.’ With these words, Obi-Wan walks away, straight to the hangar. He can sleep on the way to Sekot.

In the launch-bay, Obi-Wan is welcomed by the two commando teams. One of them says: ‘It’s an honour to server under a Jedi master.’ Obi-Wan smiles as he begins to speak: ‘Hello. I am general Obi-Wan Kenobi, and we are going on a mission. General Tarkin knows of a planet that has advanced neural and biogenetic technology used on their ships, and we think he’s trying to get it to overwhelm the Empire. Luckily, I know the location of this planet too, so we are going to stop him. He went there with the star destroyer ‘Scythe’ and is now on his way for Sekot. To bad he started from Coruscant, and we start from here. If we are fast, we can arrive before him, and ready the planetary defenses. That’s our mission.’ The soldiers look at Obi-Wan. Their eyes don’t show fear, so Obi-Wan continues: ‘If we don’t stop him, Tarkin will have an unlimited amount of strong fighters at his command. If we do stop him, we might actually get the chance to get rid of that Mandalorian loving son of a…well you know. Briefing ended! Into the shuttle.’

A minute later, a shuttle leaves the convoy, and makes it’s way for hyperspace. Obi-Wan sleeps, as the auto-pilot guides them too their planet. He thinks of the first time he visited the planet. Tarkin was there, with an enormous Trade Federation army. He got separated from Anakin in the heat of battle, and that’s where it started to go all wrong. Anakin killed his direct enemy using only the Force. He saw Anakin from a whole different perspective. Not the sympathetic boy, but an evil, powerful Jedi. It was then that he rethought his teachings, and started visiting Yoda more often. Yoda told him much. About the prophecy, the boy’s feelings, the dark-side, Qui-Gon Jinn. He misses his master even more, now he needs his guidance the most. He blames himself for the fall of Darth Vader, for the terrible events afterwards. The death of Padme, the tragedy with the twins: He failed.

[JediMaster12]

Nice conglomeration of thoughts. I knew about the right Hand, the elite assassins for the Emperor but a left Hand? That's a new one on me. Still looks good. I like how you bring in elements during the clone wars, stuff that appears in books or the cartoon series.

[Diego Varen]

Another great Chapter. Keep posting, I've one question. Is Obi-Wan like ROTS or ANH?

[Ztalker]

It's about 9 years after Episode 3, and 11 years before episode 4.

As written, Anakin still respects his master a bit, and Obi-Wan still thinks Anakin can be saved. This way, you can see Obi-Wan hasn't accepted his failure yet, like he did in Episode 4. I also tried to make him the cynical man from the prequal-movies, instead of the old hermit from the old episodes.

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Sekot

*Bweeeeeep* The loud signal wakens Obi-Wan. The commando’s are already awake, as Obi-Wan walks to the cockpit to see what the strange noise was. As he looks from the cockpit, he sees the green planet of Zonema Sekot in front of him. ‘General, I though you said Sekot was located in the Outer Rim?’ Obi-Wan looks back and replies: ‘I did too. But I forgot this planet is in fact one great ship. Right below the mountain trail lays the engine, if you’d like to know.’ The commando stands up, as Obi-Wan plots a landing course. ‘You aren’t on spice sir, are you?’ –‘If I was on spice, I would have requested a pink freighter, so I guess that answers your question.’ The commando replies with a laugh as the shuttle enters the atmosphere.

After a short flight, they make way for the main city. As Obi-Wan lands the vehicle, he sees the villagers approaching from all the sides, armed with blaster rifles. But as Obi-Wan walks out, they lower their guns. One of the aliens looks at Obi-Wan and starts talking: ‘Our master already sensed your arrival. She wants to meet you.’ Obi-Wan looks at his team, and replies: ‘What is there to become of my team?’ –‘We have arranged a hut for your team, Master Kenobi.’ A nicely dressed alien approaches Obi-Wan: ‘Please follow.’ Obi-Wan and his crew walk to a large hut, with two guards standing near the entrance. They both wear a blaster rifle.

‘Why are you guys this hostile?’ The nicely dressed alien whispers: ‘We had a civil war right when you left, Master Jedi. The Yuuzhan Vong are back, Master Jedi. They are back to finish us for good.’ Obi-Wan raises his voice. ‘Bring me to your leader. Maybe she’s still…’ Obi-Wan mumbles a bit. ‘Team, you can stay here. I will go and talk to the local authorities.’ The young sergeant replies with a loud ‘Yes, commander.’ And walks into the hut. The nicely dressed alien leads Obi-Wan to a larger hut, near the centre of the village. He was always amazed by these villages. They were build in the trees, like the Wookies did, but more advanced. Also, the unique way of making ships was carved into Obi-Wan’s mind. He remembered the strange way how little creatures turned into ships using strange technological processes. The fancy dressed alien enter the hut, and Obi-Wan waits outside. Passing civilians look at the strange human standing in front of the chief’s hut. After about ten minutes, Obi-Wan is called inside. He enter the room, which is filled with smoke. A mystical voice echo’s through the room. ‘So you have come back, human.’ –‘Yes. I am here to help you.’ –‘We don’t need your help.’ The voice spoke loud, and angry. ‘Why not? We helped you about 18 years ago, didn’t we?’ The voice doesn’t speak. It’s almost as if it is thinking. ‘Who is threatening us then?’ The voice says, with a mild voice this time. ‘The same man that tried to conquer Zonema 18 years ago.’ Obi-Wan nods his head. ‘General Tarkin and his crew are on their way to conquer this planet for it’s ships.’ His voice echoes into nothingness. From the smoke, another alien arises. His old face shows the wounds of the civil war. An eye is missing, ann an arm as well: ‘We are already in war with the Yuuzhan Vong separation forces, I don’t know if we can hold this military force back as well.’ The alien looks straight to Obi-Wan’s belt. ‘That’s the weapon of the Yuuzhan Vong! GUARDS!!’ A shocked Obi-Wan draws for his blade instantly, but doesn’t activate it. Instead, he puts it back on his belt. The two guards still aim for his head. ‘There’s a logical explanation for that, chief. We came here the first time to find a lost colleague, named Vergere. Apparently, she joined the Yuuzhan Vong to stop a civil war.’ The chief makes a gesture, and the guards lower their rifles: ‘So you think…their leader can be stopped?’ Obi-Wan sighs: ‘I can stop her, yes. Just trust me. The Imperials will be hear in about two days. If you give me a speeder now, I can stop the Yuuzhan Vong, and we will have enough time to prepare for the Imperials.’ Obi-Wan looks hopeful to the Chief. ‘Do..do you give me your word, Jedi?’ The chief looks at Obi-Wan with a distrusting glaze. Obi-Wan replies: ‘I will not fail. It’s important this conflict is brought to an end, to protect Zonema Sekot and all it’s secrets. Suddenly, the door is opened, and a female alien steps inside the hut. She looks at Obi-Wan, when she suddenly asks: ‘Master Obi-Wan, where’s Anakin?’

[Diego Varen]

I wonder who that female Alien is. A great Chapter as always.

[JediMaster12]

Yeah, I liked it. Still a few grammar errors like you have 'hear' instead of 'here.' Content is good though.

[Ztalker]

Thanks for the support guys

 

I might have some bad new though. I didn't think you guys would actually like the story, so i didn't really plan to wrtie the rest.

And now (tomorrow) i have to face my school-exams. They will go on for a week, so there will be less posts, since if have little time to write.

 

Sorry for that,

 

Ztalker

[JediMaster12]

No problem. I have finals this week myself but I'll have them done in two days! Yeah!!

[Ztalker]

Finally! I'm now have a week of, and have started writing the finally of this fan-fic. I have the coming 4 episodes ready...so here they come

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Jabitha

Obi-Wan looks at the alien. The Chief makes a gesture, and the two guards grab the female alien by her arms. Suddenly, Obi-Wan remembers her: ‘Jabitha!’ The alien looks up, as the guards let her loose. She kneels for Obi-Wan’s as she desperately asks: ‘Since you left, I have been dreaming about this day. There wasn’t a day I didn’t think about him.’ Obi-Wan looks surprised at the sad alien as he suddenly realises where the conversation is going: ‘I…I…Anakin is…’ Jabitha puts a finger on Obi-Wan’s lip as she continues. ‘I know he’s probably married by now, but I’d still like to hear his story.’ She looks at the chief: ‘Can I provide him shelter, Chief? I have much to ask.’ The Chief nods his head as he mumbles ‘Okay.’ Jabitha pulls Obi-Wan outside the hut. She grabs Obi-Wan by the shoulders, as she speaks: ‘Master Kenobi, where is Anakin?’ A tear appears in Obi-Wan’s eye as he says:

‘Anakin…is lost, Jabitha…the person you knew isn’t there anymore. He’s….’ Obi-Wan remembers his fight on the Deathstar from a week ago. ‘More machine then man. He has turned to the darkside…murdered his wife…and tried to kill me.’ With the last sentence, the tear rolls across his cheek. Jabitha pulls out her finger, and catches the tear on her finger: ‘I dreamed of him. Every single day, every single night. And now you say…he’s….’ Obi-Wan says the word before Jabitha can: ‘dead. There is no more Anakin. Only Darth Vader.’ Jabitha suddenly looks up as she says: ‘Is he the one who sent the army you spoke of?’ Obi-Wan is surprised by the fact Jabitha knows about the Empire. She wasn’t in the tent when he spoke about it. ‘I…have seen it in my dream. There was magma, fire, hate. And…an old man in black robes. I Anakin standing next to him.’ Obi-Wan looks up to the sky: ‘Jabitha. Go on with your life. Anakin is no more.’ Jabitha suddenly puts her arms around Obi-Wan: ‘Please don’t die, Obi-Wan. You are the only one I can trust in these times.’ Obi-Wan looks down on the small alien: ‘What do you mean?’ –‘My tribe did much they are not proud of. The beauty of this village clouds it’s true meaning. She looks into the bearded jedi his eyes. ‘They send you to kill her, didn’t they?’ Another question Obi-Wan didn’t expect. ‘I know Vergere well. We trained together, I might be able to redeem her again. At least I have to try.’ Jabitha pulls her arms back, and kisses Obi-Wan on his cheek: ‘I will pray for you, Master Kenobi. Until we meet again.’ And with that last words, she turns around, and walks away.

Obi-Wan, stunned by the moment, watches her walk away, and then suddenly realises he has a job to do. He force speeds himself to the landing area, and grabs a speeder. He flies away with a dazzling speed, searching for any signs of military activity. After flying for two hours, he suddenly sees a camp in the middle of the forest. As he tries to land, several rockets burst from the forest edge, flying straight for his speeder bike. Obi-Wan’s adrenaline pumps up, as h sees the rockets approaching. And on the very last second, he jumps. And with the force of the exploding rockets behind him, he’s pushed towards the camp. As he comes closer, he can see the soldiers readying their guns. With a quick move, he activates his lightsaber. As the soldiers begin firing on the airborne Jedi, he quickly deflects the lasers, towards the soldiers. Two of them die, as the remaining soldiers seek cover. Obi-Wan is only twenty meters from the ground now. He puts his hand down, and his face shows the utmost tension. And right before he lands, a huge crater appears right behind him. The Force saved him again. As he looks up, he sees that the remaining soldiers and a bird-like alien with purple feathers surround him. The purple alien speaks: ‘Of all the people I expected to fall by, you were the last one, Ben.’ Obi-Wan swings his saber around. The aliens replies with a more angry voice now: ‘Surrender your lightsaber…..and save us the pain of burying you.’

Obi-Wan slowly deactivated his lightsaber, as the purple Alien force-pulls it towards her.

Obi-Wan looks at the remaining soldiers, who now have lowered their guns: ‘Did you ;earn them that, Vergere?’ The purple alien holds the lightsaber in her hand as she replies:

‘A Jedi without a lightsaber is harmless. Of all people, you should know that.’

[Diego Varen]

Nice to see you back Ztalker. That was a sad Chapter. Please check out either Jedi Forces - Shadows Of War or Jedi Forces - Vengeance of the Empire.

[Ztalker]

I will...the info i got came from Rogue Planet, and some parts from the Star Wars site. I'll check them though

[Ztalker]

Vergere

Obi-Wan slowly walks out of the crater. The strange looking aliens still have their blasters lowered. He now stand right before Vergere. ‘Why did you join these rebels. You have violated the jedi code.’ Obi-Wan’s voice sounds calm. Vergere looks at the old Jedi as she starts laughing: ‘Ben, Ben! You of all people should understand the motives of joining a ‘rebellion’ as you speak of.’ The bird-like Jedi looks at Obi-Wan with a friendly face. ‘If you are talking about my adventure on Melida/Dann, you are correct. I joined because I believed them. They longed to save their planet. The people you joined seek to destroy one.’ Obi-Wan’s voice sound a bit more friendly now. It seems as if he doesn’t sense danger anymore.

Suddenly, Vergere replies: ‘That’s your opinion. And it’s false.’ With a gesture, the soldiers ready their blasters. ‘Take him in.’ Obi-Wan knows resisting won’t work, so he stretches out his arms. One of the soldiers binds them together with a strange looking kind of robe. It almost seems like some kind of root. ‘Everything is organic.’ One of the soldiers tries to explain in broken Basic. ‘Even our ships are. But you know that.’ Two of the soldiers lead him into a force cage, near the centre of the camp. As Obi-Wan steps in place, they activate it. Obi-Wan is surrounded by an electric field.

Later that night, Vergere walks upon his cage. She opens it, and starts talking: ‘You want to know why I joined them, don’t you? Follow me.’ Obi-Wan follows her into a large tent, that also looks like it’s made out of organic pieces. As they stand in front of the door, it suddenly flies aside. Obi-Wan asks: ‘Same technology as the ships?’ Vergere replies with a short ‘yes’ as they enter the tent. In the centre stands a holo-emitter. It shows Sekot, and the position of the Yuuzhan Vong forces. Suddenly, Vergere starts talking again. ‘You and Anakin were the ones that searched for me, weren’t you?’ Obi-Wan replies: ‘ Yes. We found out you joined the Yuuzhan Vong to prevent a war. The order though you would return.’ Vergere suddenly throws her hands in her neck. ‘What would it have mattered? The Jedi have fallen, haven’t they?’ –‘How…how do you know?’ –‘I sensed it long before. I already suspected something. When Palpatine was chosen to be Grand-Chancellor, I felt it. Master Yoda did too. A burst of hate.’ –‘Is that why…’ –‘Yes…my mission to Sekot was ordered by Palpatine. He wanted me to disappear.’ –‘He got Yoda too. They faced of on the day the Empire was born.’

-‘I know. I felt he landed on Dagobah. He went into Exile, didn’t he?’ –‘Yes. He couldn’t bare the shame. He blamed himself for the loss of the Jedi Order.’ –‘We all know it wasn’t him to blame…your apprentice Obi-Wan…your apprentice. You should have listened to Yoda.’ –‘Who are you to teach me a lesson! You broke every single rule the Jedi order have!’

Obi-Wan’s starts to get angry. He doesn’t want to talk about his padawan. ‘I didn’t mean to upset you Obi-Wan. I’m not saying you failed. I only say the Jedi way failed.’ Vergere’s voice sounds a bit more calm now: ‘But you had questions?’ Obi-Wan realises this is the time to get Vergere back into the light. ‘Care to explain why you joined an army instead of the Jedi order?’ –‘I realise they are evil, Ben. But I have HAVE to stay. I can’t explain.’ –‘But…why?’ –‘I have dreamt of him…a new Jedi…strong in the Force…’ –‘There are no more Jedi, Vergere, no more Jedi!’ –‘I know you are lying Obi-Wan. You are a bad liar. Always were.’ She sighs: ‘I know about the twins. Yoda sent me a datapad. The same he sent to you.’ –‘Then you…now I see. You aren’t succumbed by the dark side. You do this…for the Jedi?’ –‘You are correct. I must stay here. Hidden from the Empire. Hidden from Anakin. He knows I’m still alive.’ –‘So you followed Yoda’s orders too.’ –‘Yes. You have found my hiding place though.’ A smile appears on the bird-like face. ‘That leads me to another question: Why are you here?’ Obi-Wan replies: ‘To protect this planet from Tarkin. He’s after the organic technology.’ –‘Are you serious? The same Tarkin that lead the Trade Federation once?’ –‘Correct. I was attacked by his body-guard on Tatooine. He wanted the coordinates.’

Vergere sighs again. Obi-Wan continues. ‘That’s why I’m here. The people of Sekot can’t fight two wars at the same time.’ –‘Then we must form a truce.’ She looks Obi-Wan in the eyes. Suddenly Obi-Wan realises Vergere isn’t wearing a lightsaber on her belt. ‘They would have found out. I destroyed it.’ She looks to Obi-Wan. ‘Tell your people we need to form a truce.’ With a gesture, the roots around Obi-Wan’s arms are released. ‘Can I….’ Vergere throws Obi-Wan’s lightsaber to him. ‘You’ll need it, Ben.’ She also hands him a datapad. “These have Imperial codes on them. I have a feeling you will find a use for them. Farewell, Ben.”

[Diego Varen]

That Vergere is a threat to me. Good Chapter.

[JediMaster12]

Interesting two chapters. Nice to see you back on track Ztalker. Still some grammatical errors. Try separating the lines of dialogue. With them all clumped together, it is easy to get lost as to who is talking to who. Still good work and keep it up.

[Ztalker]

Thanks for the advice. I saw several people doing that with dialogues, and it did clear everything up. I'll start using all these tips! I'll use them in my (possible) next fic, because i've written these episodes some while ago, and simply don't have the time to change them ><

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Aggressive Negotiations

Obi-Wan walks out of the tent. He walks straight to a speeder. The soldiers surrounding it don’t even look up. Obi-Wan steps on the speeder, and fires up the engines. Within seconds, he enters the forest edge and sets course for the main city. While flying through the cold night, he thinks about his encounter with Vergere. She hid herself well, and destroyed all connections with the Jedi order. ‘Maybe that’s what I need to do…’ He suddenly realises he’s near the city. He sees all kinds of light emitting from the horizon. He realises he must have meditated on the way, since he travelled this fast. He lands his speeder on a platform, and walks straight to the chief’s hut. As he enters, two guards push him down on the ground.

The chieftain turns around, and Obi-Wan can see his mad face: ‘You…you BETRAYED us!’

Obi-Wan, still held by the two guards, replies: ‘I did not! They have made an intere’ –‘You LIE! There’s only one punishment for treason. Guards, kill him.’ The chief turns around again, facing a map on the wall, as Obi-Wan releases all his strength in one powerful burst. The two guards fly through the wall, and the hut is ripped to pieces. Only the wall with the map is still standing. The chief sits in front of it, frightened . Obi-Wan slowly walks to the scared chief, as he slowly starts talking: ‘It’s your choice: ‘Die now, or die later. You can keep fighting on two fronts, but you will lose. The Yuuzhan Vong has agreed with a truce. You NEED them, Chief. Or you will pay the ultimate price.’ The Chief crawls up again. He tries to stand on his feet, but his knees are shaking. ‘We…we…can’t join. The Yuuzhan Vong have destroyed…families…cities…’ –‘You claim you didn’t?’ –‘I…we…’ The chief sighs, as he falls down on the battered floor of his hut. He makes a gesture, as he mumbles: ‘Make it happen.’ Obi-Wan makes a bow, and walks through the debris, to the hut of his commando-team. On the way, he pulls the two guards on their feet. ‘Sorry chaps, aggressive negotiations.’ He continues to his hut.

As he enters, the two commando teams look at him. The sergeant says: ‘Welcome back, commander. What’s the plan?’ Obi-Wan walks to the holo emitter. He activates it, and a hologram of Sekot appears. ‘We are going to save this planet. And these guys…’ The emitter shows the image of a Yuuzhan Vong warrior; ‘Are going to help us.’

The soldiers look at each other. The sergeant takes the word: ‘Sir. The people here aren’t very…powerful regarding weapons. The Empire will kill them without a sweat.’ – ‘That’s why…’ Obi-Wan punches a code into the emitter. It shows a enormous star destroyer. ‘We are going to weaken the Imperials before the battle.’ The commando’s reply with a huge ‘Yes commander!’ As they ready their gear. Obi-Wan takes one last look at the enormous ship: ‘We leave in two hours. I want everyone to be ready. Trask, Nimdus, you stay here to ensure the peace talks go smoothly. Here’s a list of demands from the Yuuzhan Vong side. Make sure they make a truce. It’s essential they make it, or all hope is lost.’ The two soldiers salute, and walk out of the hut. Obi-Wan walks to a bed, and falls asleep.

He sees a boy. He sees a Correlian man. He sees a Wookie. They fly through space. The Correlian follows a small fighter. Then, suddenly, Obi-Wan stands in front of Darth Vader. On his right, the two men, the Wookie, and a girl make their way for a ship. He looks at his padawan. He shuts of his lightsaber. His opponent strikes… ‘There is no death. There is the force.’ Obi-Wan wakes up, sweat pours from his forehead. He stands up, opens the door, and walks to his Imperial Shuttle. As he stand on the cargo ramp, he turns around. He sees Jabitha standing at the shuttle pad, looking at him. He closes his eyes. As he opens them, he sees Jabitha puts up her hand. Obi-Wan does the same, as he walks into the shuttle.