Jason Skywalker Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 Yes, very interesting and emotion filled chapter, very good. Also, Pottsie, since Tysy said 1:36 meant one hour and 36 minutes 'till Jacen's soul entered Tysyacha's body, i think 0:07 means 7 seconds. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Torthane Posted February 12, 2007 Share Posted February 12, 2007 That was a very emotional chapter, and I liked it very much. Once again it is good to see a antagonist with some good in him and the depth and shifting emotions of all the characters are portrayed extremely well. Ever chapter i read I think that you couldn't possibly top yourself, but lo and behold, you do it every time. Bravo! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tysyacha Posted February 13, 2007 Author Share Posted February 13, 2007 "And all these mixed emotions we keep locked away..." --Savage Garden Luke and Ben were getting worried. Tysyacha had not been spotted in any of the Atrium Gardens by the female security droid, and neither had the two Jedi sensed her through the Force. Both began to suspect something was awry. "Go check the Temple security tapes, would you?" Luke suggested to his son, but then he caught a moving shadow out of the corner of his eye. "Tysyacha! There you are. I was beginning to get worried." Luke Skywalker rushed toward her and gave her a rather impulsive embrace for a Jedi Master. "And for good reason!" cried the girl, her eyes sticky with tears. "Jacen Solo captured me. He said he was going to use my body as the perfect disguise for finding out where both of his parents were. Han and Leia. I managed to escape while he was meditating in his sarcophagus." "Wait a minute. Hold it," stammered Luke. "Start at the beginning." With trembling voice, Tysyacha told the story of how she'd been abducted, shackled to a Dark-Side-powered chair, and used as a pawn in Jacen's scheme. "His soul was going to inhabit my body, and my soul would inhabit his. Luckily, the more Jacen weakened inside his casket, the greater chance I had to get away." Her hands were shaking as well as her vocal chords, Luke noticed. "Where is he?" The Grand Master's voice was unusually cold for a Jedi's. Harsh. "His body, I mean? If he's dead, or at least dying, where is it?" "In his safe house. I can't remember where it is," said Tysyacha, "since I was unconscious when he kidnapped me. Also, when I was trying to run away, I didn't think to keep track of from where I'd come." This made sense; panicked people didn't often do that when they fled. "Very well. I suggest we search for it together, since my sister Leia and her husband Han will have to be informed." How can Jacen be dead?! "Do you know where they are?" asked Tysyacha, hands anxiously folded. Her mouth lay partially open, and Luke could feel her rather peaked breath. "Not right now. They're in exile, as their son Jacen would call them fugitives. I've been wondering if you'd be able to help us reach out to my sister through the Force. Leia can use it, for she's a Jedi. However, Han can't. He's just one of the best ex-smugglers the galaxy has ever seen." Despite his inner pain, Luke smiled wryly. If anyone could outwit any security forces, it was Han. "I'll help you if I can," said Tysyacha, "but I don't know how much I can do." "That's all right. All I ask is that you try." Luke closed his eyes and meditated. He pictured his sister in his mind, now nearing sixty years old, and sent a deep but gentle touch through the Force. "I know you don't know her personally," said the Grand Master of the New Jedi Order, "but try and call to Leia as a servant would. An apprentice, and definitely a new friend." Tysyacha sent her own Force touch out to Leia Organa Solo, wherever she wandered in the galaxy. Even though it seemed rather feeble to the girl, Luke abruptly turned his head. His apprentice was growing very strong indeed! "My! One more sensation like that, and Leia would be knocked head over heels! You're definitely stronger in the Force than you were before." Luke smiled. "Through all your trials and travails, you must have learned much, Padawan. At this rate, we should receive a response touch before too long, Tysyacha." Luke's apprentice smiled, and the two waited with fingers crossed. They soon felt a touch through the Force, but it was hesitant. Not quite trusting. Luke was puzzled. "Leia? It's me." He sent another reassuring Force stroke. "Nobody can pretend to be Luke Skywalker and have his unique signature. Still, I understand your hesitation, what with Jacen chasing you." He patiently bowed his head and meditated on pleasant things, happy memories that the two had shared. "I love you. Where are you? Jacen's--dead. I'm sorry." Suddenly, Luke stumbled backwards into a wall and crumpled to the floor. What?! A hot and angry Force response. It cannot be! I distinctly sensed his--You're going to have to prove it to me. I can still feel him... Luke's head reeled from the pounding it had taken. Leia? Calm down, Leia! I can prove it to you. I'll have my apprentice help search for his body. He's not dead, Luke. As long as Han and I are both breathing, he can't be. Tysyacha looked nervous. She didn't like the wavering look in Luke's eyes... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Torthane Posted February 13, 2007 Share Posted February 13, 2007 Well, it loks like Jacen's plan is in progress, though complications may arise from Leia knowing that Jacen is still alive. i am very interested indeed to see how this will turn out. Great stuff as always! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted February 13, 2007 Share Posted February 13, 2007 Perhaps Jacen isn't dead, but merely playing the part. Good Chapter as always and I'm looking foward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted February 13, 2007 Share Posted February 13, 2007 I think Jacen's already on her body but eh, whatever. You played it all nice, with all those manipulative things. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tysyacha Posted February 14, 2007 Author Share Posted February 14, 2007 (Note: I didn't think I'd get this stuck this late in the fic, but I am. Q's 4 U-all...) 1. How should Luke find out that Jacen's plan really did succeed? 2. How can I integrate Han and Leia into the story again, and maybe a battle? 3. Kyp Durron's going to cause some trouble for "Tysyacha", but how can I do that and have him not seem too out of character for a Jedi Master? 4. Ben. He's in the story--should he have a bigger part or just a cameo? 5. What do you think of having Jacen turned over to civilian Coruscant guards? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted February 14, 2007 Share Posted February 14, 2007 1. How should Luke find out that Jacen's plan really did succeed? Unsure, but see the answer to question 2. 2. How can I integrate Han and Leia into the story again, and maybe a battle? I think when Luke finds out Jacen's plan, Han and Leia should return. 3. Kyp Durron's going to cause some trouble for "Tysyacha", but how can I do that and have him not seem too out of character for a Jedi Master? Perhaps by doing something dirty, but not to evil. 4. Ben. He's in the story--should he have a bigger part or just a cameo? A bigger part. Other Jedi like Kyle Katarn could have the cameos. 5. What do you think of having Jacen turned over to civilian Coruscant guards? A bit dumb, since Jacen is a powerful Jedi. As long as there are many guards, Jacen won't escape. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tysyacha Posted March 4, 2007 Author Share Posted March 4, 2007 WHY I MIGHT NOT FINISH THIS I originally intended Dvukh to parallel the events of Tempest and Exile, but I see that this experiment has failed in a couple of big ways. I don't know how to go back and rewrite the story, but here are the shocking revelations that make my tale so horribly un-canon: 1. Lumiya doesn't die. According to an Aaron Allston interview, Lumiya is still a central figure in Exile. I made a guess and had her die. Whoa. Guess my instincts were super-bad-wrong on that one, Star Wars fans! 2. The soul swap? I actually got that wacky idea out of a video game (which, by the way, I've never played but I have nightmares about sometimes.) It's "Myst IV: Revelation," where the game's main villain kidnaps the main child heroine and possesses her body as part of a revenge plot to try and kill his mother and father for banishing him. 3. I'm also discouraged that this could never be canon, even if I did get permission to write Star Wars stuff. I guess I just burnt out on this fic. Sorry, guys. Sincerely, Tysyacha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted March 4, 2007 Share Posted March 4, 2007 I'm sorry to hear about not being able to finish this Fic. Still, you could always edit your posts and rewrite the non-canon parts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted March 4, 2007 Share Posted March 4, 2007 C'mon Tysy, you just can't have this die! I'm sure you can get it work the way you wanted.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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