Dark_Lady Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 This is a short fic, in first person, from the point of view of a character I created a while ago, Thian Maurus. I've put him in a few different stories so far (I can't resist trying different things with a character), but he's always a Force-Sensitive thief who grew up on Nar Shaddaa and gradually started working in other parts of the galaxy. About his personality, you can get the idea by reading the fic. Warning: If you expect something uplifiting and happy, read no further. (And a minor note to all in the Dantooine Community RP Project, no, no relation to this character. I just like the name, and decided it would work well for a bodyguard.) IT IS TO ME Good news was, we had gotten out just in time. Bad news was, it was "we." It wasn't supposed to be "we," not "us," just me. Me and me alone, like it had always been. And the worst news... the other one of "us" was a frakking Rebel agent who spouted idealism and, strangely enough, regulations, without warning. Ah, well, back to the good news. She was kind of pretty. I laughed. I couldn't help it. The Rebels had thought themselves so well-hidden, that their infiltration had been perfect, and the Empire had ripped the idea away in a matter of seconds. Only one of them had gotten out, and she had managed to make it to the ship just as I took off. By the time I noticed her, we were in hyperspace. "Something funny?" she asked, with an annoyed expression. What, she couldn't see the humor in the situation? At least for me. A rogue, a loner, trapped with the one kind of person I had always been trying to avoid. I laughed again. Just not one of my lucky days, I suppose. "Look, lady, I don't know your name, I don't really know what you were doing, and frankly, I don't care," I said. Well, it didn't have anything to do with me. It had been their choice, their job, their test. The fact that they had flunked it royally didn't make it any less humorous. "You know, we lost a lot of good people in there." Her eyes had narrowed. If looks could kill... well... then she would have been dead herself considering how angry I was when I first discovered her. "And what the frak am I supposed to do about that?" I asked. Why do people always tell me random bits of useless information? She didn't respond. Maybe she had finally stopped trying to make me care. I had to give her some credit, though. Most people would have given up long before. Why would I care, after all? It was none of my business what two warring factions happened to do to each other while they attempted to take over the universe. Besides, I know from previous experience, the galaxy does not cease to be funny when people die any more than it ceases to be serious when they laugh. And so I laugh. At the Empire, at the Rebels, at my own luck, good or bad. I laugh because I can. Because there is a hell of a lot more humor in this galaxy than most people acknowledge. I'm not trying to change the universe or start a philosophical debate. If you don't like it, well, go off somewhere else and cry to balance things out. I'm not going to stop you. And it might just be funny in its own right. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 Ok.... that was an odd fic.... yet.... a good one... perhaps you should give it more detail like what the guy does with the Rebel... does he drop her off somewhere, does he allow her to stay with him. Enrich the story... like what battle it was... and just minor things like that.. but if you enrich it in detail it could become one of the best stories around... anyway gettin off my soap box now... good job D_L Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 Frankly, this is an odd fic, same as Anakin said. I don't get what you want to talk about... But however I think you want to focus on something other than legendary battles and sneak attacks...But quite frankly, I don't understand the essay...Eh, it's like one of the essays in the SAT I Literacy Test. Still, good job Dark_Lady. And for DL below, try to make this essay PG-13, and please don't cross the "Crime Scene, Do Not Cross" line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark_Lady Posted January 8, 2007 Author Share Posted January 8, 2007 Well, it's a short fic, more of a character sketch than anything else. Having him say what he did with the Rebel would take the story past his semi-bitter soliloquy, and I really wanted it to end there, since that was the whole point of the fic. And, sadly, I can't say what battle it was, because he doesn't know. He doesn't care (me neither, I don't know myself, shhh). That's another thing I was trying to make clear. That's one of the major limitations of writing in first person, you only know what the character knows, and the main reason I usually write in third person (which I know you didn't know, but you do now. ) First person can be very powerful, but very limiting. Anyhow, maybe I'll write a long(er) fic about what happened, in third person so we get to know everything. And then I can say what he did with her. And yep, the fic's rather odd. @CSI, above: And that's what you immediately think of... *shakes head reprovingly* Want to know what really happens? It's way too early to be giving out that information. And don't worry, I don't cross those lines. They're very important to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 Nice Shortie, despite it's oddness. I'd like to see more Shorties with this character, just to see what the character is like. Please put this in the Archives, thanks. @ CSI: I doubt Dark_Lady will cross the "Crime Scene, Do Not Cross" line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 Ah, verry nice DL. A bit odd, like everyone as said, but an excellent piece of work. Now continue it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grey Master Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 One of the best of the short fics, Dark_Lady, and I think its powerful, despite its oddity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HappyMojo Posted January 8, 2007 Share Posted January 8, 2007 Pretty amusing. I like the male character. A hint of Han Solo I guess Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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