christos200 Posted December 18, 2010 Author Share Posted December 18, 2010 nick with john run to nick uncle. nick: uncle, the sith are attacking john: my parents have gone to knooda. uncle: one minute, to come your aunt. then all go to knooda. at the same time christos with the droid army have killed every jedi, even the younglings. at knooda the general wants volunteers to fight the sith. general: who wants to fight the sith. any vounteers? nick: i. john: me too. general: very well men. take your weapons. meanwhile at a republic starship. ben: dak, today we will go to geonosis. we will kill darth ryox. dak: very well sir. but can you tell me more about ryox? ben: ryox was once a jedi knight. now he is more a machine than a man. twisted and evil. a trooper goes near ben. trooper: commader we are landing to geonosis. ben: very well. meanwhile at the sith base on geonosis. ryox: all droids to position. now i want the snipers to attack. the battle geonosis has begun. millions of troopers, droids, jedi and sith are attacking in a fearsome battle. thousands of troopers and droids die. there is a river of blood. ben with a dinosaure like creature runs to find ryox. ben: ryox, here you are ryox: die jedi. after a short duel ben cuts and the two hands of ryox. but ryox used the Force to control four lightsabers against ben, but the Jedi bested the lightsabers. after that ben cut of the head of ryox. meanwhile the repulic won the battle. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted December 18, 2010 Author Share Posted December 18, 2010 on Dantooine christos after leaving the planet with his starship he orders to his capital starships to destroy the entire planet. nick: to survive we must go to the jedi academy sublevel. john: okey lets go. for hours the capital ships destroyed everything. but nick and john survived. ben with a few troopers have gone to Dantooine to searce for the survivors. after going to the sublevel he found nick and john. then he go and see a hologram. ben: i cant believe it. is christos, killing jedi knights. ben then with nick and john go to the jedi council at coruscant. jedi council member: i sence that the sith are going to attack here. ben: i sense that this boy, named nick is force user. i want to train him. jedi council member: very well after a month the sith have taken some republic planets. meanwhile rex is attacking to coruscant. ben: i am going with dak to find my old friend. nick: master may i come. ben: no. your training is incomplete. nick: very well my master. ben star ships lands at the rex flagship. then two sith lords bow ben and let him go to christos. rex: i've been waiting for you ben. the circle is now complete. when i left you i was just the learner now i am the master. ben: only a master of evil darth. meanwhile dak sacriface himshelf to deactivate the ship shields and generator. as ben and rex fight the whole starship is going to crash to coruscant. as it is ready to be destroyed both ben and rex broke the window and jumped to the ground as the whole flagship was crashing to the ground. after a fearsome duel rex throws ben lightsaber away. but ben with the help of the force grabs his lightsaber and throw it in the heart of his enemy. rex then dies. at the same time xin and harr managed to reach tatooine. xin: harr watch out. 4 bounty hunters are coming to kill us. harr: haaaa xin: i know that we survived a battle and fixed and the ship but this is other thing. then harr shouts the 4 bounty hunters and take their costumes. they enter in gula the hut palace as the bounty hunters. xin: hey gula. i am xin before even gule speak xin fired and killed him. at the same time the republic invades Korriban. ben: we need to find raptor. nick: yes master. as nick and ben enter the sith academy 7 sith lords attack them. but the jedi easy killed them. nick: here you are raptor. raptor: jedi scums, come here who will win: empire or republic, light or darknes, jedi or sith, light side or dark side of the force. and so the battle that will decide the fate of the galaxy has begun. after some time raptor manages to kill ben. nick: noooo! raptor: good. use your anger boy. only your hate can destroy me. nick using his hate manages to cut of his enemy hand. raptor: good, now kill me and your journey toward the dark side will be complete. nick: no sith lord. you will stand trial. raptor: then i have trully lost. 1 year later. nick is a jedi knight, the sith have been destroyed, raptor is dead and the galaxy is once again at peace and freedom. THE END. please post if you like it or not. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Canaan Sadow Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 This... was odd. The ending anyway... it's very... Qui-Gon Jin and Obi-wan... ish. haha. It was good, but the ending was a bit abrupt. :/ And you never did learn to use the shift key xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ctrl Alt Del Posted December 18, 2010 Share Posted December 18, 2010 the galaxy is once again at peach and freedom. I just wanted to say that this piece is really, really funny. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted February 27, 2011 Author Share Posted February 27, 2011 STAR WARS: RETURN OF THE SITH THE LOST PARTS 1 ( this mini story says how xin and harr fixed the ship on battle of Alderaan) at the planet of Alderaan there is a very large battle. the Ebon Hawk is damaged and xin wounded. only harr is okey. as harr is goind to see what happend with xin, 4 droid attack him.harr turns back and ,fast, fires at his enemies and kills the 3 of them. but the 4 droid manages to fire at the head of harr. harr now is red with his blood. at the other side of the ship xin wakes only to see harr dead. but is harr dead? xin screams "nnnnoooooooo" "no" and fires and kills his enemy. he goes near harr and founds a river of blood. harr has his eye closed but he still breaths,whith difficulty of course, but xin thinks harr is dead. xin: no. come on, harr old buddy... harr: haaaaa xin: ha,ha,ha,ha. i thought i lost you. come on, we have work to do. harr: haaaa xin: okey, i will let you rest for a couple minutes. after 25 minutes: xin: come on, i will fix the ship. you will keep the republic and the sith away. after 2 hours of xin fixing and harr fighting sith war droids and republic troopers the Ebon Hawk is fixed. xin: come on harr. enter the ship. harr: hooo xin: okey, are you ready for going to tattoine. harr: haaaaa xin: you are right. we have to past the sith and republic starships. next update: escape from Alderaan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted March 1, 2011 Author Share Posted March 1, 2011 STAR WARS: RETURN OF THE SITH THE LOST PARTS 2 escape from Alderaan xin and harr have now get off the planet only to discover a huge space battle. the republic with 2.000 capital ships attacks 12.000 sith starfighters and 3.000 sith capital ships. as the republic looses 22.000 starfigthers of the Separatist,who only for these battle are alied with the republic, attacks the sith. at the same time xin and harr are trying to leave the battle and go to tatooine. xin: harr go the turets!! harr: hooooow meanwhile 8 sith starfigters attack the Ebon Hawk. harr shoots at the and manages to destroy the 6 of them. xin: harr, watch out these starfighters. they are new models. fire, fire!!! harr:haaaa in the ship something made a strange noise. xin lets the ship in autopilot and goes to find the source of the sound. as he goes to see behind a box a blue lightsaber is on his neck.then a very beatifull woman with long black hair and jedi knigts clothes talk to xin. harr: hooow xin: i am okey harr. just........ maria: dont talk or i will kill you. i am maria jedi knight. if you listen to me i shall not kill you. xin: very well. next update: jedi knight. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted June 24, 2011 Author Share Posted June 24, 2011 in a few days i will update. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gorgod Posted June 25, 2011 Share Posted June 25, 2011 No offense, but honestly this just reeks of the movies. A Jedi knight who turned to the Dark Side and is now a machine? Darth Vader. Aunt and Uncle who take care of a teenager on DANTOOINE? Aunt Beru and Uncle whatever who take care of Luke on Tatooine. A human smuggler and his wookie friend? Han Solo and Chewbacca. See, I don't want to be mean or anything, but just try to think of more original concepts rather than taking them from the movies. Sorry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted July 27, 2011 Author Share Posted July 27, 2011 No offense, but honestly this just reeks of the movies. A Jedi knight who turned to the Dark Side and is now a machine? Darth Vader. Aunt and Uncle who take care of a teenager on DANTOOINE? Aunt Beru and Uncle whatever who take care of Luke on Tatooine. A human smuggler and his wookie friend? Han Solo and Chewbacca. See, I don't want to be mean or anything, but just try to think of more original concepts rather than taking them from the movies. Sorry. First i want to thank you for reading this story. Second, i know that is copy, but i have my own storyline. also there is nothing new i could write. in star wars there is nothing original now. even kotor is a copy of the original trilogy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gorgod Posted July 28, 2011 Share Posted July 28, 2011 First i want to thank you for reading this story. Second, i know that is copy, but i have my own storyline. also there is nothing new i could write. in star wars there is nothing original now. even kotor is a copy of the original trilogy. That's really not true at all. Carth Onasi is NOT the equivalent of Han Solo, Bastila is most definitely NOT the equivalent of Leia, and Malak is nowhere near to Darth Vader. Not in the Original Trilogy did I ever see a Sith Lord's mind wiped by the Jedi Order and enlisted on a Republic ship. Hell, the Republic nor the Sith even existed in the OT... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted July 28, 2011 Author Share Posted July 28, 2011 you are joking, right? star forge: death star darth malak: darth vader revan : luke skywalker the wookie ( dont remember its name): Chewbacca the pc is revan: luke is darth vader son if you look well, you will see that even if kotor has its own storyline many things are taken from the original trilogy. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gorgod Posted July 28, 2011 Share Posted July 28, 2011 you are joking, right? star forge: death star darth malak: darth vader revan : luke skywalker the wookie ( dont remember its name): Chewbacca the pc is revan: luke is darth vader son if you look well, you will see that even if kotor has its own storyline many things are taken from the original trilogy. How is it the same at all? The Death Star is 100% different than the Star Forge, and Zaalbar is absolutely nothing like Chewie. Just cause they're both wookies doesn't mean it's taken from the OT. Assuming you think Carth is Han Solo, "Han" is not friends with Bastila nor Zaalbar. And how in the hell is Luke the same as Revan? The whole point of Luke is that he came from nothing, just a little peasant life with his Aunt and Uncle, searching for his father and seeking to destroy the Empire and becoming a hero. Revan was nothing like that- he was a ruthless Sith Lord that had his mind wiped by the Jedi and was redeemed by his enviroment and companions. Luke was never a bad guy. And two shockers don't mean it's copying... and don't get me started if you play dark side. Sorry about the rant, but you're just wrong. Every star wars thing has some elements from the other movies, but not to that extent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
christos200 Posted July 29, 2011 Author Share Posted July 29, 2011 again, you must be joking. The star forge is a copy of the death star. even the kotor fanatics say that.It may not have the same power but is a space station with almost the same name to the death star. Luke learns that his father is darth vader and revan learns that he is darth revan. I didnt said that kotor is a complete copy, i said it has copied the main story and changed some things.I like kotor but is a copy of the OT. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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