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in a perfect world

angsty poetry

would still exist

therefore a perfect world

is an impossiblility

as though pigs

became aviary

like you after

I punch you in the

neck. because that

would be perfect for

me.

 

thank you.

 

note: this poem has nothing to do with the posters at GFN or anyone on the internet at all. really.

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a poetic phone conversation

 

oh my god, this war

on terrorism is

gonna rule! I

can't wait until this

war is over and there's

no more terrorism!

 

i know! remember when

the u.s. had a drug problem,

and then we declared a war

on drugs, and now you

can't buy drugs anymore?

it'll be just like that!

 

right! god, if only

the war on drugs hadn't

been so effective! i

could really use some

fucking marijuana

right about now!

 

thank you.

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Mercatfat

in a perfect world

angsty poetry

would still exist

poetic liscence is acceptable

but angst ridden poetry

or angst riddled poetry

would have served the sentiment

in a more deep and profound manner.

if your poem had been more

Suessian in nature the angsty

would have flavoured the thought

perfectly.

 

*note this is not criticism

merely from one Beatnik to another

an observation*

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I too have a deep and meaningful prose poem to share. Came to me just yesterday, it did.

 

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I LIKE COPS

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I like cops

 

I wanted to be one

 

I strove to become one

 

I set out to become one

 

I tried my best to become one

 

I nearly was one

 

They wouldn't let me be one

 

It was a technicality for christ's sake!

 

I fucking hate cops

 

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That's the about best I can do. I wonder what's wrong with me. Maybe I'm just lazy.

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Gendo's poem revised

 

I LIKE COPS,

so what you gonna do

what you gonna do

when they come for you?

I like cops

I wanted to be one

I strove to become one

I set out to become one

I tried my best to become one

I nearly was one

They wouldn't let me be one

It was a technicality

for christ's sake!

 

I ****ing hate cops

 

(now I just watch

the Rockford Files.)

sorry Gendo just joshing you ;)

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  • 4 weeks later...

the Blue casket is getting

a lot more thread traffic

and older threads are dissapearing

I think we should all collectively

post in one thread to keep our poems

alive and online. I have started

a thread called More Or Less Poetry.

It is also a place for giving

poetry lessons, and for sharing

poetic devices.

If you wish to insure your words

poetic posterity, transfer them

over into this thread. that way

we all can keep the thread alive

and kicking.

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