CSI Posted September 26, 2006 Share Posted September 26, 2006 OK, I'll enjoy mine while we wait for the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted September 26, 2006 Author Share Posted September 26, 2006 Does anyone know where Vader was brought to get in his suit?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted September 26, 2006 Share Posted September 26, 2006 Hmm, i believe it was in a ship. Those Y-shaped or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted September 26, 2006 Author Share Posted September 26, 2006 oh okay Thanks *changes part of Chapter* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted September 26, 2006 Author Share Posted September 26, 2006 Begun the clone wars has Chapter 3 Yoda’s Two Apprentices Obi-Wan landed on Dantooine, the planet had most of the med droids now which was just what he needed. It wouldn’t take long to find one that would serve Padme right. After he found one he had tricked the droid into letting him stay in the room. He sat in the chair beside the bed and waited. Soon he fell to sleep… He was back on Mustafar though in the distance he could see Padme’s ship flying off. He turned and saw the Emperor walking down to where Vader lay. Vader was not on fire now but he could see burnt skin, ash, and small sparks still on him. He looked away, He had failed him, he had failed him. It took a while to get use to it. Then he looked back, Sidious was kneeling beside Vader and the clones where gathered around him. Obi-Wan snuck aboard the ship and entered an escape pod to stay in. Later they took off, and Ob-Wan snuck out of the escape pod to find Vader. Finally Obi-Wan entered a big room and saw the Emperor standing by a metal table binding a metallic black figure down to it. Instantly he knew it was Vader, the table turned up and down and a deep mechanical breath came out of him. After some talking that Obi-Wan couldn’t catch Vader broke his bonds and lightning erupted from his hands Obi-Wan woke up and turned his attention to Padme who was having her twins. Darth Yoda was on the way to Coruscant to claim the full throne of the Empire. On the way he started to build a new lightsaber. He had built the handle to fit him the same way the other had but at the bottom the had a curved spike strong enough to cut through three lightsaber handles at once and cut off there hand. He opened the hatch and put in Sidious’s red crystal. He turned the saber on, a blood red blade raised out of the handle. He swung the saber in the air and deactivated it. There would soon be a time to use it but not now. Now he had to take the throne from Vader and make him one of his new apprentices. Yoda landed on Coruscant and entered the Senate, as he entered the main chamber he heard yelling and shouting at a metallic black figure who just stood there annoying them. Vader turned and saw Yoda Vader paused as he activated his new saber. Darth Yoda also activated his newly constructed blood red saber. He jumped across the senate floating pods at Vader, and then in a series of flips he landed his saber right on Vader’s. In another series of flips attacking Vader he made him retreat to another pod. Vader force pushed Yoda to another pod full of three senators. Yoda swung his saber removing the senator’s heads as he jumped back to Vader. He kicked Vader sending him plummeting toward the ground. Vader started screaming with his mechanical voice as he fell. Yoda reached out and stopped him from falling. He brought him up to him. “Become my apprentice Vader you must and I will offer you more power then Sidious and together hunt down Padme we can.” “I will join you…Master.” “Good now go to Kessel you must to find Kyp Durron a force-sensitive child in slavery in the spice mines.” “Yes Master.” Vader said as he walked away. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted September 27, 2006 Author Share Posted September 27, 2006 Always in motion the future is Chapter 4 The Way of the Dark Side Kyp was born on the Deyer colony of the Anoat System. In an Imperial roundup of dissidents, he and his family were enslaved and sent to the Kessel spice mines. His older brother Zeth was retrieved by Imperials to work as a Stormtrooper in an Imperial Academy. Obi-Wan helped with the babies and finally got them to go to sleep. After much difficulty the med droids had been able to keep Padme alive. For now. Obi-Wan sinced that she would make it but was not completely sure. She had named them Luke for the boy and Leia for the girl. He was given the job to be there god father and to keep them from Yoda and Vader. He intended to do a good job. Vader landed on Kessel and started his search for this Kyp Durron in the mines. He walked through the mines till he reached the first checkpoint. He walked up to the director. “Who are you?” The director demanded of him. “I am Darth Vader sent here under the Emperor himself.” “The Emperor?” “Yes” “Fine, what do you need?” “I need a slave named Kyp Durron he is coming with me.” “One second.” The man walked away. 5 minitues later he returned with a small boy and some pleading parents. “If you take the boy you get the parents.” Vader nodded and took the three with him. The three walked silently back to the ship. They entered and took off back to Coruscant. Darth Yoda was pleased when Vader entered with the boy and his parents. “Ah Mister and Mrs. Durron this is?” “Yes” “Good that is.” Yoda explained his intintions to the two parents for there son. “And if we refuse.” Asked the Dad Michal. “Through you back into the spice mines I will.” They agreed and were sent out of the room. Yoda brought the boy Kyp into the half rebuilt Jedi temple that was now a sith temple. He brought the boy into a sleeping quarters for the night. For a while the parents will sleep with him but soon the parents will have to leave. Than Yoda turned his attention to Vader. “With my power make your body better I can.” “How.” “Feed force power from someone else we must then force and air to you will and get rid of you suit we can but need a jedi we do.” “I will find one my master.” With that Vader went off on the new mission. Yoda them turned and walked back to his throne. Obi-Wan stared as Padme stirred. Finally she was awaking, she looked up at him. “Obi-Wan” she asked “Is Anakin alright.” “No, he and Yoda turned to the Dark Side.” “Yoda?” “Yes he killed Sidious and became the Empereor himself its on the HNE right now.” Padme watched the HNE for a while then looked away. Obi-Wan swiched it off. “We will turn them back no matter what, Padme.” She nodded but did not catch his eye. Instead she got up and looked over her children. Soon, she vowed I will make a allience against this new evil Empire and win. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted September 27, 2006 Share Posted September 27, 2006 Two good Chapters. Yoda should become Emperor of the Galaxy. Interesting that Padme survived. One question. I haven't read many EU books, but Kyp wasn't born yet. Or was he? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted September 27, 2006 Share Posted September 27, 2006 I don't know...But I think the chapters are good. Interesting Padme survived. Well, is Luke and Leia going to redeem Yoda and Vader? Seriously, Yoda is too strong than Vader. He needs somebody as strong as Darth Nihilus, or Redeemed Nihilus, or Darth Malak, or Darth Sion, or Revan, or the Exile, or Emperor Devon or Jae Onasi to defeat him. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted September 27, 2006 Share Posted September 27, 2006 Not really, Sidious defeated him, and Vader can easily pick him up and throw him to a tube of blue electriciy. But now, really, the chapters are good, the grammar has increased, and so has the length. I also only noted one error in the part where Yoda was building the saber. And also, Kyp was born on 5 ABY, but then, this IS AU. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted September 29, 2006 Author Share Posted September 29, 2006 Anger leads to hate Chapter 5 The New order of the Sith and the remains of the Jedi After the clone wars the jedi knight Sip-ganc was in hiding from his old master Yoda. The planet Dantooine wasn’t to far from Coruscant so he was afraid to muve off-planet from fear of Yoda finding him. He had heard a senator ship had landed on Dantooine so he was heading to see it. As soon as he saw it he immediately reconized it as Padme’s ship. He used the force to since where she was. He ran into a med center and ran to the nearest worker he could find. “Do you know where I can find a Padme?” He asked. The man told him the room number, he nodded and headed for the room. Obi-Wan was startled when the door suddenly opened he reached for his lightsaber and pulled it out and activated it. He was even more surprised when the jedi Sip-Ganc walked in. He saw the man’s eyes widen when he saw Obi-Wan. “But the order 66, ho-” Sip stumbled. “I escaped.” “So did I.” Obi-Wan motioned to be quiet as he opened the door behind him. There was Padme standing there with two babies. Sip opened his mouth to speak when Obi-Wan shut the door again. “How.” Sip started. “It’s a long story, my apprentice Anakin Skywalker sometime during the clone wars must have married her. Later they had these.” Obi-Wan said indicating the babies. “Anakin turned to the dark side a few days ago Coruscant time.” Still partly startled Sip sat down to think. Obi-Wan sat in the chair beside him. He knew Sip was thinking about his own apprentice, Hatan Korr. He had also broke a jedi rule and had a son. He instead of turning like Anakin he through away his jedi path and never even told his own wife he had been a jedi. Obi-Wan had always liked the boy and was saddend when he had left the jedi order. He had also been saddend when the boy Ferus Olin left the order a few months before. But it was life, though he wished his apprentice had left instead of turning to the dark side as well. Darth Yoda had sent out a whole army of clones to find all the force sensitive children in the galaxy. He had over 50 canidates already he called them forth to resite the true sith code. “There is no peace, there is anger. There is no fear, there is power. There is no death, there is immortality. There is no weakness, there is the Dark Side. I am the Heart of Darkness. I know no fear, But rather I instill it in my enemies. I am the destoyer of worlds. I know the power of the Dark Side. I am the fire of hate. All the Universe bows before me. I pledge myself to the Darkness. For I have found true life, In the death of the light.” Soon every student knew this and they were ready to begin there sith training. Though his own apprintice Kyp now not already knew the code he was also living it. He was a powerful student who would soon pass even Vader’s power. Darth Yoda was at first surprised at the growing rate of the sith canidates at the newly rebuilt Sith temple. He had hoped that some would come quickly but he was still overwhelmed at the amount. Though many would fail the dark side and might turn to the weak light side of the force. TK-421 commanded the armies movment as Sarge. His mission was to take what was called a force scanner and scan the many planets of the galaxy for force sensitive children. The main place to find canidates war the planet Dathomir or known as the home of the rancors. He was on the flight to this planet on full speed toward the planet. Darth Yoda had ordered him to search every planet, so that’s what he’ll do. Tarkin had been Palpatine’s personal Grand Moff before the whole galaxy even knew his great rule. Then he had died after a few days of rule. But the Emperor had known how to clone anyone with there same memories and powers. The knoledge of how had been passed on to him. Though he didn’t think he would have had to use it so early. His knew when and how to use it and he would. The power of the cloning power was secret, he had informed his fleets that were not loyal to Darth Yoda that Palpatine was still “Alive”. From a certain point of view. They knew that he had some information that he would not tell them but they were patient, for now. He incerted the data to clone into the cloning machine. Soon they would overthrow Yoda, soon they will have revenge. But now the war for the throne would begin. The machine beeped, steam emerged from the clone shaft. He ran to the shaft and through the Sidious’s cloak into the shaft. A few minitues later Sidious emerged from the shaft. “You have don well, Tarkin.” Thank you my lord.” He grinned as he thought: The War of the Throne would now begin. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted September 29, 2006 Share Posted September 29, 2006 Several spelling mistakes. Darth Grivis, I don't mind you PMing me the Chapters and I'll correct them as much as possible. But on a happier note, I'm looking foward to the War of the Throne. Also is Hatan Korr related to Jaden Korr? Anyway I'm looking foward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted September 29, 2006 Share Posted September 29, 2006 Yah, some mistakes here and there, but it was overall a good chapter. Looking forward for the Throne War. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted September 29, 2006 Author Share Posted September 29, 2006 I have a title pic on the first chapter now Made by xmovingpicsx Thanks btw Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xmovingpicturesx Posted September 30, 2006 Share Posted September 30, 2006 I've been reading this, and I gotta say it's one of the best fics I've read this year. You gotta up the grammer level here though, as I'm sure your aware. But all in all, an amazing fic. I've got a soft spot for alternate universes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted October 2, 2006 Share Posted October 2, 2006 Ah. Alternative Universes...AU...Interesting chapter. Looking foward to see more. BTW, nice job on intro picture. I like it. xmovingpicsx, your job is graphic design? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xmovingpicturesx Posted October 2, 2006 Share Posted October 2, 2006 xmovingpicsx, your job is graphic design? On this fic? No, but i do some gfx in my spare time. If your needing something done, and this is why your asking, pm me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted October 3, 2006 Author Share Posted October 3, 2006 ^^^^^^Thanks Xmovingpicturesx Also Working on next chapter now:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted October 4, 2006 Author Share Posted October 4, 2006 Chapter 6 The War of the Throne Begins Darth Yoda summoned Kyp to his throne. As the boy approached Darth Yoda thought how powerful the boy could become. He had to be careful. “Yes my lord.” “Fully decided to make you my apprentice, I have.” He paused. “Except do you?” “Yes Master.” Kyp replied bowing to him. “Good. Now rise… Darth Zeorg.” “Thank you my master.” Zeorg turned and left the room as Yoda dismissed him. Suddenly Darth Yoda’s private holocron turned on and Governor Tarkin’s blue static image appeared. “Ah master Yoda I’m sure you remember me. “Yes.” “Good. I would like to meet you to possibly turn my fleet’s loyalty to you.” “Agree, I do.” “Good, I am coming.” Yoda turned off the holocron and prepared for the arrival of Tarkin. * * * * * * * Obi-Wan got up in the middle of the night and exited the room past a sleeping ship. He walked out into the night thinking of the past horrible days. He had watched Yoda, Darth Yoda killing Sidious and making Vader his apprentice on the holonet. He walked back to building. He entered and turned on the holonet. He sat stunned at what he saw. Behind the reporter was the Jedi temple fixed and no longer burned or scorched. Then he turned his attention to the reporter. “Darth Yoda has rebuilt the Jedi temple into the new Sith temple to assist the Empire. Obi-Wan turned it off. His face fell. Yoda had fallen to deep. Tarkin flew into the Sith Temple’s hangar. He landed on the closest space near him. He walked down the ramp of the ship. He disabled the security cameras as he walked to Yoda’s throne giving a clear path for the clones. He thought back as he prepared for the attack. He was a nobleman of the planet Eriadu who became a regional governor for the Galactic Empire and then was promoted to Grand Moff in charge of the outer rim. Then he thought back all his life. Wilhuff Tarkin was born in 64 BBY. He first met Palpatine when the latter was an obscure sector chief on the planet Naboo. The two found that they shared a basic philosophy on government; namely, that might make right. In 33 BBY, Tarkin helped Palpatine engineer the murder of the Trade Federation Directorate, which was on Tarkin's homeworld, Eriadu, for a trade summit. The pirate raids on the Trade Federation that had led to the summit had also been orchestrated by Palpatine, as was Nute Gunray's rise to power as Trade Federation viceroy. From then on, they became close allies, using each other to advance their own careers. When Palpatine took over the galaxy and formed the Galactic Empire in 19 BBY, he rewarded Tarkin for his years of service by appointing him a regional governor, a position of considerable power. * * * * * * * That war when Yoda killed the Emperor. He had had a hard and easy life now once again he shall go to war. Yoda was also thinking about his life when he was a weak Jedi fool. Standing merely 66 cm tall, Yoda is one of the members of the Jedi Council and arguably the wisest and most powerful Jedi of his time, even toward his demise, though the toll of his great age is noticeable. Over his lifetime, Yoda trained several notable Jedi, including Count Dooku, Mace Windu, Obi-Wan Kenobi (partially, before Qui-Gon Jinn took over with Obi-Wan's training and Ki-Adi-Mundi. Before the Great Jedi Purge, he had trained almost every Jedi in the Galaxy since he instructed all younglings in the Jedi Temple before they were assigned to a padawan, to a Knight, to a master. He achieved the status of Jedi Knight at the age of 50 and the rank of Jedi Master at 100. Following his training, Yoda is said to have spent 100 years in self-imposed solitude, attempting to attain a higher level of understanding of the Force. He was one of the Jedi Masters who ran the mobile academy aboard the starship Chu'unthor circa 200 BBY, leaving the ship's data tapes in the care of one of the natives when the vessel crashed on Dathomir. But all that was in the past now he was a Sith and a great one. Tarkin entered Yoda’s throne after security had been disabled. He stepped forward. “Okay Master Yoda lets get straight to business.” He started. “Agree I shall.” “I shall give you my fleet, but only if you supply them with weapons, food, and water.” Yoda hesitated. Tarkin’s fleet was the best and biggest. But the bigger it was the more credits it would cost. Finally he agreed. “Agree, I do.” “Good, now I heard a rumour that the Emperor is back.” Shocked Yoda answered him. “Look in to this you must.” Tarkin nodded and left grinning. Now the war for the throne would begin. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 4, 2006 Share Posted October 4, 2006 Not bad, not bad, some errors like Except instead of Accept, and i think you wrote had twice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth-Meatbag Posted October 4, 2006 Share Posted October 4, 2006 Interesting, very interesting, and this is for KoToR, or TSL? ~Darth Meatbag Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 4, 2006 Share Posted October 4, 2006 None, this is AU, directly after ROTS. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted October 4, 2006 Share Posted October 4, 2006 Yeah. Also Darth Grivis, I hope that edited Chapter was up to standards and I see you took me edits. Anyway good Chapter, since I already read it before everyone, except you. I'm looking foward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted October 4, 2006 Author Share Posted October 4, 2006 ^^^Ha the real reason has been discovered. Just kidding. Also Darth Meatbag this is a AU right after revenge of the sith as Jason said. Thanks for the reply Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted October 4, 2006 Share Posted October 4, 2006 On this fic? No, but i do some gfx in my spare time. If your needing something done, and this is why your asking, pm me. No, I'm just intersted in your picture. Nicely done, so I thought your job is gfx design. oh, in spare time, I do some graphic designs, too. Nice chapters! Looking forward to see more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 Several spelling mistakes. Darth Grivis, I don't mind you PMing me the Chapters and I'll correct them as much as possible. But on a happier note, I'm looking foward to the War of the Throne. Also is Hatan Korr related to Jaden Korr? Anyway I'm looking foward to more. Forgot to awnser this I did....anyway its his grandfather Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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