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Is the update here or on Fanfiction?

fine. I did read the line and didn't even think about it.

Katarn was there twice, 11 ABY, and 14 ABY. Considering we have Katarn as a Jedi at that time, it means it was ABY for the first part

wasn't sure if you got the first one. I sent to all three e-mails you gave me.

I spent almost five years working as a story teller at the renaissance faire, and was used to describing with my voice. Try reading it aloud to see how it sounds. Another thing is to remember that in first person, you can automatically go to internal dialogue. Think of all the things you might be thinking in the middle of a conversation. If you'd like, I can beta it or another work if you wish

you get a whatever prize, even if I had to slap you upside the head for you to comment

I will review it for the next collumn

Let me know when you're ready

No worries; considering I have two of my own that haven't been updated, I can't complain, now can I?

I don't know how it happened, but my smuggler's post was duplicated.Can you delete it?

Hey, kid: Still interested in getting your critic's hat on?

Let me know when you're done editing. Expect fun in 4 because there you'll see the Russian I've been whining at you for.

Kid, is there a new link to Brotherhood of Shadows? The mega site it was on has removed it

didn't think you had. I'm like Freddy Krueger; everyone knows and fears me

I've been editing Dark Side of the Mirror. Is there a way to lock or delete the thread so I can repost it?

But my own Wrath of the Witch Maiden wasn't important? To quote an old still beloved girlfriedn; 'Wheeemper!'

sure; I'll checkt out this next week

Thanks!

not yet. I may be able to give plasma, so the money will come in if I can. Right now I have to attach an external drive to even get online. Will try to post this week using this Rube Goldberg arrangement

No problem

yes. But is it proofreading or beta reading? I do them both the same way. If you have something you need looked at, let me know. My e-mail address in rihannsu92220@yahoo.com.

Notify me, and at that point I will re-review it

Over in Kavar's Hot topics I am waiting for Rake to fall into my trap. 'Those who deny the past have no future'

Did you want thereview here in messages?Or on the site?

was reviewed Friday. Saw nothing wrong with it, Interesting version of the Sith too