Jason Skywalker Posted June 5, 2006 Author Share Posted June 5, 2006 Thanks for the replies Connor.I've been very busy,so it's really hard to finish Chapter 4.I'll see what i can dig on weekend though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted June 5, 2006 Share Posted June 5, 2006 good luck long live star wars!!!! *Snip* connor, please do not advertise your fiction in another persons thread, please read our Forum Rules before posting again. I have deleted your advertising part of your post. -RH Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master Jimmy Posted June 5, 2006 Share Posted June 5, 2006 I just read your chapters, they're good Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bballforlife Posted June 7, 2006 Share Posted June 7, 2006 Just finished reading it. It's pretty good, I like it. Keep going! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted June 8, 2006 Share Posted June 8, 2006 There is tons you will like but little you will read Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niner_777 Posted June 10, 2006 Share Posted June 10, 2006 Thanks for the replies Connor.I've been very busy,so it's really hard to finish Chapter 4.I'll see what i can dig on weekend though. I'm looking forward to the next chapter, but don't rush it. I can totally relate to being busy. You don't always have time to write. That's fine. I managed whip out a new chapter yesterday. I've started another chapter today. (Most of my finals are done with ) Anyways, great job so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 10, 2006 Author Share Posted June 10, 2006 Thanks Niner,i'll check it out.Well,i don't have any more exams,i think i can get the chapter ready on my last week of school (19th-23rd) because it's mainly activities. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niner_777 Posted June 10, 2006 Share Posted June 10, 2006 Those weeks are always fun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted June 10, 2006 Share Posted June 10, 2006 I know. My activities week is on my last week. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 10, 2006 Author Share Posted June 10, 2006 Niner,it's fun because some teachers skip the classes to take us to the activities. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niner_777 Posted June 11, 2006 Share Posted June 11, 2006 I'll probably be watching movies and having study halls on my last week. Too bad its only two days. Oh, and I'll be studying for my regents tests, too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted June 11, 2006 Share Posted June 11, 2006 chap 4, i can't wait but don't rush Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jedi_exile Posted June 14, 2006 Share Posted June 14, 2006 like ive said before, good job. hey remember to check out my fanfic too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 19, 2006 Author Share Posted June 19, 2006 Thanks for the comments,Chapter 4 probly coming this week.Final week!Also,check out front page for a image.Many thanks to Sabretooth. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted June 20, 2006 Share Posted June 20, 2006 It seems everyone is stealing my front Pic idea! Well acutally, I got the idea from Alkonium's Fics. Can't wait for Chapter 4. Please be a good one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niner_777 Posted June 20, 2006 Share Posted June 20, 2006 The title pic is just a fun thing to have. I hope that Sabretooth enjoys making them. I am waiting with impatience for chapter four. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 21, 2006 Author Share Posted June 21, 2006 I think i can get it today.If not then Friday. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Niner_777 Posted June 21, 2006 Share Posted June 21, 2006 Don't worry, I'm finding it even more difficult to work on mine, even though I'm on break. During the school year, I had a schedule; I worked on it a little each day. In the summer, I've been going on all day trips, and I haven't been able to find much time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 21, 2006 Author Share Posted June 21, 2006 Well,it's going good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sabretooth Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 The title pic is just a fun thing to have. I hope that Sabretooth enjoys making them. As much as I love writing ! I don't see the title pic for this one, though. It's probably my Norton blocking it. How ironic, the creator can't see his creation... This is a very good fanfic and I'm checking this out regularly. Can't wait for the next chapter... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 22, 2006 Author Share Posted June 22, 2006 Cool,now Sabretoothe reads my fic.I just hope i get more viewers.Also Pottsie,the English-Latin translator is very cool,comes up with some good Sith names. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted June 22, 2006 Share Posted June 22, 2006 Thanks very much Jason. If I find anything else useful, I'll put them in my Fanfics. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted June 23, 2006 Author Share Posted June 23, 2006 Chapter IV right away! Chapter IV Games of Mistrust-Part II Jaden and Rosh prepared the ship, giving it a extra seat for them to fit in while Kyra talked a bit about the Dark Side with Luke: how to evade it, how to get away from it and how to fight it. Rosh then interrupted. “Kyra, the ship’s ready, we should go.” Said Rosh. “Alright, thanks Rosh. Bye Master Skywalker.” Said Kyra. She waved her hand at Luke and ran with Rosh to the ship. They saw Jaden finishing something on the engine. “Well, the Raven’s ready to go.” Said Jaden. “Also, there is one seat at the front, the other two are behind and can turn around for the turrets.” “We should get going.” Remarked Kyra. A droid set up some stairs and they climbed them. Jaden sat in the front seat and Kyra and Rosh in the backseats. He set the coordinates to Nar Shadda and blasted off. Meanwhile on a space ship, Kayn watched onto Nar Shadda. “My Lord, the Jedi’s are on their way to Nar Shadda.” Said one of Kayn’s officers. “Send starfighters Officer Skyrider. Also, tell Darth Tenebrae to go to our base on Nar Shadda. He should straighten those kids up.” Said Kayn. Officer Skyrider got on some sort of mic and ordered many star fighters to look for the Raven’s Claw while Tenebrae went to Nar Shadda. “What the? Rosh, Kyra, turrets, hurry!” said Jaden. They both got their fingers on the triggers and started shooting. Many star fighters appeared and they were skilled shooters. Jaden evaded many shots but they weren’t enough for them. They needed a trap. Rosh prepared some sort of missile and shot it. It destroyed 5 star fighters. They went all at the Raven’s Claw but Jaden simply went up and they all crashed and burned, destroying each other. “Well, we got out alive, that’s good to know. Now we should continue our trip to Nar Shadda.” Said Rosh. When they got there, the welcoming party was Han and Chewie. “Finally, you made it. I was starting to think you wouldn’t do it.” Said Han. They walked off a little to the docks. They saw a TIE Fighter landing. “Quick, hide!” said Jaden. They hided behind some boxes and saw a Sith coming out. His face was red and black, he had a cape and looked very shady. He asked the Dock Master if a ship known as the Raven’s Claw had landed but he didn’t knew. The Sith then walked off to the Jekk Jekk Tarr, a cantina which toxic fumes could kill a human. They continued their “trip” to settle the Bounty and found that a Hutt named Gordon was near there. “So all we need to do is get in there and talk to him?” asked Kyra. “Unfortunately not. We need to seek a servant of his.” Said Han. They walked off to the cantina where they found a Twi’lek. Fortunately he worked for Gordon. “Hey you there!” shouted Han. “Well well, if it isn’t Han Solo. What do you want?” asked the Twi’lek. “We want to settle a Bounty with Gordon.” “Oh, that. Well, you see, Master has certain “tastes”.” “What do you mean?” asked Kyra. “Oh, a girl. She’ll do nicely.” “What does he mean?” asked Rosh. “Well, kid, to settle the bounty you’ll have to…dance for Gordon. And to make matters worse, you have to wear a certain suit.” Said Han. The Twi’lek showed them the suit. Kyra didn’t like it but she knew it was the only way to settle the bounty. “Alright, I’ll do it.” Said Kyra as she put the dress on. The Twi’lek then brought them to Gordon’s place. Kyra started dancing but eventually Gordon fell asleep as the Twi’lek ran off. Kyra put her normal clothes on and ignited her lightsaber. “Wake up!” she shouted. Gordon immediately woke up. “Ha, wah, oh, wait, what do you want?” said Gordon noticing she had her lightsaber ignited. “I want you to stop the bounty we have on our heads!” she shouted once again. Gordon looked right and left and then pressed a button. The Sith they saw came out. “Tenebrae, deal with them!” said Gordon. Tenebrae ignited his dual red lightsabers while Jaden and Rosh ignited theirs. The battle lasted about ten minutes with red, violet, orange and yellow sparks flying. Eventually Tenebrae knocked down both Jaden and Rosh and Kyra into Gordon. He was about to stab her when she flipped and rolled on his shoulders and he stabbed Gordon, killing him. Tenebrae then turned around only to be decapitated by Kyra’s spinning lightsaber throw. Finally it was done, there was no longer a bounty on their heads and Darth Tenebrae was dead. “That’s for making me wear that dress!” said Kyra with a angry look. Jaden and Rosh calmed her down and to relax a little, they went to the Cantina and played a little Pazaak and then finally went to the Raven’s Claw to go back to Yavin IV. “Master, Darth Tenebrae is dead.” Said Cyrus. “It does not matter Cyrus, he was weak anyway. Let’s see how this meddling kids get out of my next idea.” Said Kayn as he laughed a evil laugh. Rate, hate, advice! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted June 23, 2006 Share Posted June 23, 2006 Good Chapter. Took a while though... . Looking foward to next Chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted June 23, 2006 Share Posted June 23, 2006 cool connor, I agree with Jason Skywalker's statement below, no more one or two word posts ok? Remember our penalties for spamming. -RH Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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