Diego Varen Posted October 3, 2006 Share Posted October 3, 2006 Yay a cameo of me. Although I don't like having my name being online, for I feel uncomfortable about it being there. Could you just sort of like, just keep it as Pottsie please, if that's alright with you Jason? Thanks. Good Chapter though and I like Hanharr being alive. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Catto Posted October 3, 2006 Share Posted October 3, 2006 I like it. I like the Frist Person views in stories, because it makes ya feel, you are actually apart of the whole thing lol .. Anyway ... Great story, and im looking forward to the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 3, 2006 Author Share Posted October 3, 2006 Sorry Pottsie, didn't knew, i'll change. Also, i'm currently writing the next one. Please do not use any person's real name on the forums. This is for everyone's security. Real names will be deleted. --Jae Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted October 3, 2006 Share Posted October 3, 2006 Good chaps Jason I like this:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 3, 2006 Author Share Posted October 3, 2006 Konichiwa Jae, Konichiwa. Also, Hanharr will play some what of a major role in this Episode. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 4, 2006 Author Share Posted October 4, 2006 Now it is really chapter III! Chapter III : The Search Begins In the dark and dirty halls of the Dark Hunter guild, Hanharr sat on a throne. He appeared to be on a bad mood, and was not to be disturbed. “Uh, master?” A lowly Dark Hunter servant told Hanharr. He got up and grabbed him by his throat. “What is it?” He roared in his native language of Shyriiwook. The servant gurgled, “The Dark Jedi is here to see you.” Hanharr growled and threw the servant against the wall beside, killing him. The doors opened and the heads and limbs of the guards rolled into the Throne Room before a dark cloaked and robed figure walked in, the noise of the steps heard everywhere. “Such anger and violence,” He said, noticing the dead servant, “You did not need to do that, for it was unnecessary. He might had also been useful” “Save me those stupid manipulative Sith morals. Besides you've killed my guards as well." He said. "They denied me entrance. It was needed." "Whatever, I’ve had enough of the old woman and her betrayals a year ago. What is It that you need, for you’re wasting my time,” He growled. The man’s grin could be seen across the dark room, “Sources tell me that your rivals have that great soldier named Jake escorting two…Jedi Padawans. Sources also tell me that they’re going to sneak up here, get the datapad, and the holocron I gave you, and put in fake ones.” “Leave now!” He roared, “I’ll have my top man taking care of them.” “You, are a fool. Perhaps I should tell that new Jedi Master, oh, what’s her name…oh yes, Mira.” Hanharr roared out loud, and it could be heard in almost all over the base. “Find them, kill them, mutilate them, put them in a bag and give it to Mira. Then kill her,” He growled, sitting in his throne again. “With pleasure,” The Dark Jedi said, as the red blade of his Lightsaber ignited and lit up the room. He then de-activated it, and left the room. --------------------------- “So, where exactly are you taking us? We’ve been wandering for hours now,” I told Pottsie. “A hour and a half precisely,” He corrected me, “Besides, it wouldn’t be much of a secret if it was just besides our base, now wouldn’t it?” “He’s got a point Jason, it’s probably hidden seven feet under,” Cameron told me. “Correction. It’s going to BE seven feet under,” Pottsie corrected her, “We secretly put a permacrete detonator in there that no-one noticed. When we have the datapad, and you guys have your holocron, we’re going to blow it up.” “Wait a minute, there’s a catch here. If you put in there the permacrete detonator, how come you don’t know where the base is?” I asked him. “Pretty simple actually. We lost connection with our spy midway. He’s probably dead right now, but we knew the detonator was in and secret, since the lectures of it’s materials here in Coruscant where of the chart. And since it was made of products that don’t get on Coruscant, not even on the black market, it was easy to know.” Pottsie told us. “Pretty smart,” Cameron congratulated them. “Well, I wouldn’t be Rayarn’s right hand if I wasn’t a great tactical leader. Now, let’s continue our trip.” We continued flying on the air speeder, but suddenly, many blaster bolts flew at our side. “What the heck?” He shouted, looking at the flying shooters, “Kriffin’ hell, tighten your seatbelts!” I carefully opened my window, got out my blaster pistol and shot repeatedly at their speeder, I missed some shots since I wasn’t very skilled, but luck, or the Force was with me, and with one shot on a sensitive spot, I shot them down. Their speeder was crashing full speed at the ground. I got up and put his feet at the window. “Hey, where the heck are you going?” Pottsie, asked, but I jumped at the full speed onto the ground. “I hate it when he does that,” Cameron said, obviously noticing my leap of faith, “Follow him!” Pottsie took a sharp turn diagonally and down, following me. I was falling, and eventually fell onto their speeder. They were knocked unconscious, but I grabbed them, and jumped with the Force as their speeder crashed on the ground and blew up. We landed roughly, followed by Pottsie and Cameron. “Alright scum, tell me, where is the Dark Hunter’s Headquarters?” I yelled to a Nikto. But before he could say something, he was shot repeatedly on the chest as it blew up. We looked up, seeing a possible Bounty Hunter, donned in a black full-body suit covered by dark grey armour, and a cloak concealing his face. He quickly turned around and jumped. Looked like we had a new target. I then turned my attention again to the dead Nikto. I noticed a card, just like a few hours ago. I took it and inspected it. “Well, Cameron, Pottsie, looks like we’ve got ourselves a direction to the base,” I said, showing them the card. “I don’t see anything,” Pottsie observed. “We see it through the Force Pottsie, to see it without it, one would need to carefully rip the card apart, and then see the map inside it,” Cameron said. “Well, we’re just wasting valuable time. Let’s get going,” I said. We all entered the speeder, lifted to the air and blasted off in the base’s direction. --------------------------- Well, whadda ya' think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted October 4, 2006 Share Posted October 4, 2006 Good Chapter, which is slightly short, but no matter. Also I doubt Hanharr would know Kreia's Sith title. If I remember TSL correctly, he always called her old woman. I'm looking foward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 4, 2006 Author Share Posted October 4, 2006 Hmm, you're right. Edity edity! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted October 5, 2006 Share Posted October 5, 2006 Nice Chapters. Same as Pott's opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 Thanks for the comments. Here's a pic of Jason's robe without the cloak: Here. I'd have a Cameron one if PCGM wasn't down again... Also, just for all ya' "The Adventures of Jaden Lennon" RP and Fic, both Amber Skye and Ewan Kenobi will star on it, except Ewan will have a different surname. They will also have a new companion to them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted October 6, 2006 Share Posted October 6, 2006 Nice to know Jason. I wonder who this new companion will be. Nice robe too. I like the Prequel style robes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 6, 2006 Author Share Posted October 6, 2006 Wow, who would know i would get such a fast reply? "Who else than Pottsie? It's Pottsie, it's Pottsie!" Family Guy quote changed Anyways, i'm writing the fourth chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted October 7, 2006 Share Posted October 7, 2006 But it's awfully similiar to AOTC the movie...Like the changelin was killed by Jango Fett on Coruscant. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 7, 2006 Author Share Posted October 7, 2006 Ha, you mean the Nikto guy being shot repeatdly? It's the Dark Jedi from back the throne, he was just concealing himself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted October 8, 2006 Share Posted October 8, 2006 Ha, you mean the Nikto guy being shot repeatdly? It's the Dark Jedi from back the throne, he was just concealing himself. Yeah, Nikto guy was shot, but only difference is that changelin was shot by a dart, not a bullet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 8, 2006 Author Share Posted October 8, 2006 Chapter IV : The Soul of a Hero The airspeeder landed right in the front of an abandoned warehouse on the Coruscant Market District. We got outside of it, and Pottsie opened the door of the warehouse. Luckily, nobody noticed, since they were off busy minding their own businesses. There were many crates, but no people. It was empty of humans. Pottsie walked up to a wall, and put his hand over it, waving around, until he finally pushed his hand deeper into it and a door-sized part of the wall opened, an they made their way in. The halls of the base were dark and wet, and two guards stood in ouy way. “Hey, what the, you can’t be in…” One of them said before both being Force Pushed to the ground below by me. Out of nowhere came two guards from each corridors to the right and left. They were 4 in total, and were armed with Heavy Repeater Rifles, which were fast and deadly. Me and Pottsie took cover behind opposite walls and gave Cameron cover shots, who had rushed to them with her Vibrosword, also deflecting shots for her Soresu style training. She crouched, spun around, tripped the guard with her leg, and slashed at his chest-plate. He screamed in pain, and fell to the ground. I shot one right in the head, making him jump behind, and Pottsie threw a Vibrodagger at the other one, killing him instantly. I then used the Force to enhance my speed, ran at the remaining one, jumped and spun around, kicked him in the face, and then Force Bolted the dizzy guard to the wall. We continued our way through the base, the Dark Hunters offering little to none resistance. Either we were too strong, they were too weak, or the most probably, it was a trap. We then noticed the mutilated bodies of dead guards. We reached a door, and there it was, the Wookie known as Hanharr, donned in a cortosis armour, sitting in his throne. “I knew you’d come,” He growled, “You Jedi are too predictable. Although, I had my doubts about the one who accompanies you.” “Hanharr, right?” I asked, “Jason Kenobi, Jedi Padawan, Master Mira sends her regards.” The Wookie roared, got out of his seat immediately and took out his twin Ryyk Blades, ready for action. The walls burst and dozens of members jumped of them. Behind them then appeared the mysterious dark grey - armoured man. He pulled down his hood, revealing his face. It was very much “handsome” for a Dark Jedi like him. “Fools,” He said, the ruby blade of his Lightsaber igniting, “You will be the first idiot Jedi’s to feel the true power of the True Sith!” “Jason, Cameron,” Pottsie told us, taking out two silvery rods from a hidden pocket and threw them at us. Our Lightsabers. We ignited them, and the amethyst and sapphire blades came out, ready for battle. Suddenly, another blast was heard, and many of the Tracking Bothan members came out behind us, heavily armed with blaster rifles and armoured, also in cortosis armour. Blaster bolts where suddenly heard and seen through all over the room, and Hanharr’s throne went down, revealing a secret passage. The crazed Wookie rushed at Pottsie with his Ryyk Blades, but the battle veteran quickly took out his Echani Vibrosword and parried the blow, as the two exchanged more blows. Me and Cameron were simply staring at the Dark Jedi, our Lightsabers ignited. “Strange. I thought Sith and Dark Jedi were about extinct.” Cameron said. “You were right missy. They’re about extinct, but the True Sith are not.” “Who’re you anyway? Some idiot who thinks he’s a Sith?” “I, am Darth Feros, minion of the Masters, and you are Jedi, soon to be deceased!” He roared, running at us. We immediately entered into a Ataru and Soresu stance. He charged with his Lightsaber, but we blocked and pushed it up. He spun around, in an attempt to get us off-guard, but was of no use, for we parried the blows, and his blade flew upwards as a it clashed strong with mine. I tried to stab him, but he dodged to his left, and Cameron behind him, tried to slash him from above, but he simply and quickly jumped his Lightsaber backwards to block the blow. He then brought his lightsaber up, and the end of his Lightsaber, hidden by the darkness, revealed another ruby blade. We duelled for some more time, mostly his staffsaber blocking our blows. I then jumped and slashed to him, who was under me, while Cameron tried to stab him. He quickly blocked both blows, and I landed behind him. We then crossed sabers as I turned around, and me and Cameron swung downwards, and where clashing in a saber lock. After a few seconds of strength, Feros kicked me in the gut, and Force Pushed me back, and Force Choked Cameron for a while, before Pottsie, who had got ridden of Hanharr while other members dealt with him, shot at him repeatedly, but he Force Pushed her as well onto the ground, and deflected the blaster bolts. Pottsie then ran at him, and clashed his Echani Vibrosword with Feros’ Staffsaber. They duelled, with Pottsie gaining the advantage and upper hand with the most offense while Feros simply laughed out loud and blocked the blows. Pottsie kicked him in the gut, and was swinging upwards when Feros pulled his Staffsaber apart into two Lightsabers, thrust the hilt of one to Pottsie’s face, spun around, and stabbed him with his other Lightsaber, in backhand. “NOOO!!!!” I shouted out, seeing Pottsie’s apparent death. But he wasn’t dead, not yet. Blood spit out of his mouth, and he smiled as Feros looked confused. “If I’m going down, you’re going with me,” He gasped, slashing Feros from waist down with his Vibrosword. Feros fell to the ground, dead, and Pottsie fell slowly, also dead. Hanharr, who had killed the ones who where dealing with him, seeing this, laughed out loud. I was angry, but couldn’t let it flow through me, but it did. I immediately got up, ignited my Lightsaber and charged at Hanharr. I swung powerful blows, and all Hanharr could do was block them with his Ryyk Blades, who apparently, had a cortosis weave. Hanharr struggled a lot in an attempt to push me backwards, but I gave a side-ways swing that sliced his hand off his arm. The Wookiee roared in pain, and to add insult to injury, I sliced his chest plate in half, out of it coming out the datapad. The Wookiee quickly ran at the halved Sith Warrior, picked him up and ran. At that time, the Tracking Bothans had won, but the cost was dear, since Pottsie was fatally injured. I turned my attention to Pottsie, who was being aided by Cameron. I ran at him, and crouched to one knee only. “No, don’t go Pottsie!” I shouted. “It’s…it’s okay…I was expecting this…for a long time now…Good Luck…and May The Force Be With You.” Those where is dying breaths. “May the Force be with you forever, Pottsie,” I said in unison with Cameron as a tear burst out of our eyes. I cleaned mine, and picked him up. A member came up to us and gave us the holocron. We got out of the base quickly with every single surviving member, and then detonated the bomb, as the base was buried seven feet under as tears flew by the wind of Coruscant. He was taken onto the Jedi Tower, where the Jedi Council, me, Cameron, T3, who was now reunited with us, Rayarn and some members of the Tracking Bothans. He was cremated, like any Jedi is when he dies. Hopefully, he would be one with the Force. For he died with the soul of a hero. --------------- "So Cold" by Breaking Benjamin would be an interesting theme for this chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted October 8, 2006 Share Posted October 8, 2006 Damn, I'm dead. Pottsie seems to remind me of Canderous in many ways, but he died in a glorious battle. Well done. I hope he returns as a Force Ghost, but I doubt that will happen. Good Chapter by the way. I'm looking foward to the next Chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 8, 2006 Author Share Posted October 8, 2006 Damn, you reply fast. Thanks. Now, finally, they will leave Coruscant. But won't reach any planet until about Chapters VI/VII. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 9, 2006 Author Share Posted October 9, 2006 Well, i've got a sorta-kinda robe like Cameron's. Here Only difference is that she has green boots, the robe is slightly lighter and the cloak, well, that's not difficult, now is it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 13, 2006 Author Share Posted October 13, 2006 Well, school's starting to interfere more, i'll see if i can get a chapter this weekend. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted October 14, 2006 Share Posted October 14, 2006 Well, school's starting to interfere more, i'll see if i can get a chapter this weekend. I know how you feel Jason... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 22, 2006 Author Share Posted October 22, 2006 Well, toda yi'm going to the movies, and the chapter is going to be quite long i believe, but i guess i can have it done today at night or tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted October 24, 2006 Share Posted October 24, 2006 Well, toda yi'm going to the movies, and the chapter is going to be quite long i believe, but i guess i can have it done today at night or tomorrow. Today at night = Tonight I'm looking foward to it. Also, a bit off-topic, but what movie did you see? Perhaps it gave you some inspiration for your Fic? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 24, 2006 Author Share Posted October 24, 2006 Yeah, you're right. Hmm, perhaps. It was Alex Rider : Operation Stormbreaker. Stay on topic and avoid the spammy posts, please, folks. --Jae Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted October 26, 2006 Author Share Posted October 26, 2006 K, so, sorry Jae, but, also, we have a new banner, made by Sabretooth, all credits go to him. Now, while on school, i fell, and made a wound, i already got some stiches though. I think that now maybe i'll have more time to write though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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