Kas'!m Posted December 19, 2006 Share Posted December 19, 2006 Not necessarily Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted December 19, 2006 Author Share Posted December 19, 2006 Good fic Anakin also about Elon isn't Revan's last name Skywalker? I don't think Revan being a Skywalker is such a good idea, I do not believe Anakin and Revan were related.... @Anglu(below me) I haven't worked on The Mando Wars while LF was down, because, I wasn't sure how long LF was going to be down. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anglu Posted December 19, 2006 Share Posted December 19, 2006 Nah, that would be too easy... In my fic, Revan's last name is Syrtis, but I'm not sure if I'll change it.. And where's the next chapter?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rabish Bini Posted December 20, 2006 Share Posted December 20, 2006 That's what I did Anakin. LF was down but I didn't do anything on my fic. Meh. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anglu Posted December 20, 2006 Share Posted December 20, 2006 @Anakin: Okay. This question wasn't meant that serious.. ;-) I just want to know youw your story continues. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted December 22, 2006 Author Share Posted December 22, 2006 Chapter 6 Revan, Arren, Valen, Kreia, Malak, Talia, and Elon all stood above Malachor V. "Valen, Talia, and Elon... all three of you are going down to Malachor's surface.... Kreia, Malak, and I are going to scout out this planet's natural resources for the Republic." Revan said.... "Arren you stay here, until I get back." Valen, Talia, and Elon went to the surface as they were commanded by Revan. Elon, and Talia's purple blades were ignited, but Valen's double bladed Orange was not. "Master is there a problem?" Talia asked. "Problem... problem... YES! There is, I just remembered we need to get off of Malachor's surface!" Valen replied. "But Valen, Malachor reminds me of Dantooine, the lush gardens, the grass, the Iriaz, and the Kath Hounds." Elon said. "You don't understand, Malachor is going to become a Graveyard!" Valen said scooping up Valen and Talia and taking them to his shuttle, by the time they were up at the capital ship, Bao-Dur had started the Mass Shadow Generator. Half the planet blew to smitherines, and the other half all that was left were HUGE rocks and boulders. From the Mass Shadow Generator, came forth Beasts of Terror and darkness, Storm Beasts. Revan returned to the ship, and found that Mandalore was taken prisoner. "Take him down to Malachor V, I will deal with him and the other Mandalorians there." Revan said. Even though the Mandalorians on Malachor were dead, the Mandalorians didn't give up. Thousands of troops rained from the ships and began to battle what remained of the Republic's forces. There were two Mandalorian Generals left, one's name was Canderous Ordo, the other one was Mandalore himself, but he was captured by Revan. Canderous set out to free the captive Mandalore, but when he saw Revan walking up to Mandalore, he sent a battalion of troops to fight the battle for him.... he knew Revan would kill him, if he went to fight him. Revan tossed a double-vibro sword at Mandalore, "You will fight me, and the winner will declare the Galaxy his." Mandalore picked it up and ran towards Revan, but Revan just moved to the side, and the sword cut Mandalore's leg. He screamed in pain. Revan ignited his own double-bladed red lightsaber, and charged at Mandalore, the Mandalorian dodged a few blows, but then at when Mandalore thought he could get Revan and kill him, Revan Force Choked him and then quickly sliced off his head. Revan bent down and picked up Mandalore's helmet and shoved it in his inventory pack. He just realized that a few Mandalorians were charging him, but he killed them easily with Force Lightning. Revan went back to his ship and found Arren Kae in pain. "Arren what is it?" But before she could reply, a droid came into the room and shooed Revan out. About two hours later, Revan heard a baby crying... What the... Revan thought. He walked in the room to find his wife dead, but a baby girl in the droids arms. Revan took the girl from the droid, and stared at her. The little girl had silver hair, like her father, but the facial features of her mother. "Brianna..." Revan said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted December 22, 2006 Share Posted December 22, 2006 Good Chapter as always Anakin. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted December 23, 2006 Author Share Posted December 23, 2006 Epilogue Revan was building a droid, when his daughter Brianna walked in. "Yes, what is it?" Revan asked. Brianna said nothing, but her expression said it all. "The Jedi are looking for a way to reach the Star Forge." Revan said. Brianna shook her head, and her long silver hair was slapping Revan in the face until she stopped. "Daddy, Malak won't leave me alone." She finally said. "What do you mean?" Revan asked. "He keeps telling me that I'm weak, that I don't know anything about battle." Brianna continued. "But, I have a special ability, an ability that not even you have...." "What? What ability?" Revan asked. "Battle Meditation... I can use it to stop the Republic." Brianna said. Revan was shocked, his daughter had Battle Meditation, like Bastila, and he didn't even know it. Her connection to the Force was just as strong as his and Arren's combined. Which in retrospect was very, very powerful. The Force was getting Darker by the minute.... as Malak approached. "Your daughter is weak Revan!" Malak said. But Brianna had enough, she sought aid from the Force, and Force Choked the dumb apprentice, and then shot Force Lightning at him, making him scream in pain. "Weak am I, then why can I feel no pain, and you can?" Brianna said, laughing. "Let him go..." Revan said. Brianna did as she was told, and then ran off to her room aboard the Star Forge. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rabish Bini Posted December 23, 2006 Share Posted December 23, 2006 *Wipes tear from eye* That was a great chapter and epilogue, kudos to you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted December 23, 2006 Author Share Posted December 23, 2006 o.....k? I'm going to assume that was a compliment, so Thanks for the Compliment.... and you too Pottsie, both of ya'll thanks for the compliment Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted December 23, 2006 Share Posted December 23, 2006 Nice chapter...So bad it had to end...But however it's a nice fiction and I'm looking forward to see more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted December 23, 2006 Share Posted December 23, 2006 I agree. So bad it had to end. I think you're pulling a Pottsie. Anyway, I was glad to help and a bit off-topic, but CSI, I like the new Avatar. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted December 23, 2006 Author Share Posted December 23, 2006 Thank you both for the comments, but I'm going to working on the Chosen One, so look for chapter 1 anytime soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anglu Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 hmmm, so Revan has a daughter... Very interesting! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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