CSI Posted January 1, 2007 Share Posted January 1, 2007 Woot , nice Pottsie !!!! @ SIon , join me and together we'll smite the Jedi and Sith . Hey, you can not do this...Do it via PM, not in reply... However good chapter... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 2, 2007 Author Share Posted January 2, 2007 No new Chapter, but if you want to make my Exile, Sera Tana, this is the portrait to use. Her name is obviously Sera Tana and her classes are Jedi Consular and Jedi Master and her romances are Atton, but also Mical if you wish. On-topic, I don't know when the next Chapter will be released, but it will star Master Vandar and the Chapter will be set a year before TSL. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted January 2, 2007 Share Posted January 2, 2007 Great chapter Pottsie, great job! I really liked Sion's "scarring". Also, i always picture the female Exile the one that has her hair tied to her back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 2, 2007 Author Share Posted January 2, 2007 Great chapter Pottsie, great job! I really liked Sion's "scarring". Also, i always picture the female Exile the one that has her hair tied to her back. Thanks Jason. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 3, 2007 Author Share Posted January 3, 2007 No new Chapter, but in case you're wondering, this is the portrait I have for my Revan, Diego Varen. I might also write a Fic version of my Sion RP, The Hunt for the Exile. What do you think? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Anakin Skywalker Posted January 3, 2007 Share Posted January 3, 2007 Sounds like a good Idea Pottsie, as long as you don't copy from the RP lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 3, 2007 Author Share Posted January 3, 2007 Sounds like a good Idea Pottsie, as long as you don't copy from the RP lol I won't. Unless if I have Writer's Block. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Catto Posted January 5, 2007 Share Posted January 5, 2007 I likes. Great work Pottsie. I didnt like Sion as much as i had liked Nihilus, but this Fic has caught my attention and made me notice sion a bit more of a powerful Sith Lord, instead of a body of a mashed up sweet potatoe with a head . (Not exactly how i came up with a similarity as distant as that, but anyways) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 5, 2007 Author Share Posted January 5, 2007 Thanks Mr_BFA and your view on Sion is... Odd, if you don't mind me saying so . Anyway, I have good news. I'm now working on Chapter 6 after a short break with the bad Writer's Block. I hope to post it later tonight. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 5, 2007 Author Share Posted January 5, 2007 Chapter VI - Revenge of the Sith Four years after joining Traya on Malachor V, Sion, was now known as the broken one by Kreia. Prior to Sion and Nihilus exiling of Kreia, Sion was hunting for his old master, Vandar. Vandar had trained Sion, when he was a Youngling as a Jedi. Sion had believed his old master to have died on Katarr, when Nihilus destroyed all life on the planet. Sion had heard that Nihilus had spared only one person. A Miraluka. Visas Marr. Sion had no idea why Nihilus had any use for her. If Sion was Nihilus, he would have killed her, right where she stood. However, she had become Nihilus’ personal slave and had even learned the ways of the dark side under him. Little did the two Sith Lords know that Visas would join the Exile a year later. Sion had tracked Vandar to Dxun, the planet where one of the battles against the Mandalorians had begun, during the Mandalorian Wars. Sion had never really been to Dxun in all of his life, but he knew that a Mandalorian clan, Ordo had built their base on the planet. Sion knew that Vandar wouldn’t be there. The Jedi had never trusted Mandalorians. Even after the war, they still didn’t trust them. The Sith didn’t trust them either. ***** Away from the clan Ordo’s camp, Sion was scouting for Vandar. He hadn’t found him yet, but Sion knew that Vandar wouldn’t be able to escape from the planet. Not if he was on the run from Nihilus. Despite Sion’s hatred for Nihilus, he knew that Nihilus was powerful enough to cause planets to decay and suffer under his unsatisfied hunger. How could Vandar escape the wrath of Nihilus? There was only one explanation. Since Vandar was the grand Jedi Master of the order. The most powerful Jedi Master of the order. But it still didn’t add up. “Sion,” A familiar voice began, “Long time, no see.” Sion knew that person’s voice. It was Vandar. Sion turned round and saw him. He hadn’t changed. He was still the small, brown-green coloured Jedi Master, Sion had always known. Sion noticed Master Vandar unclip his Lightsaber from his belt, but he didn’t ignite it. Sion smiled. “Master Vandar,” Sion began, “It’s been a while.” “It has,” Vandar agreed, “My escape from Katarr wasn’t the most pleasant experience I’ve had.” Sion ignited his Lightsaber, startling Vandar. Vandar ignited his Lightsaber, which ignited a green blade. Sion knew now that the battle between the two of them would be a duel of fighting, not a duel of words. Vandar leapt around, trying to get a good attack on Sion, but even he knew that he wouldn’t be able to kill his old apprentice. Sion was too strong with the dark side. When Vandar was in midair, Sion threw his Lightsaber into his body, which caused Vandar to scream in pain as his body fell to the floor. “Sion…” Vandar whispered, as his life left his body. Sion smiled as he walked away, remembering to take his Lightsaber, before forgetting it. He decided he would return to Malachor, to discuss with Nihilus about exiling Traya. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted January 5, 2007 Share Posted January 5, 2007 Good chapter Pottsie, the only mistake is Vandar is brown not green. But still good:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 5, 2007 Author Share Posted January 5, 2007 Actually, to be honest, he is more green than brown, but he is more brown compared to Yoda. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted January 5, 2007 Share Posted January 5, 2007 true but its good and thats all that matters(from a point of view) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 5, 2007 Author Share Posted January 5, 2007 I've edited the Chapter, so it says brown-green coloured Jedi Master instead. I'll write the next Chapter when I have time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted January 5, 2007 Share Posted January 5, 2007 Okay Can't wait. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Catto Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 Another great chapter Pottsie. Awaiting for the next installment of ... Well .. you get what im saying lol. Once again, great work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 Well the next Chapter will be another duel, with Lonna Vash. It will be my intake on how she was killed by Sion. Thanks for the comments Mr_BFA. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 Good chapter Pottsie. Can't wait for the next. Out of Kavar, Zez-Kai, Atris and Vrook, i think Vash was the one that was goodest with Exile- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 Thanks Jason. I'm sticking with canon, so: Kreia will still kill Vrook, Zez and Kavar on Dantooine. And yes, I think Lonna was the nicest to the Exile, if the cut content had been in the game. Feel free to answer these questions, while I write the next Chapter. 1. What do you think of Sion so far and do you think my portrayal of him is good? 2. Do you think my descriptions in the Fic are good? 3. What is your favourite Chapter and least favourite Chapter so far? 4. Do you prefer seeing Sion’s past or seeing events that we already know about? 5. Would you like to see more input from other characters than Sion? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HappyMojo Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 Some of the chapters are a bit edgy - But all in all they are a nice read. It's always good to get som substans to a story, you know quite well. Keep it up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 Thanks to the comments HappyMojo. I've decided to put Lonna Vash in the story, since she isn't seen much in TSL and she needs her time to shine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HK-42 Posted January 6, 2007 Share Posted January 6, 2007 1. What do you think of Sion so far and do you think my portrayal of him is good? Yes hes good 2. Do you think my descriptions in the Fic are good? Yes 3. What is your favourite Chapter and least favourite Chapter so far? hmm i like them all 4. Do you prefer seeing Sion’s past or seeing events that we already know about? of cource 5. Would you like to see more input from other characters than Sion? Doesn't matter to me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 6, 2007 Author Share Posted January 6, 2007 I'm planning to write two more Fics, both of them set before the Echoes of Darkness Fic. So now, the new line up is: The Search for the Exile (Three months after KOTOR) Into the Unknown (Immediately after TSL) Echoes of Darkness (Four months after ITU) Unsatisfied Hunger (One year after EOD) The Quest for Absolution (Four years after UH) Accounts (Immediately after TQFO) This Sion Fic no longer counts around the Sera Tana Saga. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 9, 2007 Author Share Posted January 9, 2007 I have news. I haven't been pleased with the Echoes of Darkness Fic or Unsatisfied Hunger Fic. They are rushed I admit and the plot is bad. After I finish this Fic, I shall return and re-write the Echoes of Darkness, before re-writing Unsatisfied Hunger and then going to write The Quest for Absolution and Accounts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HappyMojo Posted January 9, 2007 Share Posted January 9, 2007 The good old iterative process never fails Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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