SkywalkerRules Posted February 26, 2010 Share Posted February 26, 2010 A long time ago, during the Sith-Imperial War, I saw her. A wondrous, young woman. Her golden hair swayed in the breeze as she danced, and her eyes reflected the bright blue skies whenever she smiled. This young woman's heart was cheerful as a child; an angelic voice of hers that echoed through my mind. Yet, she seemed sadden for the Galaxy. For me... She saw me as a hero, not a bounty hunter or rogue. Her comfort was like no other; a guardian spirit. Her love was her strength, and nothing, not even a Sith, could take that love away from her. Now... she is gone from me. I grieve with anger, guilt, and sadness. But thank the Force, she did not die in vain from a lightsaber's pierce, a blaster wound, or anything horrible. But that a deep sleep took her. The Force be with you Lyna. My love, my friend. Thank you for leading me to the road of redemption, and not destruction. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Te Darasuum Mandalor Posted February 26, 2010 Share Posted February 26, 2010 that was truly excellent! a wonderful poem! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SkywalkerRules Posted February 27, 2010 Author Share Posted February 27, 2010 Aww, thank you! I'm still learning how to make good poetry. Think I'm getting there a little. Anyways, thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kyvios Posted February 27, 2010 Share Posted February 27, 2010 that was really good Skywalker ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SkywalkerRules Posted February 27, 2010 Author Share Posted February 27, 2010 A thousand thanks, Kyvios! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Catto Posted February 28, 2010 Share Posted February 28, 2010 Filled with emotion and a bittersweet love. A nice piece, Skywalker. A nice piece indeed! The use of words work in such a way that you paint a portrait of a story in complete detail in only a few stanza's. A wondrous achievement! It reminds me a little of Atton's tale to the Exile about when he was with the Sith, although this tale is more like-able in my opinion. You say you are learning? I say you are nearly there! Very close! Keep at it, Skywalker and I am sure that you will be able to fluently construct poems that are wonderful as they are detailed. Awesome work! I'm not a great poet, but I like to think that I know talent when I see it, haha. Looking forward to more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
machievelli Posted March 2, 2010 Share Posted March 2, 2010 ask JM12 to review this... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SkywalkerRules Posted March 4, 2010 Author Share Posted March 4, 2010 Yes sir. And thanks very much, Mr_BFA! Yeah, I do love poetry. It connects with paintings and artistic things very much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediMaster12 Posted March 16, 2010 Share Posted March 16, 2010 read -JM12 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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