battle111 Posted October 30, 2012 Share Posted October 30, 2012 l hope everyone will like my maded story l was prepearing all weak here it is Star Wars Knights of the old republic Chapter one Return of the jedi In the galaxy's darkest hour the mighty jedi exile and his compennions went to the malachor system to find darth traya.The great jedi knight exile went in to the deadly confrantation with traya to ditermen the fate of the galaxy the great sith lord darth traya was prepering to create a wound in the force much greater than the great jedi knight exile coused by going to the mandalorian wars but the great exile defeated kreia but before killing her kreia spoked That the treat was not just malachor 5 but also the war in the unnoun regions that revan went to fight then he disaited to go to the unnoun regions to find revan. Visas staid at malachor to wait for ather jedi knights to come but there weren't any jedi comming after then the great jedi master Bastila was prepearing to train her child Shatyl Shan to restore the jedi order but after then the republic has founded out that there is a new threat to the galaxy the ruttles sith emperor has risin from the unnoun regions with a sith armada to begin a conquast of the republic the great jedi exile returned from the unnaun regions he arrived at the planet telos to bring good news to admural carth abaut Revan.Exile told carth that Revan survived the war but he was no were to be found then carth desited to begin finding clues were Revan is gone to.Mean wyle the great Sith Emperor has began an attack on the planet Naboo the Great queen of Naboo has demanted a short nagociation but the Emperor did't agread to the queen's negociations The Emperor has sended a big army to the planet they quckly seased the city of Naboo then the Queen has sended a distress call to Republic. Now the Republic is prepearing a plan to free Naboo.......... The next part of my maded story will come next time this is only part one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
battle111 Posted October 30, 2012 Author Share Posted October 30, 2012 Ops l did't made to Fic oh no!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LDR Posted October 30, 2012 Share Posted October 30, 2012 I'm assuming English isn't your main language? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
battle111 Posted October 30, 2012 Author Share Posted October 30, 2012 I'm assuming English isn't your main language? Well it is :ohdear::ohdear: but now l'm realy scarrred au man how can l forget l need to make it to Fic uf,uf au man now realy,realy scarred:ugh: l'm just trying to be creative by making a story Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
duster Posted October 30, 2012 Share Posted October 30, 2012 I like it.What is interesting is that you make a combination between the two KOTOR's.I wonder will this story make Lucas arts create a new KOTOR.The only bad thing is that you have misspeled some words:xp:. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
battle111 Posted October 30, 2012 Author Share Posted October 30, 2012 Ops sorry if l misspeled some words Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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