JediMaster12 Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 This is a poem that I wrote at the spur of the moment for KFM. It involves Revan asking Carth to forgive her for being Darth Revan. Asking for Forgiveness I know you feel the pain inside And in your heart your thoughts divide You seek to know a darkened truth Where lies an existent root Of hurtful lies and painful words That once flew away with graceful birds I met you and you met me It seemed that it was meant to be We shared the burden with a hope In order our enemies be smote We fought and bled side by side Growing strong as a rising tide Still you harbored in your heart Distrust that threatened not to part To conquer we fought again And start anew we began Time went by and you showed me A concern and fierce sense of loyalty Just before our pain and torment You told me how much to you I meant Your words were simple yet distinct And inside my heart turned pink I carried that feeling through the cell How long only Time could tell Up until that fateful meet We walked a determined beat Then you found out who I am And your face turned mad I wish that I could stop the clock But tis a memory you cannot block Now I wait in painful silence alone And hope you let your true feelings show I ask that you give me a chance To tread this difficult dance I wish that it wasn’t true But now it is up to you I wait here in my chosen space Waiting to again take my place For I long to say from my heart the truth That I have come to care deeply for you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Grey Master Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 WOW. One of the best poems that I have read (and I have read many), you have a very good talent with poetry, I liked it very much! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediMaster12 Posted January 10, 2007 Author Share Posted January 10, 2007 Thank you. This was from a long time ago when I first started writing for KFM. I have been thinking of a response but my mind hasn't gotten any vibes yet from the waves of creativity. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 And Grey Master, don't forget that JM12 is a very talented writer and I prefer the Shorties she writes. Anyway, this is a good poem and I liked the way the poem flowed, with its rhymes and all. If you have anymore poems for us JM12, I'd like to see them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediMaster12 Posted January 10, 2007 Author Share Posted January 10, 2007 Well there is the thread I created called Blessings of the Written Word. It is in the Outer Rim forum. It was created to accomodate Cygnus' daily dosage of fawning at my feet. There are poems reflecting things that I have seen or have read. I have one that I wrote for when a friend of mine died but I hesitate to post it. It still makes me cry at times. I will try to write a response to this poem from Carth. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 Ah, very good JediMaster, well done! Lovely and emotional. Nothing for you to improve. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediMaster12 Posted January 11, 2007 Author Share Posted January 11, 2007 That's the beauty of poetry Jason Skywalker. There is nothing to correct in terms of grammar because I believe it has to come from the heart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rabish Bini Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 WOW. One of the best poems that I have read (and I have read many), you have a very good talent with poetry, I liked it very much! Great job! Keep it up! :clap: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Catto Posted January 14, 2007 Share Posted January 14, 2007 Great work indeed. I love poetry nearly as much as i love writing full-fledged stories. There's just some things in stories you can't express as better than what can be written in a poem. You write extremely well. And (hopefully, im not being to rude in saying this, but). In your thread 'Blessing of the Written Word', the one what i posted ('An Ending Serenade'), it was about my friend, and me, losing someone very close to us. She was dear to me, and i wrote that in memory of her. And i found that, in posting it, and sharing it with other people, it helped considerably well, in helping me getting through that hard time. Because it made me acknowlege that i can still see her, and talk to her, even though i can't see her physical appearence, it still helps. (Just some helpful advice. I dont know if that will help, but it did help me, and hopefully, it can work for you. ........ Again, i'm sorry if i was rude in saying that ) Great work once again, JM12. And i hope you post a reply from Carth Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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