John Skywalker Posted December 9, 2005 Share Posted December 9, 2005 nice chapter RC i liked it:) its funny, all the fanfics I'm reading have action and mine has'nt got that far, and i love saber battles lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 9, 2005 Share Posted December 9, 2005 So sad about Tara. I liked her. Excellent work, by the way. for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted December 10, 2005 Share Posted December 10, 2005 -40 cool points for killing Tara. +120 cool points for working the word 'ginormous' in there Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted December 10, 2005 Share Posted December 10, 2005 -All your points for killing Tara +20 cool points for having Yoda set a mine *eyes narrow* How could you kill Tara? I mean, you were going out with her (sorry if you take offense to that, couldn't resist) Good chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 10, 2005 Author Share Posted December 10, 2005 i re-award myself all my points, since you havent seen the next chapter yet. get my drift?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 10, 2005 Author Share Posted December 10, 2005 so im not counting the minuses for tara's death because: MAJOR MAJOR SPOILER!! READ ONLY IF YOU WANT TO DESTROY THE SUSPENSE!!: tara isnt who she seems so total cool score: 265 awesome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 10, 2005 Author Share Posted December 10, 2005 here ya go, long chapter and reserructed Tara ------------------------- SEVENTEEN The Jedi Masters returned sorrowfully to the cockpit. Tara’s body bad been covered and they were taking it to Manaan to have it cremated in accordance with the Jedi tradition. They were sitting quietly in the cockpit mourning over their loss when the comm unit crackled to life, startling them. “This………Knight…ra…….to Las….ike” came the distorted speech. Obi Wan leaned forward and adjusted the unit and the image came crystal clear. It was Tara! Impossible! “This is Jedi Knight Tara to the Last Strike,” Tara repeated. “Master Windu, I presume you broke into Palpatine’s palace to bust me out, so why the heck did you run before I was even out?” “Before you were even out? But I released you from the prison facilities and you got slashed in the stomach by the Emperor.” Mace said, abysmally confused. “Huh? I was in the secure prisons in level -35. Where did you go?” “That explains it; we went to the main facilities.” “No wonder. Vader had suspected that you would do something like this, so he positioned a clone of me in a cell and another clone to ‘protect’ it.” Tara explained. “The imprisoned clone was instructed to team up with you and then send him back your location of hiding. Apparently the Emperor did not know that.” “Where are you now?” Obi Wan asked. “I managed to escape from the cell in all the confusion and am using a secure connection located at Level 0. Tell me when to meet you at the Hangars and I’ll be there.” “Meet you?” Mace asked. “You are coming back, right?” Obi Wan slapped the emergency button and the ship pummeled out of Hyperspace. Obi Wan turned the ship around and reversed the coordinates; the Strike shot back into Hyperspace. “We’ll be there in twenty minutes,” Obi Wan said. “I suggest you head to the Hangars and hide behind a ship somewhere.” Tara nodded and the comm went blank. ******************************************** The Jedi Knight doubled over and stood well hidden behind a large starship. She had encountered another clone of herself and took to hand to hand combat, since she did not have a weapon. Now she had a red-bladed saberstaff and was changing the color crystal so that the Masters would not take her for an enemy. She inserted the extra green color crystal she had taken from Ilum and cut and polished in Obi Wan’s Chyyra and snapped the case shut. She tossed away the red crystal; and immediately regretted it. The crystal shattered, producing what seemed to be an ear-splitting racket in the relatively quiet Hangar, drawing the attention of the Stormtroopers on duty. One peeped behind the ship. “Get backup!” he yelled into his comlink. “We have a loose pri-” He was stopped mid-sentence by Tara’s blade passing across his neck, decapitating him, but the damage was done. The doors opened and two clones ran in, red blades flashing. “How many clones did they make of me?” Tara mumbled. “Are they so jobless that they did not have anything else to do?” Tara jumped high and landed on top of the ship. The clones followed suit. Igniting both her blades, Tara sprung into action swiping and slashing at the clones alternatively. Finally, she kicked one off the ship and spun her blades in a vertical circle, slicing the remaining clone’s torso in half lengthways. Wasting no time, she jumped down and continued fighting with the other. She spun around and delivered a roundhouse kick to the clone’s solar plexus, which caused it to drop to its knees. Tara launched another roundhouse kick at the clone’s head and stabbed it in the stomach. But by then, a squad of troopers had secured the Hangar, making escape impossible. A Storm Commando came up to Tara with a vibroblade. Tara leaned back to her left, lifted her right leg and kicked the Commando hard just below the chin. The Commando went limp and dropped to the ground. Suddenly, blaster cannons blared outside the hangar and eradicated half the troops. The Strike had arrived! Tara turned and ran. She took a running Force-aided leap and landed squarely on the open landing ramp. Turning back, she gave the remaining troopers a mock salute, laughed and walked in. Behind her, the ramp closed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 10, 2005 Author Share Posted December 10, 2005 i think you should recognise taras kick to the commando as Shawn Micheals' famous "Sweet Chin Music" ill try to add Rey Mysterio's "619" somewhere in the future chapters, or even Undertaker's "Tombstone" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 10, 2005 Share Posted December 10, 2005 Nice work. But one thing about this Tara ressurecting: Never listen to others when you write your own book; Your book isn't 'your' book anymore if you do; it is now "people's lituerature" that everyone changes as they want. Just to tell you that. Anyway for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted December 10, 2005 Share Posted December 10, 2005 I kinda figured that she wasn't dead...she was too much of a pivital person. Good work, keep it up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John Skywalker Posted December 10, 2005 Share Posted December 10, 2005 good work RC i never thought she was alive:) keep it coming Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted December 10, 2005 Share Posted December 10, 2005 +20 cool points for getting Tara back in there. Keep up the great work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 11, 2005 Author Share Posted December 11, 2005 well, actually, i had this planned all along, i didnt bring her back because you gys became sad. (well 1% i did). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MdKnightR Posted December 13, 2005 Share Posted December 13, 2005 Tara is an interesting character. I'm glad to see her back. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 15, 2005 Author Share Posted December 15, 2005 i am so sorry i could not post the new chap, but my heads outta ideas. im just playing through KotOR again to get some ideas and most probably the next chapter will be out tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 16, 2005 Author Share Posted December 16, 2005 EIGHTEEN Obi Wan took the ship into hyperspace after dumping Tara’s clone into space then returned to the cargo hold to discuss the situation. After listening to several useless ideas from Yoda, Mace and Tara, he raised his hands and the room fell silent. He turned to Tara. “Didn’t Anakin teach you to construct droids on your own?” Obi Wan asked Tara. Tara nodded. “As long as you provide the parts, I don’t have that much money.” “That we will do, Tara, I need you to construct an RM-619 Assassin Droid as quick as possible.” Obi Wan said urgently I can get you the parts from my hut on Tatooine and there’s a workbench there too.” “Wait, wait,” said Mace fearfully. “You mean to tell us that you were planning to construct an assassin droid to murder the Chancellor?” “Palpatine is a Sith Lord, Master Windu.” Obi Wan pressed. “Yes, but assassinating a political leader is not what Jedi do.” Mace argued. “Palpatine is a threat to what we have always stood for. Sometimes, we have to resort to drastic measures.” “I will not let our beliefs crumble just because you want to end this tyranny quickly instead of taking it slow.” “Taking it slow will cause the lives of thousands of people to be lost.” “That is a risk we have to take.” “It is not a risk, it is a certain fact. An unchangeable fact. If we do not act soon, the galaxy will be shrouded in darkness. I will not let that happen.” Mace sighed and shook his head. “I will agree only if you promise to decommission the droid after its use is over.” Obi Wan nodded and said, “No problem.” ****************************************************** Tara tightened the screw and stepped back from the droid she had been working on for the past three weeks from blueprints supplied by Obi Wan. Obi Wan smiled at her and told her to go and freshen up before they tried it out. Half an hour later, Tara returned. Clean and tidy. They carried the droid outside, and drew back a safe distance from it, lest it blows up. Tara pushed the button with the Force and the droid hummed to life. It turned to them in a smooth motion and stood there. Tara deactivated it again and walked up to it. She inserted the program chip into the droid and switched it on again. “Greetings, Master.” It said. “I am a fully functional RM-619 unit at your disposal. Obi Wan proceeded to give the droid its instructions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 16, 2005 Author Share Posted December 16, 2005 guess what RM-619 means. a cookie for the correct answerer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 16, 2005 Share Posted December 16, 2005 This... RM 619 is supposed to be a copy of HK, right? Or is he going to be something other than a sadistic robot? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rain128 Posted December 16, 2005 Share Posted December 16, 2005 Is that the driod in the Tomb on Korraban in k1?? long shot i know /shrug Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 16, 2005 Share Posted December 16, 2005 ^The droid didn't have a call sign. I don't think that it's it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted December 16, 2005 Share Posted December 16, 2005 Ray Mesterio his move is the 619, right? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted December 17, 2005 Share Posted December 17, 2005 I don't know who that droid is, but I like the idea of the jedi using assasins. @Vlad: You need a custom title, it make you look cooler. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Commander Obi-Wan Posted December 17, 2005 Share Posted December 17, 2005 Ray Mesterio his move is the 619, right? Yes @Vlad: You need a custom title, it make you look cooler. He/She might not want a custom title. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 17, 2005 Share Posted December 17, 2005 @Vlad: You need a custom title, it make you look cooler. How do I make a custom title? I tried looking under the section "Edit Options" but I couldn't find anything that affects the custom title. He/She might not want a custom title. Um... Vladimir is the most common Slavic male name. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted December 17, 2005 Share Posted December 17, 2005 ^Go to 'edit Profile'. Its the first option you should be able to edit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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