RC-1162 Posted December 22, 2005 Author Share Posted December 22, 2005 ah well, lets say he looks very similar Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MdKnightR Posted December 23, 2005 Share Posted December 23, 2005 Very good couple of chapters! You are really progressing as a writer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 23, 2005 Author Share Posted December 23, 2005 cool! thanks. nowadays, even my friends at school are calling me an awesome writer, i thought they were just buttering me up for something. its nice to know people like my work. next chapter will be up only in a week, im afraid. im going to india for my uncle's marrige. maybe ill post from there but i have only a 56 - 100 k connection there. depends. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 23, 2005 Author Share Posted December 23, 2005 i had almost finished it so i thought id complete it and give it to you guys as an early christmas present. enjoy: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- TWENTY ONE The Chyyra dropped out of Hyperspace again. Though, this time, it was not Coruscant that was in front of them, and this puzzled everyone except Obi Wan and the repaired and restored RM-619. “What are you doing?” Mace asked. “This isn’t Coruscant. It’s Sullust.” “Yes, Master.” Obi Wan said. “I had a talk with Senator Bail Organa about the present situation while you were getting ready to leave and he agreed to send a full thousand men and 50 Elite Commandos to help us in our mission.” “A thousand and fifty men?” Yoda asked, startled. “Discovered, we shall be, before entering the Emperor’s Castle, even.” “No Master, they will come in small shuttles at around twenty men per shuttle and will enter the planet from all side. Once that is done, they will report to the base of Palpatine’s Castle via various modes of transport.” “That would mean around 53 shuttles. Wouldn’t this operation take time?” said Mace. “Not necessarily. All the units will come by either maglev trams or by airspeeders. That way, everyone will be on time.” “Wouldn’t such a large number of men be noticed in the castle?” Tara asked. “No, we've managed to get our hand on adequate Stormtrooper Armor for the infantry. The will be indistinguishable among the rest of the troopers to the casual eye.” “Then how will we know whether we’re shooting at a friend or foe?” Tara enquired. “They have navy-blue bodysuits instead of black. That was the color the Sith used about one month ago. Now it is reserved for the best Stormtroopers, so we won’t only be hidden, but also treated with respect.” “Right,” said Tara and fell silent. **************************************** The ship set down smoothly on the surface of a landing platform set high above a lava river. Obi Wan stared at the lava sorrowfully; then shook his head to clear the bad memories it brought back. “Stay with the ship, Aarem.” Obi Wan said. “Affirmative, Master,” the droid replied and went back in. They walked to the turbolift set in a wide pillar and got into it. At their destination, it stopped and the door hissed open, revealing Bail Organa. “Masters,” he said with a bow. “It is good to see that you are well; you especially, Master Windu.” Mace nodded and said, “Thank you, Senator.” “Are the troops ready?” Obi Wan asked, getting straight to the point. “They are in peak condition and ready to serve loyally, Master Kenobi. And you will be pleased to know that young Miss Leia has begun to crawl independently.” “That sounds cute,” Obi Wan said with a smile. “I wish her good health. Say hello to her mother for me.” “Of course, Master. Now, if you will step this way, I shall introduce you to the Commanders.” They began to walk into the base. After a few minutes, they came to what looked like a briefing room. There were around fifty men gathered there, in full stormtrooper armor, the Elites of the Rebel Alliance. Senator Organa proceeded to give them their instructions and locations for landing. Half an hour later, 54 shuttles, containing the ‘best’ stormtroopers of the Imperial army, blasted off from Sullust and entered Hyperspace a few minutes later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 23, 2005 Author Share Posted December 23, 2005 the 54th shuttle contains Obi Wan and the rest of the jedi and droid, so dont get confused. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 23, 2005 Share Posted December 23, 2005 A battle. Hmmm... I wonder how you will make them. Oh and does Sullust have lava? for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John Skywalker Posted December 23, 2005 Share Posted December 23, 2005 Nice chapter RC cant wait for the next one:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth_Death Posted December 24, 2005 Share Posted December 24, 2005 That was awsome RC i need to show that to friends Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarthSion101 Posted December 24, 2005 Share Posted December 24, 2005 I know i'm a little late in posting, but I just started visiting the Fanfic section, and writing my own story. You tell the story very well, I like your use of dialogue....keep up the good work. Two thumbs way up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 25, 2005 Author Share Posted December 25, 2005 here i am, and i just found out that the fastest connection speed here is 18 kbps, ITS PURE TORTURE I TELL YA!! but anyway, heres the next chapter: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- TWENTY TWO Obi Wan’s shuttle dropped out of hyperspace before the others did to check on the situation. The planet looked peaceful enough. He headed to the location above the planet from where he was to make his descent. Space rippled around the planet in about a 2 mile radius from the planet and 53 other shuttles dropped into realspace one by one. They were fitted with cloaking devices just in case and they all switched them on at Obi Wan’s command. 53 ships entered Coruscant’s atmosphere under cloaks and touched down at their destination locations. From all shuttles, twenty men in Elite Stormtrooper armor marched out in single file and headed for the nearest maglev tram station or public airspeeder station and requested locations very close to the Emperor’s Palace. The locals were very careful around their new customers. So far, the plan was working smoothly but Obi Wan had a biting worry at the back of his head that the Emperor or Vader might sense them. But Tara had made a short side-trip to Yavin-4 and captured an Ysalamiri to cloak them from the Force, but Obi Wan still had doubts, given Anakin’s strong affinity to the Force. Besides, the bright yellow reptile made it hard for them to use the Force. They had to concentrate even to levitate something, but luckily, after a small test, Obi Wan was sure that their reflexes were not affected. He shook his head softly and focused. Five minutes of walking brought them to a tram station. Obi wan went to the ticket counter. “Give me five tickets to Chance Palp Spaceport,” Obi Wan said, his voice synthesized by the Stormtrooper helmet. “Yes, of course, sir.” The man said and got out five tickets to their location in a jiffy. “How much?” Obi Wan asked. “25 credits, please.” Obi Wan paid the man and they got into the tram. “Statement: I believe visiting the spaceport will cause my circuits to get disrupted occasionally by the ion blasts of the ships that come and go, Master.” RM said from beneath a large cloak and hat. “We are not going into the spaceport, Aarem.” Obi Wan said softly. “We will simply make it seem so. The Emperor’s Palace is only five kilometers from the Spaceport, this distance we cover by walking.” “Question: Won’t the locals feel suspicious of us, Master?” “They might, but that is a risk we have to take.” “Negatory: No Master. Although it is not my place to correct you, even the slightest risk could upset the delicate balance of this operation.” “What do you think we should do?” Tara asked the droid. “Suggestion: We could jet to the top onto the main levels, Master.” The droid said. “Jet?” asked Mace. “We do not have jetpacks, in case you didn’t notice,” “Negatory: You don’t need jetpacks, Master. Suggestion: you can use this ‘Force’ and levitate yourself off the ground onto the main levels.” “That will arouse the suspicions of the locals.” said Obi Wan. “How do you know they won’t notice four flying Stormtroopers?” “Heckle their minds, we must,” said Yoda from under the shell of an R2 D2 unit. The Jedi Master was not very happy with this but he took it in good spirit and occasionally played the sounds the R2 line of droids usually use to communicate from a playback radio taped to the inside of the shell. “Okay,” said Obi Wan. “But the Ysalamiri will make it difficult for us to hold ourselves up for long.” “Hold it, the droid will,” said Yoda. “Affirmation: I will do so with pleasure, Master,” said RM. “It’s settled then,” Mace said. All five of them made their way to the nearest wall. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 25, 2005 Share Posted December 25, 2005 Nice description of covert operations. for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted December 26, 2005 Share Posted December 26, 2005 Hope your high speed internet is speeding you through India Nice work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 26, 2005 Author Share Posted December 26, 2005 it sure is. and its also speeding me up the wall. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 28, 2005 Author Share Posted December 28, 2005 ok, hallucination, i need an english lesson. when you change the word 'green' from noun to verb, what are the possibilities it can make? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 28, 2005 Share Posted December 28, 2005 ok, hallucination, i need an english lesson. when you change the word 'green' from noun to verb, what are the possibilities it can make? Um... Greening, I think. So... How is it progressing? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 28, 2005 Author Share Posted December 28, 2005 im going back to my LAN connection in Bahrain soon [offtopic] YIPPPPPPEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!![/offtopic] so the next chapter will be up in about three hours after i arrive. and where is the english expert? c'mon hall, your not an a$$ anymore. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 28, 2005 Author Share Posted December 28, 2005 oh, and guys, ive decided to make a Quadrilogy series about the happenings in the 18 or so years between RotS and ANH, this is the first installment and, sadly, is nearing its end Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 28, 2005 Share Posted December 28, 2005 Really? What will they be called? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 28, 2005 Author Share Posted December 28, 2005 they are called: find out for yourself ill tell you that the next one is about the baddies mostly though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 29, 2005 Author Share Posted December 29, 2005 TWENTY THREE RM was clutching a small metal box with holes in the top with his cold metal fingers, the Ysalamiri inside it crawling around. The R2 unit turned to face the crowd and Yoda inside it took hold of their minds. Suddenly, they vanished from sight to the common bystander. To them, they never even existed. Obi Wan created a force platform underneath their feet and raised them up. RM saw them moving and initiated his jetpack. Soon, they were on the sunlit higher platforms of the planet, walking along towards the Emperor’s Palace. Twenty minutes of quick walking bought them to the Palace’s public entrance. They used the same tricks again and got back down to the pits of Coruscant. Here the people were nowhere to be seen. The Jedi and droid were the only people present there. Obi Wan stopped and turned to RM. “Leave the lizard here, Aarem,” he said. “We’ll come back for it if we have time.” “What if Vader senses us, Master?” Tara asked. “The large amount of people in the palace will form a natural cloak for us. He will find it very difficult to make us out among the other sentient beings in the structure.” Obi Wan explained. RM obeyed and tucked the lizard next to a large rock. Mace ignited his purple blade and cut a hole in the wall of the under levels of Palpatine’s Place. They headed to the elevator through a labyrinth of corridors. Waiting before them, was a squad of five men in Stormtrooper armor and navy blue bodysuits. Obi Wan smiled slightly. Hopefully, the rest of the thousand made it here on time too. **************************************** Apparently, they did. Obi Wan was having his comm burst open with arrival affirmations. After all the squads were confirmed, Obi Wan switched off his comm for a few minutes. After he came back online, he proceeded to business. “Right, remember your instructions. You are to enter the Barracks under the ruse of equipment checking and one of you must place the mine in a secluded spot.” Obi Wan instructed over the comm as the walked yet again to the Emperor’s Chamber. “You must not be seen doing that. Once you are through, stay in the vicinity of the 100th level. We will call if we need help.” With a Mass affirmation, Obi Wan breathed a bit freely. For now, the pressure was equally divided amongst the troops. They arrived at the Emperor’s Office. The door slid open; and Obi Wan immediately knew that the plan had been compromised. In front of them, stood a whole contingent of Stormtroopers and the Emperor and Vader with ignited sabers. Mace acted from instinct. He used the Force to slam the door shut and turned and ran, with the others at his heels. “Abort mission!” he yelled into his helmet comm. “I repeat: Abort mission!” All the thousand men who were already in place began blasting away at Imperial troops, trying to get away. The whole place was submerged under utter chaos. The doors of Palpatine’s Palace flew open again and Vader came running out, followed by a horde of troopers. Tara pointed her blaster behind her over her shoulder and began firing blindly. A groan from hit troopers occasionally, told her that she was causing at least some damage to the seemingly invincible army of Imperials. They were running like mad, shooting here and there when Mace had enough. He popped open the hatch of the R2 shell. Yoda jumped out and started running along with them. Then he yelled at them to split up, to find out who Vader was after. So at the next ‘junction’ of four hallways, Mace and Yoda ran into the right one, Tara and RM into the left and Obi Wan ran alone into the straight one. Vader motioned, undaunted, and continued running into the straight one, after Obi Wan. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 29, 2005 Author Share Posted December 29, 2005 the fic is almost over people, but no worries, ive got three sequels to this planned and one sequel to Hunt for the Sith also. do you think i should do the HftS sequel and MWJMR sequel side by side or one by one? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 29, 2005 Share Posted December 29, 2005 for you. Do what you want with the squels. They are yours, aren't they? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 30, 2005 Author Share Posted December 30, 2005 yeah, but i wanted to know whether you guys wanted them side by side or one by one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegade Puma Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Great Fic so far RC. You are a very good writer. You are exceptional at writing out the action as well. I have only been a part of these forums for a week now. I am s enjoying it. I would have to say yours is the 2nd best I have read so far. No offense, but forceflight's Fic is off the charts!! Keep it up. I can't wait for the next chapter. Also I started a fic of my own. I have never written a story before. So could you give me some feedback on my first chapter? It is call, The crystal of life. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 30, 2005 Author Share Posted December 30, 2005 yeah, i checked it out. its very good for a beginner. with practice youll become much better. and you didnt offend me by saying FFWM12's fic is off the charts. i totally agree with ya Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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