RC-1162 Posted December 31, 2005 Author Share Posted December 31, 2005 TWENTY FOUR Obi Wan ran like mad, slicing anything that got in his way. Vader followed closely with ease. Obi Wan tried all kinds of tactics on Vader but they did not work. He was losing hope when he saw a ‘+’ type ‘junction’. He rounded the corner into the right corridor; and ran into Mace and Yoda. They flew up in the air and landed hard a few feet away. Before Vader could slice them, however, Yoda raised his hand and yanked hard. Vader flew over their heads and landed a long way away. They scrambled to their feet and ran into the left path, Vader following once again. After what seemed like a lifetime of running, they reached a massive cylindrical room. It extended what seemed like 100 meters high, its curved walls shining brightly from the reflection of their lightsabers. Obi Wan was a little behind the other two, and that position he would regret all his life. Just as Mace and Yoda ran through the other entrance, a heavy steel door came crashing down, cutting off Obi Wan’s exit. Unable to stop in time, he ran headlong into the door and collapsed, out of breath. Vader was walking into the room behind him. “Do you really believe that your plan was foolproof?” Vader asked. “The Empire has many spies. And one of them has just converted and supplying me with vital information about your petty rebellion.” “Nobody in the Rebel Alliance wants to help you, Anakin,” Obi Wan said. “So why don’t you say that you sensed us instead?” “Although I did sense you, and a fat lot of good the Ysalamiri did too, I had one of your friends on my side. Tara.” “Impossible!” Obi wan retorted. “We would have sensed it in her.” “I taught her techniques to mask her inner self, Obi Wan.” Vader said simply. “Admit defeat, and we may spare your life.” Obi wan got to his feet and re-ignited his blade. “Like I said before, Anakin: ‘only a Sith deals in absolutes. I will do what I must.’” Vader lunged, Obi Wan leapt over him and landed behind the Dark Lord. Vader stopped and turned, calm and cool. Obi Wan stood there, waiting. Vader attacked again, this time much faster, and Obi wan was drawing on much his energy to save himself. *************************************** Mace and Yoda skidded to a halt as the door slammed shut. They were about to slice it open when a hooded figure walked out of the side. It stooped in front of them and was joined by another figure that jumped down from above. The latter lowered its hood; and in front of them stood Tara. “Tara,” Mace gasped. “What are you doing?” “Do you really believe that the Dark Side is easy to resist?” Tara asked. “I did so at first. Vader tortured me and tried to break me, but it did not work. Eventually, I began to see the truth. The Jedi are afraid of one another’s power and potential. The Sith, however, only encourage more power. And I will prove myself to Lord Vader by killing both of you.” She ignited her blood red blade and jumped at them. ************************************** Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted December 31, 2005 Share Posted December 31, 2005 Boy, I never saw it coming. for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 31, 2005 Author Share Posted December 31, 2005 the Dark side is undetectable. Muhahahahaha! thanks, Vlad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegade Puma Posted December 31, 2005 Share Posted December 31, 2005 Wow great chapter RC. I can't wait to see how this ends And thanks for the encouragment on my fic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 1, 2006 Share Posted January 1, 2006 -_- BASTARD!!! I liked Tara. But, anyway Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 1, 2006 Share Posted January 1, 2006 Tara is evil?!?!!?!!?!?!? I should add you to my buddy list Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 2, 2006 Author Share Posted January 2, 2006 @JK: whos telling you not to? i just made her dark sided. @Hall: im surprised im not already in it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
John Skywalker Posted January 2, 2006 Share Posted January 2, 2006 i like how you put Bastila's Sith words in their for Tara:) nice touch RC Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 2, 2006 Share Posted January 2, 2006 @RC I can't like anyone who's darksided It's to evil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 3, 2006 Share Posted January 3, 2006 *shocks JK* @RC: I don't really use my buddy list to much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 3, 2006 Author Share Posted January 3, 2006 @John: all dark siders blab the same damn thing so its not very tough @ JK: im sorry to hear that but its the only way to tell the story without butting into the movies. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stingerhs Posted January 5, 2006 Share Posted January 5, 2006 alright, let me set some things straight here: the threads in this forum are for posting fan fiction or fanart and then getting constructive criticism on the work within the thread. no official warnings from me, but just keep in mind what you're supposed to be posting versus what i'm seeing when i open the thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 5, 2006 Author Share Posted January 5, 2006 im not very familiar with Moderator jargon. does that mean that we have to post fics and constructive criticism only, without any off topic discussion of stuff like the crap JK and me used to have? is so, you got it. if not, im an idiot. and guys, im down with the worst case of writers block so it may be out tomorrow. with luck ill post it today. its almost over, i have to make a suitable climax battle though. fixed your post. and yes, you got the idea. -stingerhs Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 5, 2006 Author Share Posted January 5, 2006 the Force was with me here it is, though i had to cut the original chapter of both the fights to only on fight. BTW: this is the second last or third last chpater of the fic, so dont get pissed off with the happenings. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------- TWENTY FIVE “Don’t do this, Tara.” Mace gasped as he desperately fought his former Padawan. Even with Yoda fighting alongside him, he was finding it very difficult to back her off. Yoda jumped over her and began attacking her from behind. But even with his superior lightsaber and Force skills, Tara was impossibly blocking both his and Mace’s blows with only one saber. “This only proves that Jedi are pathetic.” Tara said and continued dueling with them. Suddenly, Yoda turned and ran a few steps away; he then came running towards them. He jumped up and aimed his leg at Tara for an aerial kick. Tara sensed his approach and spun around swiftly in a roundhouse kick that connected hard with Yoda’s stomach, sending him rocketing away. She turned back to Mace and slashed at his arm viciously. He barely ducked, resulting in only a cut on his bicep instead of the whole arm being lopped off. He dropped to his knees and spun with his right leg outstretched. Tara jumped over his leg the first time but on the second spin, was knocked of her feet. She landed hard and the lightsaber dropped from her hand. As Mace raised his blade, she desperately kicked out and connected just on his Solar Plexus. The wind knocked out of him, he dropped to his knees, his lightsaber clattered onto the floor. Tara kicked out again and connected hard with Mace’s face. He fell back and crawled away, hand to his nose. When he got up again, his nose was bleeding away to glory. He called his lightsaber to him and ignited it, using the Force to heal his nose up. Yoda, recovering from his blow, got to his feet and thumbed his saber on too. In unison, they jumped at Tara, but it seemed the dumbest thing anyone would do. Tara just stepped to the side and they collided hard. Tara brought her saber down but Yoda jumped up again and blocked it. Just as Mace got to his feet, Tara jump-kicked and knocked him down again. “Aarem; now.” she commanded and the other cloaked figure who was watching the battle quietly started firing at them. Mace rolled away and regained ground with a Force-aided leap to RM. he swung the blade simply and the droid was cleaved neatly in two. He then reverse-jumped back into the fray and started on the offensive. Tara was now backing down to the other door. It hissed open as the sensors picked up sentients approaching, and in front of them lay the Emperor’s Personal Hangar. Tara backed down through the door and stopped, Force-pushing the Jedi a few feet back. She held her lightsaber tightly, trying to keep it steady because of all the sweat in her palms. She suddenly turned and ran to the edge of the hangar bay and ran up the forcefield as if it was a wall, then back flipped behind them. She used the Force to secure herself to the ground and then pulled a lever on a control panel across the room. The forcefield died and the low air pressure outside began to suck out the hangar atmosphere. Yoda acted with lightning reflexes and grabbed a ship’s landing stud with the Force. He seemed to be bobbing up and down like a demented balloon. Mace, however, flew out. He barely managed to grab the edge of the opening in the building. Seeing Tara stationary, he used the Force to stop the winds from pushing him and jumped at her. Seeing him coming, she raised her blade, but both of them failed to notice the other’s weapon’s trajectory. Mace landed next to Tara, impaling her on his blade and getting himself impaled on hers. Yoda finally managed to push the lever back into its place and the forcefield sparked into place. He dropped to the ground and slowly got up. He looked at Mace’s and Tara’s bodies lying on the ground sadly. He turned to the Hangar entrance and walked off quickly to help Obi Wan against Vader. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 8, 2006 Author Share Posted January 8, 2006 how come i didnt get any comments for this chap? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------- TWENTY SIX Obi Wan ducked another swipe and slashed blindly backwards. Vader jumped back a step away from the point of Obi Wan’s lightsaber and slashed again. Obi wan dropped and rolled away. As he got to his feet, the door blew open and Yoda came shooting in. Vader pushed a button in the wall and a squad of troops came firing madly out of the place Vader and Obi Wan had come from. Yoda lifted the detached door and sent it rocketing towards the troops. He then called Obi Wan and the door to himself as he exited the room. Obi Wan flew out and the door slammed back into place, jamming with a screech. Yoda and Obi Wan raced into the Emperor’s personal ship. As Obi Wan rushed to the Cockpit, Yoda turned and floated Mace’s limp form on board. The ramp closed and they blasted out of the Hangar and into the thin atmosphere outside. As they entered space, however, the ship began piloting itself and taking them to a skyhook about three miles away. Auto-pilot security systems. Curse them! Obi wan quickly composed himself and drew out his remote pad. He punched a few codes and his Chyyra rose out of its parking spot and raced its way to them. Five minutes later, it carried out the transfer sequence and the two ships were successfully attached to each other. Obi Wan and Yoda ran to their ship, followed by Mace’s floating body. Obi wan slapped the airlock shut and disengaged the sequence. The ships broke apart and the Jedi blasted away into Hyperspace, victorious. Well, not quite. ****************************************** The two of them watched quietly as Mace’s body burnt on the pyre in traditional way to send a Jedi into the other world. Yoda turned to Obi Wan sadly. “Now, wait, we must, for the Skywalker children to grow up.” “By then the Galaxy will be too much in the Emperor’s power.” Obi Wan said. “They won’t stand a chance.” “Then give it to them, we must. No choice we have.” Obi Wan nodded and looked back at the blazing fire in front of them. Goodness knows what the fate of the Galaxy was. ================================================================ THE END ================================================================ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 8, 2006 Author Share Posted January 8, 2006 its over (sadly). LF critic, over to you. and BTW, a sequel will be coming soon, i just have to finish planning it out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted January 8, 2006 Share Posted January 8, 2006 So sad about Mace and Tara. I liked them both. Anyway, for you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 10, 2006 Share Posted January 10, 2006 Why is it that since I started my sequel, everyone is ending there's? (and making a sequel.) Well, it was a very great story (haha very great), and I hope that the sequel is good too Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 10, 2006 Author Share Posted January 10, 2006 ah, well, Vlad. i couldnt keep them alive or they would have distrupted the movie storyline. anyway, thanks for you comments. the next fic will come soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegade Puma Posted January 10, 2006 Share Posted January 10, 2006 Great Fic RC. I'm sorry it is over, but it was a great story none the less! Can't wait to see your next work of art Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 10, 2006 Author Share Posted January 10, 2006 this is incredible. ive begged FFWM12 to give me at least one comment on my work since i posted my fifth chapter and now the fic is over and she still hasn't posted even once! just one comment will be enought, ForceFight. cmon, please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 11, 2006 Share Posted January 11, 2006 Great job, but its sad to see Mace die like that . And what happened to his saber? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 11, 2006 Author Share Posted January 11, 2006 his saber? it was burnt along with his body so that nobody else other than the Jedi Master would have used it in its existence. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 12, 2006 Share Posted January 12, 2006 his saber? it was burnt along with his body so that nobody else other than the Jedi Master would have used it in its existence. Too bad, it was the coolest saber in the movies:cool:. So any sequel spoilers? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 12, 2006 Author Share Posted January 12, 2006 i said it before: the next one may talk mainly about the baddies Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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