Emperor Devon Posted August 25, 2006 Posted August 25, 2006 @Emperor D--I suppose I could set it in that year, and just declare that Revan was off fighting something else when my little band was uncovering the plot. I'd have to think about how to work Revan in a new story. Of course, all I have at the moment is an idea, anyway. It's quite likely that he was off fighting the Sith. They may have lost the Star Forge, their leader, and are fighting a civil war, but they still have all those ships and troops.
Darth Jester Posted September 4, 2006 Posted September 4, 2006 [vader]NOOOOOOOOOOOoooooooooooo[/vader]Well jae i have just finished the entire series (i missed bits and read back over it) congratulations, the suprising part was jolee mentioning HK47 (could the other droid have been a HK50 perhaps ) good luck with any more stories
Jae Onasi Posted September 11, 2006 Author Posted September 11, 2006 Thanks, Darth Jester. A revision of chapter 17 is up in the FIN version. I can't decide whether to change 17 in this thread, too. Anyway, enjoy. Jiara made me work my butt off for this one, and I appreciate the help much.
Niner_777 Posted September 16, 2006 Posted September 16, 2006 Wow! Sorry it took me so long to get around to this. I haven't finished yet, but from what I've read.... this is good!!! The story is interesting and the characters seem very... life-like in thier actions and feelings. Great job!
Jason Skywalker Posted September 16, 2006 Posted September 16, 2006 Me too, i'm currently at Li'adin, and the story is emotional, sad, interesting, and among all, funny!
Jae Onasi Posted September 25, 2006 Author Posted September 25, 2006 Thanks! @Niner--I was trying to make them life-like, so I'm glad I achieved that for you. @Jason--I had more fun making up Jolee and Mik'oth lines than you could believe.
Jason Skywalker Posted September 25, 2006 Posted September 25, 2006 That's nice to hear. Anyways, here is a fan-made real life Bindo: Here
DarthRevan73 Posted September 28, 2006 Posted September 28, 2006 Jae I like this it was very well written And it was just like the the Jolee Bindo we know I give it a thumbs up
Jae Onasi Posted October 25, 2006 Author Posted October 25, 2006 @Jason--that's a pretty darn good imitation. Thanks DarthRevan73. I'm trying to keep Jolee's 'voice' as close to the game as I can. I went ahead and updated ch. 17 in this thread, too. I'm working on revising ch. 18 and 19. Hopefully 18 will be done soon--Emperor Devon's made some suggestions and I have to send it off to Jiara again to check over the changes I made.
Diego Varen Posted October 25, 2006 Posted October 25, 2006 I'm glad to hear it. I hope you start working on the Sequel, since I'll have to take HK off RC and use him to threaten you to get that Sequel up. Anyway, I'm looking foward to whatever you're giving us next.
Emperor Devon Posted October 26, 2006 Posted October 26, 2006 Emperor Devon's made some suggestions and I have to send it off to Jiara again to check over the changes I made. "Some" suggestions? I've been typing you pages worth of stuff, and you call it "some"?
JediMaster12 Posted October 26, 2006 Posted October 26, 2006 Hey I would too considering I write thesis worthy papers and I am bored with the whole process.
Jae Onasi Posted October 26, 2006 Author Posted October 26, 2006 "Some" suggestions? I've been typing you pages worth of stuff, and you call it "some"? Well, I guess 'some' is an understatement of the century in this case. @JM12--boy, do I know the feeling of writing papers. Way too well.
Jae Onasi Posted November 14, 2006 Author Posted November 14, 2006 After reading through Jiara's edits and reams of comments from Emperor Devon (thank you both!), I finally got chapter 18 edited. 19 should also be up relatively soon, too.
JediMaster12 Posted November 14, 2006 Posted November 14, 2006 Yeah. I think I will save it on my jump ring and read it whenever I need a good laugh when I am feeling down. Seriously Jae, I think you've got the scoop on Jolee Bindo. My humor streak runs into making fun of the characters like my 'free food' line.
Jae Onasi Posted November 14, 2006 Author Posted November 14, 2006 Yeah. I think I will save it on my jump ring and read it whenever I need a good laugh when I am feeling down. Seriously Jae, I think you've got the scoop on Jolee Bindo. My humor streak runs into making fun of the characters like my 'free food' line. I loved that 'free food' line! And I haven't forgotten about your story, either. I so need a Kirabaros fix....
Emperor Devon Posted November 15, 2006 Posted November 15, 2006 After reading through Jiara's edits and reams of comments from Emperor Devon (thank you both!), I finally got chapter 18 edited. 19 should also be up relatively soon, too. You're welcome. Are you sending these to KFM?
Jae Onasi Posted November 16, 2006 Author Posted November 16, 2006 You're welcome. Are you sending these to KFM? Yep, they go up on KFM, too. I started posting there quite a while after starting here, so it's a lot farther behind than here. Plus, you both make me work harder on the revisions than I did on the original chapters so it takes longer. Not that I mind too much--they come out quite a bit better with that help, and since they've improved and I like improved anything better, I thought I'd post them here, too.
JediMaster12 Posted November 16, 2006 Posted November 16, 2006 That's great Jae. I've read your fic on kotorfanmedia too. As always your Jolee Bindo makes me laugh and brightens my day.
Emperor Devon Posted November 18, 2006 Posted November 18, 2006 Plus, you both make me work harder on the revisions than I did on the original chapters so it takes longer. It's not my fault you don't know many stomachs a sarlacc has. Your chapters need work to fit perfectly into the established EU. Not that I mind too much--they come out quite a bit better with that help, and since they've improved and I like improved anything better, I thought I'd post them here, too. You have? I checked your thread in the Jedi Archives, and didn't see any recent editing dates. Unless you're posting it here, but IMO a thread without multiple pages and comments is easier to read. Btw, have you edited chapters 18 and 19? I've not gotten any e-mails, but then again, that could be due to the endless tranquility and relaxation in your life.
Jae Onasi Posted November 18, 2006 Author Posted November 18, 2006 It's not my fault you don't know many stomachs a sarlacc has. Your chapters need work to fit perfectly into the established EU. Well, maybe if Doubleday was actually into this thing I might worry about being retentive about the EU issues, but this is just for fun. Not that I don't mind the help, however, because I do very much. It's better to be accurate, or at least know where to bend/break the rules as unobtrusively as possible. You have? I checked your thread in the Jedi Archives, and didn't see any recent editing dates. Unless you're posting it here, but IMO a thread without multiple pages and comments is easier to read. Btw, have you edited chapters 18 and 19? I've not gotten any e-mails, but then again, that could be due to the endless tranquility and relaxation in your life. I put chapter 18 up in both threads. I have to post 19, too, but I want to work on that a bit more. I worked on 20 but must have done that on paper, because I can't find it on my computer anywhere. Sigh, I'll have to do that revision over again, though it'll be better for the extra attention, since that's the chapter with the 'oh, so agonizingly close' (as cutmeister put it) almost-kiss, and I need to build the Jae/Roben/Talin emotional thing better. "Endless tranquility and relaxation" What the heck is this 'relaxation' of which you speak? I am not familiar with this concept.
Emperor Devon Posted November 18, 2006 Posted November 18, 2006 Not that I don't mind the help, however, because I do very much. It's better to be accurate, or at least know where to bend/break the rules as unobtrusively as possible. Accuracy aside, there's a lot of great stuff in the EU as well. I have to post 19, too, but I want to work on that a bit more. Considering I made 'a few' suggestions, I'd hope so. I worked on 20 but must have done that on paper, because I can't find it on my computer anywhere. Well, you'd have had to have typed it up anyway. At least this way Jiara (if she's not busy) and I can look at it. "Endless tranquility and relaxation" What the heck is this 'relaxation' of which you speak? I am not familiar with this concept. Gawsh, even as a student I'm familiar with this concept.
Master Demonius Posted November 18, 2006 Posted November 18, 2006 great story cant wait to read the next
Diego Varen Posted November 20, 2006 Posted November 20, 2006 Hey Jae, I sometimes read some of this Fic, when I'm bored and it is really good, reading it more than once. You should find Lucas and see if he would allow you to get it published. Anyway I was just wondering if you had the link of this Fic on kotorfanmedia. I want to see what anyone else had to say about your Fic. And if you have any other Fics there, please post the link. Thanks and I'm awaiting the Sequel.
Emperor Devon Posted November 20, 2006 Posted November 20, 2006 You should find Lucas and see if he would allow you to get it published. That would be difficult. Mach wanted to publish some of his stuff, and was told he couldn't use any copyrighted SW terms in it (such as Jedi, Revan, lightsaber, etc). Anyway I was just wondering if you had the link of this Fic on kotorfanmedia. I want to see what anyone else had to say about your Fic. Since she's offline right now, here's a link. At KFM there aren't any organized threads for the fics to go in, so the closest thing is a collection of all the author's stories. I'm awaiting the Sequel. Given how you've put 'sequel' in capitals, I can tell.
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