JediMaster12 Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 This was a DCC for KFM. Like Beauty and the Scoundrel, this one bit me in the rear as I tried to think of something creative with the cute little gizka. I have had people say that it is funny however so that must be a good thing. Without further ado, I give you: Jolee’s Gizka Jolee was grumpy. It had been a long a tiring day running around the desert and the sleepy town of Anchorhead looking for the bloody Star Maps. He was glad to just have a nice long shower and retire to his favorite, and personal territory, in the whole ship: the med bay. He passed by Lilah and was in such a good mood that she commented, “I see the semi-aged Jedi is happy, for once.” Jolee replied, “I’m old dammit and allowed to be grumpy and half senile when I want.” It was a mild reproach and answered with a chuckle as Jolee walked into the med bay. He let out a, “What the…” when he entered. Sitting on the medical bed was one of Lilah’s pet gizka. The ugly yellow creature gazed up at Jolee with a cooing look as it snuggled into the blankets. It cooed as its little nubs, or ears, were stroked by the soft blankets. It continued to lie there, looking at Jolee. Jolee said, “What in the name of the council are you doing here? This is a sterile environment. Go, shoo, shoo.” The gizka just stared at Jolee with an innocent expression. It began to burrow into the blankets. It was going to do something but it wasn’t evident at the moment. Jolee waved his hands, “Shoo, shoo.” The response was a squawk that sent Jolee to grumbling. He turned inward to his thoughts on how to best get it to leave, I could pick it up and boot it out. No then it would come back. Maybe if I fried it…Gizka does make a nice sandwich. Meanwhile the gizka on the bed was making more noise. It was getting louder and louder. Finally Jolee shouted at the thing, “You keep quiet there!” He then stopped and stared at the bed, unable to believe what he was seeing. Lilah heard the noise and came running towards the med day. She asked, “Jolee, why are you making all the…noise?” She took a look in and was stopped by the sight she saw. She then let out an ‘Aww.’ Jolee was petting the gizka and apparently a new batch of little gizka. He had a slight smile on his face as he was petting them He then said, “You can stay but that doesn’t mean that I like you.” Lilah replied, “So the semi aged Jedi has a soft spot.” She had a big grin on her face. “You keep quiet there missy. I’m old and allowed to have my moments,” Jolee responded. He walked to where Lilah was standing and pushed her slightly out the door. He said, “Now shoo, shoo.” The door shut in front of Lilah leaving her with a big smile. I guess we need to make a space in the cargo hold, she thought as she turned to head towards the common room. She stopped to pick up one of the gizka who began to coo as she held it. Holding it, she walked into the common room and asked, “Guess what?” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KotO[REvan] Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 Jolee said, “What in the name of the council are you doing her? This is a sterile environment. Go, shoo, shoo.” You should edit the 'her' to 'here'. This was good, and it was funny. I like reading about Jolee, and you're pretty good at writing about him. Good job. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jason Skywalker Posted January 10, 2007 Share Posted January 10, 2007 Great shortie! While seeing it, it seemed but short but it seemed to be a longer read. Funny indeeed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CSI Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 Good shortie JM12. I never thought you would come up with this idea of a gray Jedi and a Gizka. Personally I don't like Gizka...Frankly, I dislike all pets. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jae Onasi Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 Hehe, that's Jolee all right. Fun little fic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Diego Varen Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 What happens when you put an old cranky man with a poor pet? You get old Jolee Bindo with a Gizka (Which I also find to be annoying). Nice Shortie JM12 and despite it being shorter than your other Shorties, this is just as good. But there is only one thing you can't do, which I hope doesn't offend you. You will never have total writing domination over Jolee like Jae does. Looking foward to the next Shortie and I've noticed that all your Shorties are from Fic compos. I'll have to try one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediMaster12 Posted January 11, 2007 Author Share Posted January 11, 2007 Well not all my shorties based on fics. Drunken Moments and A Box of Lies have no relation to my fics whatsoever. I felt like doing it because I was in the mood and the characters were just what I needed. Pottsie: I know that I will never have total domination over Jolee. The queen, the goddess, my inspiration aka Jae will always have dominion over the cranky old man that is a non Jedi with Force powers and a lightsaber. Jae: Your praise is worth the effort. Jason: Humor was my attempt and I get fun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Daft Adidas Posted January 11, 2007 Share Posted January 11, 2007 Nice fic there mate pretty funny. 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediMaster12 Posted January 17, 2007 Author Share Posted January 17, 2007 Thanks. It bit me in the rear as I tried to write it for the KFM challenge. My personal favorite regarding gizka is Jae's shortie called Pookie. That is a name I would give to a dog but here it was cute. Thanks again on my bad attempt at writing about a cantankerous old man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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