Darth_Yuthura

I'm online. I just posted even more when I should be working!

How are you today?

Late is better than never. Wisconsin Yes I know of Fry.

Alright, I will get off. Get that taken care of.

I suppose that you're right... as usual.

I'll see if I can convince my id to realize it will die w/out the superego. Thanks and enjoy your game. It uses minimal cognitive skills though, so keep that in mind if you want to save your brain.

I also have some work that I should do as well. What if we both were to let our superegos do their thing?

DY's id: are you a moron?! Just don't worry about it; we'll do it later! Keep talking to the lady!

It's interesting what we never communicate to the outside world.

I am already revising my PTE ending AGAIN! I need to stop!

I'm not inept! I know the fundamentals of psychology! (I'm not assuming you insulted my intelligence. I just wanted to exclaim right now.)

I need to focus more attention on me superego right now, but you won't be around later, so it's now I indulge my id.

Homework, exercise, going into bars and meeting strange women, working, reading, drawing, martial arts, ****

Of course, these are always present and not what I would WANT to do rather than this. If I end up writing instead of studying, then what is that?

Hey... here's a job you should try... mass produced poetry. I think you'd be great at that!

I thought about one of your last poems just now. I wonder how much time I've invested to this site and all that writing... was it all worth what I have now?

"That is god damn right!"

Okay... I guess that I would assume that if you liked something, it must be something that more seasoned authors would compliment as well. If I got a comment from someone who always says "great chapter." and nothing more... was there something specific they noticed?

You have a level evaluation that recognizes the effort behind certain aspects of a story. I say you have a remarkable level of detail because you swallowed a dictionary. That's a good thing to have a wonderful (repore) for words. I can't get that word spelled properly... can you?

A large vocabulary is a great thing, but being able to put the right words in for the situation is remarkable and I recognize that. Commas are a bit of an issue, but you can get past those if you keep getting coached and it may come naturally.

If you really enjoyed writing, but no one read it, would you keep doing it?

I had started SiD for personal venting, but never intended for it to become public. Once I got two responses from one site, I kept doing it for a while, but lost interest. If it wasn't good enough to read, then I was wasting my time. When I got you, HOP, Bally3000, and others in such a short period of time, I enjoyed doing it, knowing others would appreciate the reading and often compliment it.

With the story you just saw, I am at least satisfied that you said it was a work of art. I don't care if anyone else posts because that was worth it to me. (This was a very cheap shot, but I mean it)

And I've never done any fiction, or really any piece of text for more than two chapter's worth of SiD. I never imagined I could take such stories so far. Your poems are not like chapters, but they are very insightful and clever to me. I think I should try it once and see how it goes.

And I'm glad I found this site when I did. The timing was excellent because I had only 1 forum page's worth and was not inclined to keep writing what no one read, but here and with you to talk to was fortunate and valued.

Thank you for being a part of it.

You enjoyed it? Now let's see if you enjoy chapter 39, where Bao makes his final departure from the story. I think that I like working on special chapters before piecing the lead-ups together. Have you ever tried it?

I'm thinking of doing another for the Trevelyan/Revan issue in SiD just to get moving along and piece them together later.

As long as the story is not being repetitive, then it's good. In my revision for SiD, I will be extending the Kuril mission to maybe up to three chapters. But to the real question, I would just advise you to do as much as you need for the planet and not worry about leaving if you're not finished.

If you are spending too much time there, then you would be rushing to get off the world to progress the story. If it's stretched, then it's because you can still enrich what you've got.

PS: You're not a typical author in any event. lol

Thanks for the last compliment. Naturally, people's talent improves with practice. I can notice your improvements, but it may be because you've always been active where my talent was latent until last year. I don't think you'll see much more improvement from me, though. You're still going to improve for years to come.

You are a crown jewel!

I thank you for the comment. I did not intend feedback exactly, but I was just more interested in ensuring that I got her emotion right. I thought the same thing as you posted, but I was trying to have her 'trying' to maintain her integrity as best she could.

Why didn't you say so in the first place?! I just would have concentrated on the minor issues and not rewrite lots of it for my own sadistic purposes.

Well... can I ask a moment of your time to simply give feedback (here) on the last fourth of 'Descending into Revan's Shadow'? I just want to know if the Exile sounds 'realistic' when she is denied back into the order. Thanks.

I spent 30 minutes trying to correct the damn thing!

Try to keep it formal as possible and avoid using absolute words, such as 'always' 'everyone' and 'never.' This is just what I try to do for formal assignments. Remember that your professor is reading this, not hearing you say it.

I got through, but have a number of comments to increase the quality. Stand by for it...

Alright. Give me a few minutes and I'll be back.

I know what you mean. My computer has a wireless mouse and it often doesn't pair with bluetooth, so I can't do anything w/out new batteries or restarting the computer (to reset the computer's BT module)

I really should get a PS3 or something because the graphics in FU are horrible! I thought they would be slower, not crappier. It looks so cheap.

I'll take a look at the argument, but you have to send it first! Ready whenever.

Just got back at the same time as you.

That argument of yours?

I'll see what I can complain about.

Alright. I just thought you wanted to do a story for your favorite character for a while. I also need to stop expanding my horizon of ideas... I'm spending too much time doing one(SiD), let alone a second(PTE), revision(for SiD), end-to-start(DiRS), and now another person's story(Huntress).

I'll just do two chapters at a time and not deal with doing revisions to what's already done.

If you want, I am sure you want to keep living and not have to come back to the laptop every five minutes. You can keep replying or stop whenever you choose and I'll not mind. (No, this is not me implying I want to stop talking now)

More personal problems in PTE? I have just inserted chapter 5 and I think it's one of the better writings I've ever done. If you hate Vrook, you should love what I've got.

I was just thinking one chapter and see how it is taken. Maybe if enough people asked, you might consider reviving a dead story.

I guess that I wanted to give you something that compared to your Yuthura/Revan drawing you sent me LONG ago.

Although it's a nice thing to believe will eventually happen, I tend to favor showing HOW humans transcend their differences. My favorite DS9 episode(s) is 'Past Tense I/II' because it shows that things only change when a watershed event like the Bell Riots make people realize that it could happen to them.

A Utopian future is nice, but is not likely to happen in any event (even in a realistic version of our future) It's better to see what escalated the events that brought about change more than the unrealistic future itself. My SW fictions focus less on technology and jedi abilities and more on personal conflicts that could compare to our own lives.

Do I really have to say it?

That the next chapter come from another source...

Maybe from another avatar...