[Fic] In His Service, or "Ya--Yevo'"

[JediAthos]

Tysy, I would say that yes you've stayed pretty true to the characters that you've used from the Star Wars universe. Palpatine's speech was something that I would consider near perfect.

 

I don't think that you character Tysy is at all too much of a "wuss" I actually like her. I think that her emotional side makes her more human and shows that like you said, not everyone is the strong hero type. Besides even Luke, Han, and Leia have their weaknesses.

 

Tysy seems to me like a classic underachiever. She has the ability to do great things, but she lacks some of the self confidence to use it. On the other hand, having her mentor and best friend turn on her would be enough to break some people, but so far Tysy seems to be getting through it.

 

It seems to me that if Tysy hasn't acted on her feelings for Anakin at this point I can't imagine why she'd turn and serve him. She tried to turn Rodzina back to the light, and I'd have to imagine she'd do the same with Anakin especially given her feelings for him. If anything I could see Tysy falling to Anakin's blade in the battle at the Jedi Temple.

 

In all honesty I would love to see you cover all three of the events you presented as options for your next plot turn. However, if I had to pick one I would say Tysy's first kill might make for an intriguing read as I think it would be interesting to see how she reacts.

 

I think the best thing about this story was that you write it in such a way that I want to find out what happens next. That's what keeps me coming back, I want to find out what happens to Tysy.

 

Finally, I think that what you've written is an intriguing and interesting story. I think it is as good if not better than anything I've read here so far and I wouldn't strive to compare yourself to the professional writers that write the Star Wars books as they have access to Lucasfilms and Star Wars resources that you couldn't possibly gain access to.

[Diego Varen]

1. Have I stayed true to Anakin's, Obi-wan's, and Palpatine's characters

as shown in the Star Wars canon movies and books?

 

Yes. Palpatine was the best. His speech was something I'd expected to say.

 

2. Is Tysy Dvukh too much of a "wuss" or an "emo kid" to be a good Jedi?

I know she cries a lot and is insecure and vulnerable, but I want to show

that she's not "uberstrong" like Luke and Han and Leia et al. In Tysy, I

want to show that even the most emotional of us can help the galaxy

and the Light Side. Would you rather have Rodzina as main char. instead?

 

Keep Tysy as the main Character, but maybe make her a stronger person. But if you don't want her uber, just make her like the average Jedi.

 

3. What's your analysis of Tysy so far, besides the fact she's emotional?

 

A good Jedi who has been inspired by Anakin.

 

4. Will Tysy stay Light after Anakin falls, or serve him when he's Darth Vader?

Honest prediction. What's the first fate for Tysy that comes to your head or gut?

 

By the way the Fic has gone, I expect Tysy to fall to the Dark Side along with Anakin.

 

5. What should I have next as a "plot turning point?" Pick 1 out of these 3:

--Tysy's first kill as a Jedi

--A conversation between Tysy and Palpatine, when she begins to see his side

--The part where Anakin falls/pledges himself to Palpatine. Tysy Force-feels it.

 

A conversation between Tysy and Palpatine, when she begins to see his side and then she goes to kill Jedi on a certain Planet (Not Coruscant, if you want to stay true to the film).

 

6. What's the best thing about this story? What draws you to it in the first place?

 

Short and snappy. Not too long and the description is perfect.

 

7. Lastly--is this fanfic as good as anything LucasLicensing has made into a

G-canon story or book? If not, what can I do to make it so it IS just as good?

 

I quote Obi-Wan when I can only say possibly. Any good Fics on LF (Such as mine and many other peoples) are possible, but there is a good chance Lucas wouldn't look at them.

 

Keep it Tysy, this Fanfic is great. Maybe you could do an RP version of this too. I would gladly join.

[Jason Skywalker]

Yeah, i liked the chapter and my opinion is basically Pottsie's. And i agree about joining.

[Tysyacha]

Sometimes, truth brings no healing. Truth brings no respite to the soul.

Sometimes, truth only brings pain, and pain is what Tysy felt. She wished

she could turn back time and arrange it so that she'd never met Rodzina Dvyer'.

 

Or met her, perhaps, but had been her teacher instead of her student.

 

Would Rodzina have betrayed her then? Knowing her nature--who could tell?

 

In the midst of Tysy's sorrow and heartbroken state, there came an odd visitor

to the Jedi Temple. An important one, who sought her out. Why? Perhaps he

had only been looking for Master Kenobi and his apprentice, the Chosen One,

Anakin Skywalker. Nevertheless, she was the first one whom Palpatine

saw. Tysy was hurrying off to one of the Meditation Gardens for a brief break

in her training. When she saw the Lord Chancellor, she stopped dead cold...

 

"Knight Dvukh," nodded Palpatine, a slight smile on his face. "Where are

you going so quickly and unceremoniously for a Jedi?" His eyes twinkled.

 

"Ehm...the Meditation Garden!" Tysy stammered. "The smallest one, my lord."

 

"Come," smiled the Chancellor. "You need not be so afraid of me. We'll

walk together to the Meditation Garden, for I've heard of you. Heard that

you were all but murdered by a very close friend who--betrayed you."

 

"Yes." Tysy nodded, biting her lower lip. "My mentor, Rodzina Dvyer'."

 

Palpatine knew that name well. A certain cruel young upstart who proved

that she could best Master Odin in Ataru lightsaber sparring. Twice. The

Chancellor was glad of her death. A fixed obstacle in his way that had

been removed, Rodzina would never turn. But this one...this beautiful Dvukh...

 

"Tell me," said Palpatine. "Did she let the passions of jealousy overcome her,

or was it always her nature to hate those who became stronger than she?"

 

Tysy shook her head. "I don't know. She never seemed that way, before

she turned against me. She always said I was built for power. Why? If she

didn't want me to gain it, or gain more than she had, why tell me that?"

 

"To challenge you." Palpatine slipped an aging hand upon Tysy's shoulder.

"To tease you, to test you, to dare you to become what she thought you

couldn't. Rodzina did not desire your welfare, young Knight. She only sought

to use you as a means to an end, that end being her own power and fame.

All of her teachings lead one to the Dark Side. I pray you don't follow them."

 

After a weighty pause, Tysy bowed her head. "Not anymore, Lord Chancellor."

 

"Good." They both had arrived in the Meditation Garden. "Let us reflect," he said.

 

After a few minutes, Palpatine opened his eyes and gently turned to the

neophyte before him. "Tysyacha Dvukh," he said, "during this trial of

suffering and pain, you have become wise. Wiser than Rodzina Dvyer,'

at least. That is why I have chosen you to undertake the mission that

was meant for her. Meant for her, I realize now, in error. Sometimes,

even the greatest leaders of the Senate make mistakes." He smiled modestly.

 

Tysy's heart beat faster. "What mission, Lord Chancellor?" She swallowed.

 

"Do you remember Jocin Truud, an unfortunate Padawan who had recently

turned to the Dark Side?" Tysy nodded. "Hence his death, sad though it

may be. "He had other followers and associates, those whom he called

his 'friends'. Jocin would have betrayed them all, if he'd had the chance."

 

Palpatine folded his hands and continued. "Jocin Truud's colleagues claim

to have repented and turned to the Light Side, but they have not. One of

them, a young lady named Jayla Maene, is even making speeches on

Dantooine. Fancies herself a Jedi politician, Jayla does, but she is not.

She is only a liar who claims that I do not have the best interests of the

galaxy as my only goal. She claims, Knight Dvukh, that I am a Sith Lord.

One by one, she is turning the farmers and laborers of Dantooine to her side."

 

"But that's treason!" Tysy cried. "She could be put to death for saying that!"

 

"And so she should be. Will you carry out this mission, Tysyacha? If you

go to Dantooine and apprehend her, I want her brought to me alive. She

must face the justice of the whole Galactic Senate, and not just myself.

After all, I am only one of hundreds. As for Jayla--hard labor or exile will

be her fate, if not outright execution. I hope for this last. Such poisonous

statements as Knight Maene makes must not be tolerated in Republic space."

 

Tysy nodded. "What if she won't come, my lord--won't surrender?"

 

Palpatine looked the young Jedi Knight square in the eye, and his eyes held

no malice, no deception. "Do what must be done, then--what Skywalker did."

 

Tysy shivered. "Yes, Lord Chancellor." She bowed and turned to leave the

Garden. "If I may--one more question." Deep breath. "Are you a Sith?"

 

Five. Four. Three. Two.

 

One.

 

"Da, moya' dvukh," answered Palpatine, smiling gently. "Konyeshna."

 

As Palpatine left the Meditation Garden, however, Tysy had the

feeling that those last words were only in her mind. Figments of

her frightened and dark-secret-hungry imagination. At the same

time she'd doubted Palpatine, she'd doubted herself as well. Who

knew what was true in the galaxy anymore?

 

Had Palpatine actually said: "Yes, my second. Of course."?!

[JediAthos]

Wow...very intriguing...I love the cliffhanger and I can't wait to see what Tysy does with this.

[Yaggles]

So someone figured out Palpatine and he's having her killed... but he just told Tysy that he is Sith... I'm sorta confused... I dunno... I'm just tired.

 

Ummm good new chapter!

[Tysyacha]

Tysy boarded a shuttle to Dantooine the very next afternoon, conflicted.

If what she believed she had heard Palpatine say was true, that meant

she was on a possible mission of assassination. If, however, the Lord

Chancellor of the Galactic Senate was not a Sith Lord, then that

meant Jayla Maene was a traitor to the Republic and should be executed.

 

Or imprisoned or exiled. Jedi never killed unarmed prisoners, after all.

 

No other Jedi were with her on this mission, which made the young Knight

feel both apprehensive and proud. Apprehensive because Tysy had no

backup, no recourse or others to turn to if her arrest of Jayla did not

go as planned. However, she also felt proud because she was alone.

Chancellor Palpatine had entrusted her, and only her, with this task.

At last, she had been recognized as worthy, a Knight that could be trusted.

 

First, though, before arresting anyone, she would see what Jayla had to say.

Perhaps Palpatine was exaggerating, although Tysy wasn't inclined to think so.

 

As it turned out, Jayla Maene was speaking outside the ancient government

center of Khoonda, surrounded by merchants, farmers, maintenance workers,

and anyone who cared to hear her views on the Galactic Senate's leader.

 

"Can't you see it?" Jayla asked the crowd. Her red hair was almost as blazing

as Dantooine's sun, and her expression was no less fiery. No less intense.

"Chancellor Palpatine is misleading us. He is posing as a follower of Light

while leading us deeper into darkness every day! If you don't believe me,

good citizens of Dantooine, allow me to explain. I shall, and I shall do so fully.

 

"That speech of his on Coruscant--it was nothing but posturing, false humility.

He was manipulating Count Dooku and General Grievous all through his capture.

Remember and hear the smug confidence in his voice, and see the proud look

in his eyes! I believe it is he who is the mastermind behind this entire war into

which we're locked. Who else could it be? No other could be so cunning or cruel."

 

"Do you have proof, Knight Maene?" Stunned, Tysy recognized the voice that

spoke as her own. "If you do, show it now, or be prepared to answer us."

 

"I have no proof," said Jayla, "but merely what I sense through the Force. It

is not blind chance that has led me to say these things, or blind will, but

rather the will of the Force. How can I do anything but obey it, I ask you?"

 

"These Jedi," scoffed a machinist. "We don't feel the Force, and we can only

rely on what the Jedi tell us. What kind of a way is that to live, or to believe

that Chancellor Palpatine is a Sith Lord? I demand more proof than feelings!"

 

Some others agreed. Still others took Jayla's side, and the orator stood up tall.

 

"You'll see who Palpatine is when it is too late. Believe me now; I'm right. My

Masters say that I am one of the most powerful young Jedi that has ever

achieved the rank of Knighthood. I say Palpatine is Sith, and he should fall!"

 

Tysy strode forward boldly. This was her chance--her chance to serve justice.

 

"Knight Jayla Maene," she said firmly, hating to hear such words said about

the man who had been so kind to her. So wise. False posturing? Who was Jayla

to say, she who had never been in the clutches of Count Dooku or Grievous?

She who had no proof except the silent Force to verify her accusations?

 

"In the name of the Jedi Order and Lord Chancellor Palpatine, I, Jedi Knight

Tysyacha Dvukh, arrest you on suspicion of treason against the Republic."

 

"Arrest me?" asked Jayla, indignant. She looked quite a bit older than Tysy,

perhaps twenty-five or thirty. "If you come on the authority of Lord Chancellor

Palpatine, then you are the one who should be arrested, Knight Dvukh. I do

not recognize your authority, or his, as neither of you are proper Masters.

I will not be arrested on this false charge, because it is unjust. Stand down."

 

Tysy, feeling her spine turn cold and ramrod-stiff, stood her ground. "No.

If Palpatine is a Sith Lord, then the rest of the Senate will expose him in

due time and vindicate you. If not, then you really are a traitor, Knight."

She ignited her green saber. "Come with me quietly, or we shall fight."

 

"Fight?" Jayla's laugh rang out deep and timorous amid the serene landscape

of Dantooine. "Do you mean you wish to duel me? I can't believe it! You're a

Jedi Knight, and yet you'd be so foolish as not to believe me? Stand down,

Dvukh, lest I overcome you and accuse you of treason against the

Republic! We need not fight, unless you wish to serve at hard labor or

in exile." Nevertheless, Jayla Maene ignited her blue Guardian's saber.

 

Being accused of betrayal on her own part, after being thus betrayed

by her mentor, was more than Tysy could bear. Not by this hot-headed

schuttawho embodied what Rodzina would have been in five years!

 

With one passion-imbued Form V offensive attack, Tysy threw herself at

Jayla Maene and cut her down. One slash to the throat was all it took,

and the potential traitor was no more. As for Tysyacha, the victor...

 

"Chto delaya ya?" Tysy choked, realizing Jayla was indeed dead

and not unconscious. Not at all. "What have I done? If you were right,

and what you said was right...then I will gladly pay the price that's due.

 

"Twenty years in exile! Thirty! Forty! I'll take it! Even if--" and here her

body became wracked with sobs she was trying not to let the crowd hear--

"you were wrong, it was wrong of me...to kill you." She raised her head

and body up from where she had knelt over the dead Jedi orator.

 

She heard murmurs from the crowd. Then soft cheers, slowly building momentum.

 

"You did the right thing, Jedi," said a laborer, placing his hand over his heart.

"That girl was spouting treason, and she deserved the fate she got! Bravo!"

 

As soon as she heard more and more agree with this common man, the

young Knight stood up, trembling, and staggered to the shuttle on which

she came. She had done her duty and served the Lord Chancellor well,

without hesitation or bargaining attempts, but had she done what was

right? What was just? She felt dead inside as she departed.

 

Tysy felt that the void of space was the perfect place for her right then.

 

**********************

 

Student: Jedi Knight Tysyacha Dvukh

Subject: Killing Without Remorse

Grade: 2 (that's an "F" in the Russian grading system)

[Yaggles]

Tysy is soooo stubborn. It is plain to see that Palpatine is the Sith Lord. I knew it before the second or third movies were out because of his voice and his nose protruding from his robes. But whatever... if you want Tysy to go DS then so be it.

[Diego Varen]

Good Chapters. We need a Female Sith. Looking foward to more.

[Jason Skywalker]

I liked them both alot. Nice to see Tysy get her first kill. And she got a 2, eh? Fantastic for her.

[Tysyacha]

Wise men say that throughout the galaxy, good news travels fast,

and bad news even faster. Dantooine very soon found itself reeling

from the utter shock of having one Jedi Knight kill another outside

the outpost of Khoonda, which was said to be so very safe!...

 

The security guards outside rushed to tell the security guards inside.

 

The security guards inside rushed to tell their supervisors who were even

further inside, sequestered in their offices, unaware of the disturbance.

 

Once those supervisors heard, they rushed to tell their own supervisors,

who rushed straight to the Administrator, who rushed to the galactic intercom.

 

The message rushed out far and wide, loud and clear, to all the planets

within hearing distance of Dantooine. A Jedi Knight had broken the Code

to the highest degree. One Tysy Dvukh, or Tysyacha, as was her full name.

 

She had slain Jayla Maene, a Jedi Knight who certainly had radical ideas

as of late, but treasonous? Not necessarily. Others had called the Lord

Chancellor Palpatine "a Sith" before, but only in jest. It appeared to the

witnesses and hearers of Jayla's speech on Dantooine, however, that

Knight Maene had been serious. No wonder the accused had tried to

arrest her in the name of the Jedi Order. However, the sentence this

Tysyacha had meted out to Jayla Maene did not exactly fit the "crime..."

 

...except to Lord Chancellor Palpatine. Exactly twenty-four hours after

the killing, after Tysy had completed her mission, he summoned her again.

 

"You have done well, Knight Dvukh," he said, folding his hands. "Very well.

Better than I had expected, all things considered. It takes a special kind of

person, of Jedi, to take the life of a brother-in-arms in the name of justice.

Jayla Maene was a traitor. She sincerely believed that I was a Lord of the

Sith. That is what all the witnesses of her speech heard her say upon

Dantooine, and that is why I sent you to carry out what you did.

 

"Neither you nor I wanted Jayla to be killed. Corpses serve not justice,

except in cases where those corpses were slain in self-defense. As was

Jayla's. Certain Jedi Masters are convening now in the very same Hall of

Knighthood where you received your greatest honor, Grand Master Yoda

included. They wish you to face trial for your crime. Are you prepared?"

 

Tysy bowed her head. "No, my Lord Chancellor." She felt ashamed.

 

"I understand completely. Do not fear, young Knight. If you simply tell

the truth--that you defended yourself against Jayla, a traitorous attacker,

and slew her to save your own life, then no one will pass judgment on you."

 

"But, Lord Chancellor," countered Tysy, "I was the one who suggested

and started the duel between us. I was the true aggressor, not Jayla."

 

Palpatine smiled a wan half-smile. "Were you? Who resisted arrest when

you ordered Knight Maene to stand down? You were reasonable with this

traitor, this scum, when you tried to apprehend her. She was the one who

brought about her own fall through her arrogant stand. Do not forget that,

Tysyacha. You may have killed her, but you did it in hot blood, not cold.

I admire those who are passionate about ideals like truth and justice.

 

"Without passion, say the Sith, there could be no strength, no power,

and no victory. I serve the galaxy with my own life, and that is why

you had to take Jayla's. She saw only what she says the Force made her

see, but do not believe that. She had no proof--only vacuous feelings."

 

Palpatine turned one last time to Tysy. "Go now, Knight Dvukh. Face

your trial, and stand your ground. If you fall, if you do not, it will mean

imprisonment. Katorzhnie raboty, hard labor, perhaps. Exile, at the

very least. Your talents would be wasted, and your destiny tarnished. If

the galaxy loses you, then we will lose the war--and the Sith will conquer."

 

Tysy nodded, swallowed hard, and turned to leave. Was so much really

at stake? She was one of the weaker Jedi, only average at best, but

somehow--

 

Was Palpatine right to place so much confidence in her after all?

[Yaggles]

The trial sounds interesting... I can't wait!

[Diego Varen]

The trial sounds interesting... I can't wait!

 

Me too. I hope this is our chance to see cameos of Yoda, Mace, Obi-Wan and more. Also, I hope Palpatine shows his true self soon. As I've said before, Palpatine is your second best Character.

[Jason Skywalker]

Another good chapter. Would have been cool if Palpatine bursted in with his lightsaber and killed them all.

[Tysyacha]

Twelve somber Jedi Masters, their lightsabers gleaming, stood in a circle

spanning the center of the Hall of Knighthood. Among those present were:

 

Grand Master Yoda, positioned at the circle's pinnacle, presiding calmly.

Master Obi-wan Kenobi, to Yoda's right, his eyes clouded with sorrow.

Knight Anakin Skywalker, Obi-Wan's apprentice, desperate for answers.

Mace Windu, Practitioner of Form VII Vaapad, desiring that justice be done.

Master Ladno, who had rescued the accused Jedi he had once turned down.

Master Odin, Rodzina Dvyer's teacher, fearing the same fate for this defendant.

 

In the center of their circle stood one Tysy Dvukh, formally Tysyacha,

her head bowed, hands folded in front of her. Silence surrounded them all.

 

After a few brief minutes, Grand Master Yoda spoke. "Welcome, Jedi. Tonight

come we do not to initiate a Youngling into our Order. Nor do we dub a new

Knight. Here we are, at this moment in time, to see one of our own stand

accused. Master Windu, to proceed I allow you by the will of the Force."

Yoda nodded toward Mace, whose violet lightsaber shone uniquely.

 

"Jedi Knight Tysyacha Dvukh," he said. "You stand accused of the murder

of Knight Jayla Maene, as witnessed by the many sentients who heard her

speak. How do you answer this charge?" Mace Windu's eyes held no anger

or vindictiveness, only the wisdom of a fine juror and potential judge.

 

Tysy took a deep breath. "Vinovna," she confessed. "I'm guilty, Master."

 

"Do you wish to allocute?" asked Obi-wan Kenobi of the girl. "To explain your

position and your actions, why you did what you did, before we twelve pass

sentence upon you? It would be wise to tell us the truth, and nothing but

the truth, and to answer all of our questions. Otherwise, we'll deliberate now."

 

"I--I wish to allocute," Tysy said after a pause, her heart beating faster.

"If I may, Master, I'd like to reveal all of the circumstances, both seen

and unseen, behind my murder of Jayla. I swear upon the Force to tell

the truth." This was an irretractable vow, and as such, she proceeded.

 

"I was sent on a special solo mission to Dantooine by the Lord Chancellor

Palpatine," Tysy began meekly. "He said that he suspected Jayla Maene,

my fellow Jedi Knight and my victim, of treason against the Republic.

Specifically, the Chancellor informed me that Jayla claimed he was a

Lord of the Sith. You can certainly understand, good Masters, why I

didn't take this lightly. Nor did I believe the Chancellor to be lying to

me. He is, after all, the head of the Galactic Senate, an upright man."

 

Obi-wan nodded. "What was your solo mission exactly, Knight Dvukh?"

 

"To arrest Knight Maene if it turned out that she did indeed claim the

Chancellor to be a Sith Lord. I went to Dantooine, and there I witnessed

her giving a speech on the very public grounds of the government outpost

of Khoonda. If you have not heard other witnesses tell you so, the last

words that Jayla spoke before I tried to apprehend her were: 'I say

Palpatine is Sith, and he should fall!'" Murmurs came from the Masters.

 

"So you were sent out on an arrest mission, and instead you killed

the suspect?" Mace Windu frowned, confused. "Why, Knight Dvukh?"

 

"Knight Maene resisted arrest. Jayla would not stand down when I tried

to apprehend her in the name of the Jedi Order. I had told her of the

charge of treason, but she scoffed at it. She implied I was the one

who was the real traitor. I tried my very best to persuade her to

come with me peaceably and let the Senate's justice run its course.

She refused, and we both fought. We dueled. I won, and yet I lost."

 

"Won because you're still alive?" hissed Master Ladno, his voice furious.

 

"Yes, Master. I truly had lost, because I took Jayla's life and broke the Jedi

Code. I turned my back all the teachings that you Masters have tried so

hard to impart to me. I betrayed a colleague and a true sister-in-arms.

I have failed. I've failed you all, and now I'm willing to pay the price."

 

"Who started the duel?" asked Anakin, his voice insistent. "Who began it?"

 

"I did, and not she. Not Jayla, who perhaps sought to see if I'd let my

passions dictate my immediate actions. I did, and proved her very right

if this was actually the case. I had no right to duel--and to murder her."

 

"Right you are," said Master Odin, his body in a forward, interjecting pose.

"However, having been so soon betrayed by your mentor, my own student

Rodzina Dvyer', I can see and understand why you'd be angry at Jayla for

implying you were a traitor. Angry enough to fight, and to kill if you had to."

 

"But does that excuse her?" Master Ladno retorted. "Why, surely not!"

 

"Ladno, please." Obi-wan Kenobi silenced him. "Knight Dvukh has confessed,

and her testimony is fully consistent with that of all the other witnesses to

this crime. What more do you want of her, and of us? Come. Let's turn

to deliberations, and decide the matter of sentencing. We not only

want to be just, but also merciful, considering all circumstances that

were revealed here." Obi-Wan stepped back. "We are Jedi, after all."

 

"Let the defendant be guarded until we return," said Mace Windu,

beckoning the other eleven Masters to retire with him to the Hall

of Knighthood's private chambers. Tysy sat down, utterly exhausted.

Attack droids stationed themselves all around her, though there was

no real need. She would not have escaped, even if she could have.

 

When the twelve had reformed their circle, the attack droids helped

Tysy to stand. All ignited their lightsabers, and Mace Windu stepped

forward. "Do you have anything more to say," he asked, "before we

pronounce sentence?" He stood at attention, his lightsaber lit, prepared.

 

Tysy stood with the help of one of the attack droids. "Yes. Mne

ochen' zhal'," she replied. "I'm sorry, and sincerely regret what

I have done. I will accept this punishment gladly, and not with

scorn. Even if it's hard labor, I will work to serve the Light again."

 

"Very well." Mace Windu raised his blade. "Jedi Knight Tysyacha

Dvukh, by the authority of all Masters and the will of the Force,

you are hereby exiled, and a Jedi no longer. Surrender your saber."

 

Tysy humbly bowed her head and did as the Master of Vaapad commanded.

 

She left the Hall of Knighthood with a pained and heavy heart, but a

cleaner conscience. She had not tried to lie or to implicate anyone

other than herself and possibly Palpatine. Even though the Lord

Chancellor had been the one to send her on her murderous mission,

he had wanted Jayla Maene to be arrested and brought to trial as

she was, not killed.

 

Tysy had made the path of last resort her very passion-filled first option.

 

Exiled, she now knew the fullest debt of anyone who broke the Jedi Code.

[Yaggles]

Very nice chapter... I guess she'll come back as a sith and stuff and try to kill everyone and then Palpatine will show his true colors and she will join him.

[Diego Varen]

Yes Obi-Wan was in it. Anyway, it was a good Chapter, which reminded me of the Trial in TSL. I only hope Tysy can regain the power of the Force by joining Palpatine.

[Jason Skywalker]

Oh she will, i'm guessing this was Tysy's plan all along! Now, good chapter, want to see more, it's getting interesting.

[Tysyacha]

Tatooine was the perfect place for a wanderer. Scorching hot, swept with deserts,

and barren of all life save the Jawas, Sand People, and the employees of the

Czerka Corporation. Most of them sweltered in the aromatically arid city of

Anchorhead, which wasn't very much of an "anchor" for anyone at all.

Except to keep them toiling like slaves in subsistence-wage jobs,

which was exactly the kind of work Tysy Dvukh was trying to obtain.

 

"Welcome to Czerka," said an official-looking young woman, standing a full

six feet tall, with olive skin and dark eyes. "Are you seeking employment?"

 

"Yes," said the exile. Tysy was clothed in a modest blue civilian's tunic

instead of the soft and prestigious Jedi Knight Robe she had once worn.

She carried no lightsaber, and there was no sign that she had ever been

a part of that great Order. So much the better, for the woman continued:

 

"Have you ever been a previous employee of the Czerka Corporation?"

 

"No," said Tysy.

 

"Do you have any family members, friends or relatives employed by Czerka?"

 

"No", replied the girl again. She started to feel embarrassed, "having no past."

 

"Do you have a resume or curriculum vitae?"

 

"Again, no."

 

"What managerial, executive, or financial officer positions have you worked in?"

 

"None, ma'am."

 

"Do you have any references that can prove your worthiness to work here?"

 

"No." Certainly not the Jedi, Tysy thought with a heavy heart.

 

"Excellent. You're hired. Your first job task will be--" and here she held up

a bucket full of cold soapy water and an all-purpose weatherproof scrub

brush in the corner of the main Czerka office--"the steps outside. They

haven't been cleaned lately, for our custodial staff turnover is quite high."

 

I bet."Uh--I forgot to mention I really have a quadrillion references!"

 

The woman smiled wryly. "Quadrillion, hmm? Nice try. If you work hard, you'll

move up quickly here. Otherwise, if you shirk this, we might shirk you."

 

Good point. "I'll get right to work," Tysy stammered, and headed outside.

 

As she diligently scrubbed the steps that were crusty with caked-on sand,

bird droppings, dead gnats and other bugs, she softly sung all of the long

fighting ballads she had learned in the Jedi Order to herself. Tysy knew

that the crowds walking past her were not listening, as absorbed in

their own loud conversations as they were. Suddenly, however...

 

"Excuse me, miss," peeped a Jawa male, holding a tiny black cube.

"This fell off of your belt. Forgive me for interrupting your duties."

 

"Thank you," said Tysy as the helpful extraterrestrial zipped away. Fell

off of my belt? she thought. I've never noticed this before.

 

She put it in her tunic pocket and vowed to examine it more after work.

[JediAthos]

So...our heroine has fallen. Kind of reminds me of what Kreia said in KOTOR 2.."it is a quite thing to fall, but far more terrible to admit it."

[Jae Onasi]

I got a kick out of the qualifications Czerka apparently feels is sufficient for work.

[Diego Varen]

Good Chapter, although I don't think Czerka would still remain... Anyway I hope Palpatine finds Tysy and brings her to the dark side. We just have to find out.

[Jason Skywalker]

Poor Tysy, has to scrub. Atleast it isn't in Telos like the real Tysy. Anyways, good chapter, i wonder what that cube is...a Sith Holocron?

[Tysyacha]

After a long and exhausting day of scrubbing the Czerka offices, Tysy

slipped into the refresher in her bare-bones room at the Anchorhead

Spaceport Inn. Ahh... She felt glad to get clean herself after

cleaning for seven hours. One might have thought she would have

been angry about having to do such work, but she was truly not.

 

I deserved what I got. Exile, and this, she thought penitently.

 

After she got out, Tysy wrapped herself in a sleeping robe and turned

to her nightstand. The glossy black cube, as tiny as a bauble on a

Czerka secretary's earring, intrigued her. She picked it up and held

it in her hand, twisting it around and manipulating it with her long

fingers. Suddenly, she heard a very small click, and then...

 

"Tysyacha?" a man's voice asked. It was very familiar, coming from a small

holoprojection whose source was locked inside the cube. "Are you there?"

 

Tysy couldn't believe her eyes or ears. "Knight Skywalker?!" She blinked twice.

 

"Yes, it's me. I couldn't believe what they did to you. The Jedi Masters,

I mean. Banished you, just like that, when at least Obi-wan knows what

I did to Count Dooku. How dare they, after all their talk about 'redemption'

and 'turning back to the Light'? It's only lip service. I realize that now."

 

Tysy gently shook her head. "That's not true, Anakin--er, Knight Skywalker.

I killed Jayla Maene. I provoked her into dueling me, all because she became

arrogant toward me and would not stand down when I ordered her to. I was

trying to arrest her, granted, but I shouldn't have become violent. I let my

anger control me and overcome me. That's why I struck her down, and

that's why the Jedi cast me out. They had every right, and I had none."

 

"I see your point," replied Anakin, "and it is a very valid one. However,

they should have at least considered that you were on a mission for Lord

Chancellor Palpatine. It seems that--and this goes no further--there is

a problem. The Chancellor thinks that the other Masters are planning to

betray him." He paused for a minute. "He wants me to find out if they do."

 

"Eto--uzhas'!" Tysy cried. "That's the worst kind of treason the Masters

could ever commit! Turning against the head of the Galactic Senate? They

all could die, and all because they made false assumptions! Anakin--!"

Here, she found she could not call him only by the prestigious title that

he deserved anymore. "What are you going to do? Who are you loyal to?"

 

"I don't know. At the moment, I'm trying very hard to play both sides

against the middle. Obi-wan and the rest want me to spy on the

Chancellor in order to find out if he's indeed a Sith Lord. To find out

if the Knight you killed had been correct. On the other hand, the

Chancellor wants me to investigate the other Masters, to find out

if they all plan to betray him and take over leadership of the Senate.

 

"It's a hard path I tread, Tysyacha, but not nearly half as hard as yours."

 

Tysy shook her head. "Nyet. Yours is harder. I suggest we help each

other out. Keep me posted on all these developments, and I'll tell you

what I would do if I were in your situation. Please know this, Anakin:

I'm your friend, and I've missed you every day since I've been gone.

Will you help me? Will you let me help you? I know that I'm not a Jedi

anymore, but..." She let the rest of her sentence trail off into silence.

 

Anakin smiled. "You're one of the only ones I've found I can really trust."

 

The holocron's image faded out. Tysy pressed the cube close to her heart.

I will help him, she thought, and together, we'll resolve this mess.

[Diego Varen]

Good Chapter. I predict Anakin will soon to the dark side, along with Tysy. Looking foward to more.