Chevron 7 locke Posted March 9, 2008 Share Posted March 9, 2008 I have recently joined the many,many people who write stories for fanfiction.net and i was wondering if you think this is a good idea for a story.... 1. Hinata,Kiba and Shino are dispatched to track down and apprehend Rouge Ninja who are raiding small villages and outposts 2. During the mission, Hinata is Killed when one of the Ninja sneaks up and stabs her through the heart with a Kunei knife 3. Kiba and Shino grab Hinata's body and abandon the mission, the rouges escape. 4. Hinata is buried in the village next to her mother, naruto had been out training and didnt know until Sakura tells him 5. Kiba starts talking to Naruto and tells him how hinata felt about him(as per hinata's last wish) naruto tells him hes sorry and didnt know. 6. Kiba gets really angry and starts yelling at him. This is an excerpt from the story:(yes its written) naruto:Im s-sorry i didnt know she felt that way about me Kiba:(angry) No, of course you didnt, you were to busy training to be the Hokage! You didnt have the time to notice her! You Never Deserved to be Loved by Her! You never deserved her admiration! She Deserved someone who Would look out for her! You Were too idiotic and dense to realize that she loved you! 7. everyone else has left the funeral, only naruto is left standing at her grave 'why did she have to die?' he asks himself his voice gets angrier "WHY DID YOU TAKE HER?!!!" he screamed to the heavens. He goes red chakra at this point sprouting three tails 8. Naruto attacks the rouge Ninja hideoutslaughtering all of them. he comes across Hinata's Killer he can smell her blood on her. he makes her death very painful 9. 10 years in the future. naruto is a class A missing ninja he has stolen two forbidden scrolls and hes on the run from ANBU 10. Naruto uses the two scrolls that are scrolls that tell how to travel time and use them to go back to the day Hinata died, to save her he cant interfer directly in the past , but he can talk to people 11. older Naruto findes younger naruto and manages to capture him and bring him to the house he lives in 12. Older Naruto tells him whats going to happen and tells him that if he searches his feelings he will find that he loves hinata and that she loves him 13. younger naruto goes one-tailed and picks up hinata's scent he gets there fast due to the power of the fox. 14. he comes across the battle between Hinata,Shino and Kiba vs the rouges he sees the rouge sneaking up on Hinata and attacks her, he goes after all of the rouges and chases them off 15. Hinata Shino and kiba thank him and are about to leave for the village when Naruto askes her to stay, she says yes. kiba and Shino leave 16. naruto kisses Hinata for the first time and he tells her that he loves he, hinata tells him that she loves him. 17. the older Uzumaki is waiting in the house he doesnt know if she has been saved or not, Naruto walks through the door with hinata smiling on his shoulder. she see the older naruto standing there and is shocked 18. Older uzumaki gets in front and begs for forgiveness for not being there to save her all those years ago, naruto explaines what the older naruto told him about her dying and him not realizing his love for her until to late. Hinata forgives him. the older naruto smiles for the first time in a long time and travels back to his own time. naruto and hinata leave to get some ramen together, hand in hand 19. Ten years in the future naruto is the sixth hokage, hinata is his wife of seven years,( Tsunade and jiriya are dating) i know when i thought it up my mind almost burned, but i think it kinda cute that those two are dating. neji and Tenten are married and have a kid that is more like tenten then neji. Shikamaru and temari got married, Choji and Ino got married Sauske came back to the village after killing orochimaru and Itachi. Sauske is married to sakura. kiba and Shino are dating fellow shinobi,(dont have names yet sorry) the end Comments Concerns Suggestions Wanna Comment Post it or PM me check out light side vader on fanfiction.net i gotta put stories on soon Naruto and Hinata Forever!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ctrl Alt Del Posted March 10, 2008 Share Posted March 10, 2008 As a comment: I think that time travels and time paradox ideas are too old stuff. Besides, you're making a lot up, something that the fans might not like (and that's an euphemism). For example, you're telling the future of all the key characters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 10, 2008 Author Share Posted March 10, 2008 I follow strict time travel rules you go back you change the future thats it no paradox you go back you do it you go back. I hate paradoxs, they give me headaches. Actully that last chapter you know the positive future one? I haven't written that one yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ctrl Alt Del Posted March 10, 2008 Share Posted March 10, 2008 I follow strict time travel rules you go back you change the future thats it no paradox you go back you do it you go back i hate paradoxs they give me headaches. Two Narutos at the same time/space? I call that paradox. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ctrl Alt Del Posted March 10, 2008 Share Posted March 10, 2008 I didn't said that the paradox would hurt anyone, even if you mentioned a movie to support your arguments. Besides, it's you're fan-fic, your universe, you may do what you want and whatnot. I was just commenting. Off: A person don't need to be at the same age or have the same experiences than his "other" for it to be a paradox. Just refer to the "Grandfather Paradox", of René Barjavel. Suppose a man traveled back in time and killed his biological grandfather before the latter met the traveler's grandmother. As a result, one of the traveler's parents (and by extension, the traveler himself) would never have been conceived. This would imply that he could not have traveled back in time after all, which in turn implies the grandfather would still be alive, and the traveler would have been conceived, allowing him to travel back in time and kill his grandfather. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DrPhil2501 Posted March 10, 2008 Share Posted March 10, 2008 Is this based during the Shippuden era, where Naruto is 15 years old? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DarthJebus05 Posted March 10, 2008 Share Posted March 10, 2008 Any stories that has ninjas in it rocks. The End. Fo shizzle. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Det. Bart Lasiter Posted March 10, 2008 Share Posted March 10, 2008 you should write an itachixorochimaru fanfic. make sure to include something about itachi's "sword of kusanagi" and how susanoo is horrible. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 10, 2008 Author Share Posted March 10, 2008 For one thing itachi and orochimaru they hate each other. and this is based yes during the shuppuden time. i only write Naruto/Hinata, Neji/TenTen stories. im sorry Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DrPhil2501 Posted March 11, 2008 Share Posted March 11, 2008 For one thing itachi and orochimaru they hate each other. and this is based yes during the shuppuden time. i only write Naruto/Hinata, Neji/TenTen stories. im sorry Ah! So your a romantic then? Thats cool... seeing as I'm a bit of a Naruto/Hinata fan meself. Its just that fanfics with clashing battles between certain characters can be awsome. I mean, Itachi vs Orochimaru... gotta nice ring to it. Still, no harm in sticking with what your more comfortable with. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 12, 2008 Author Share Posted March 12, 2008 Dont get me wrong the first stories in the series dont have much action because Hinata and naruto are exploring their relationship but be sure, there will be lot of action in the later chapters Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PoiuyWired Posted March 12, 2008 Share Posted March 12, 2008 Well, so you are writing the rare few "NORMAL" anime/japanese game related fanfic? Good for you I guess. Just don't ask what the 80% of those fanfics out there is about. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 15, 2008 Author Share Posted March 15, 2008 Like i was told.. im a romantic By the way i am now declaring unceasing war against Ctl_Alt_Del as soon as im done being lazy muhahahahahahaha..... i shouldnt have said that aloud... you didnt hear anything..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 17, 2008 Author Share Posted March 17, 2008 The first part of my story is up. check it out on fanfiction.net under light side vader. i thinks its pretty good so check it out and let me know what you think! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PoiuyWired Posted March 18, 2008 Share Posted March 18, 2008 Well, please don't double post, and ... when is the hentai/gore? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 18, 2008 Author Share Posted March 18, 2008 there is no hentai/gore.... i dont do hentai/gore......... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoeDoe 2.0 Posted March 18, 2008 Share Posted March 18, 2008 Gore ftw.... But it sounds kinda interesting nontheless Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aash Li Posted March 19, 2008 Share Posted March 19, 2008 Is it odd that I think Naruto looks better as a girl? >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Nine Posted March 19, 2008 Share Posted March 19, 2008 Uh... You'd probably be better off bouncing your ideas off of a board that caters to your particular interests. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 19, 2008 Author Share Posted March 19, 2008 umm what happened to this htread? first it wa locked, then unlocked, then moved somewhere Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rogue Nine Posted March 19, 2008 Share Posted March 19, 2008 This is the forum for non-Star Wars fiction, which is what your fic appears to be. That's why I moved it here. I could lock it again, if you like. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted March 19, 2008 Author Share Posted March 19, 2008 No, no thats perfectly alright, im sorry i was really tired when i posted this thread, must have put it in the wrong place Sorry! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevron 7 locke Posted June 17, 2008 Author Share Posted June 17, 2008 The Entire story is done. along with four other ones. They are on fanfiction.net Under Light Side Darth Vader Sorry for double posting. Please dleate this thread someone Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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