[FIC] The Adventures of Jolee Bindo

[Char Ell]

I was surprised at Jae's reaction to the holovid Miraxton showed of Jolee sending video of Jae and Talin to the Jedi Council. Seems like she came to her senses after a bit but I was surprised at her initial anger towards Jolee.

[RC-1162]

^^ i was thinking that too. just imagine Jabba the Hutt with a lightsaber duelling Luke for possession of Leia

[Jae Onasi]

There are Hutt Jedi, but they're exceedingly rare. I can imagine any race having those who are Force sensitive enough to become Jedi, but some races will have more than others.

Jabba certainly couldn't fight Luke, but if you found a trim/in-shape Hutt it's possible. With all the physical training Jedi do, even a Hutt would stay in shape. Plus, they don't have to have as great a physical prowess if they're Consulars.

[RC-1162]

they dont even have feet, how will they do Force Jump??

[Jae Onasi]

Chapter 34: The Vision and Miraxton

 

Even through all his agony, Talin sensed my worry for him. “Relax, Jae. I took the stim.”

 

The relief was nearly overwhelming. “Thank the Force. The defense techniques will work. Concentrate on them, and the pain will decrease.”

 

I wanted to bend down to help him so badly my heart ached, but I had to turn away to focus on my adversary before he destroyed us.

 

“It’s not just an ordinary stim,” I told Miraxton. It took very little of the Force to make it fly into my hand. “It combats the Scourge. We’ve found a way to stop you and your horrible attacks.”

 

He attacked as I feinted a move towards Talin with the stim. I dropped it to put both hands on my lightsaber, preparing for the first powerful strike. I slipped to the side a bit and parried his blow. His lightsaber glanced off mine, sliding off to the side. I swung around to slash at his open side. He twisted to stop my blade and then launched a blinding series of attacks that forced me back as our sabers flashed and snapped with each blow. Our blades locked in front of each other, and we circled, trying to find each other’s openings and weaknesses.

 

“Chilopos was the one who killed your grandmother, not the Hutts. You already killed him. You don’t have to avenge her anymore. The fleet is coming in to stop the Exchange ships that manage to make it through our attacks.”

 

Miraxton sneered, “I don’t care who was responsible anymore. The Hutts are a plague. The galaxy will be a much better place without them.” What was left of his connection with sanity began to crumble.

 

“The Republic won’t let you exterminate an entire species. Neither will the Navy.”

 

“How you underestimate me. Not all of the Navy swears allegiance to the Republic. I have friends in influential posts, and I’ve managed to see that sentients loyal to me captain a good number of those ships. Admiral Dodonna is going to have quite a surprise when some of them suddenly turn and start attacking her. Your precious Uncle Carth is first on the list.”

 

I swallowed hard as the despair sank heavy in my stomach, threatening to make me ill.

 

“Concentrate, Jae. Now he’s baiting you.” Talin noted. I could still feel the intensity of his pain, but it was improving slightly.

 

“You won’t be around to give the order for them to attack."

 

Miraxton made a little laugh, darkness somehow coloring even that. “My fleet knows what to do, and I’ve already given the order. You see, I anticipated that Carth would call in the fleet to take out my forces down here.” His hungry amber eyes locked on mine once more. “You’re not strong enough to kill me, Jae. And I’m not going to kill you. I’m going to turn you. We will destroy the Hutts and make the galaxy in our own image. I might even make you my wife.”

 

I grimaced at that thought. “You really are delusional. You might take me, but it won’t be alive.”

 

His eyes darkened with rage. “I will take you whatever way I please. If I want you to kneel and kiss the floor at my feet before you pleasure me, I will make you do it. You will be unable to resist me.”

 

He gave a furious push with his lightsaber, and I fell back on the floor. I rolled out of the way just as he slammed his blade down on the floor behind me. I jumped to my feet and immediately had to leap over his lightsaber as he swung the blade low, trying to strike me while I was still on the ground. I kicked hard while still in the air, catching him under the chin and sending him flying back. He landed on the ground with a loud grunt but was immediately on his feet again, screaming his rage as I rushed in for the attack. I lunged, and he blocked it and circled his blade, trying to lock up my saber and pull it out of my hands. He had stopped thinking and started to throw fierce blows randomly. I dodged and blocked, fighting fatigue as the blows rained down relentlessly.

 

“Use the Force, Jae. He’s reverting to Xi-ro,” Talin thought to me. He sent the tiny bit of strength he could through our link, and though it was not much, the encouragement alone helped bolster my strength and resolve.

 

Miraxton slashed and lunged as he began the pattern of the form. I nearly missed the initial blocks because of his speed, but I caught up and began to anticipate his moves. Our blades continued to swirl and then crash together in loud hums and snaps. My heart raced as I recognized the pattern from the vision, but I had to put the vision aside to concentrate just to survive each slicing attack.

 

He swung his blade around to try to hit me in the head, and I threw up my blade to catch his saber in front of me. He circled the blade down. I parried and tried to slide my blade up his to stab him in the chest. He stepped back and caught my blade before I could hit him. He went for my head again and I blocked.

 

"Join me, Jae. Join me or die."

 

I felt his attempt to draw my mind to his, trying to claw at the inside of my head to force me to his side. I fought it, pushing back against his will, pushing him back out of my mind.

 

"No."

 

He made a move to strike my legs, and I snapped the blade down to catch his.

 

It was a feint.

 

He dropped his blade slightly but then whirled it up above his head. My blade was still traveling down. I had no time to bring my lightsaber up to block him, and no room to dodge out of the way.

 

“NO!” Talin could hardly cry out loud, but I heard the psychic wail as he saw what was happening and realized I was going to be cut down.

 

“I love you,” I thought to him.

 

A violet lightsaber whirled through the air.

 

Miraxton’s eyes widened in surprise, and he looked up. I followed his gaze. Jolee’s lightsaber had severed his hands at the wrists, and they fell away, the lightsaber extinguishing itself automatically.

 

I took a deep breath, relief pouring through.

 

He looked back at me, pain filling his eyes and the hurt pinching his face. He cocked his head at me and said, “You lied to me. You said he was dead.”

 

I winced as I felt his sanity shatter. He roared in torment and struck out blindly with the Scourge. The spring-green waves shot out, deadly in their beauty. I fought through his Force attack and drove my blade in and up, hitting him in the hip and slicing all the way through to his opposite shoulder.

 

The screaming and all the streams of green light stopped simultaneously, extinguished by Miraxton’s mortal wound. He tried to take a breath but could only manage one more gasp. He collapsed, dead before he ever hit the ground. I could only stand there, trying to catch my breath and shaking with fatigue.

 

When I looked over to Talin, Jolee was already there, employing his healing techniques.

 

“Come on, Jae. I know you’re exhausted, but we only have about five more minutes before this place blows. Help me get him healed enough so he can get up.”

 

Both of us concentrated, trying to counteract the effects of the Scourge before the lack of time forced us to haul Talin to his feet. We put him between us, one arm over each of our shoulders, and half-jogged, half-dragged him towards the front of the building. Talin grit his teeth against the agony and put all the effort he had into just moving his feet along with us.

 

“Nice piece of acting there, Jae. You almost had me believing you were mad at me, and I’m the one who made up the whole damn thing,” Jolee said, breathing heavy as we moved down the corridors.

 

“The braid thing--perfect,” Talin said, his voice croaking but starting to return.

 

"I was worried that cutting it off might be a little over the top. It came to me right then, but I thought it might just work.”

 

“Oh, it worked, all right. Remind me to nominate you for Best Actress at the next Holovid Awards.”

 

As we approached the rendezvous point in the building, Bernecki saw the three of us and signaled to his team for another stretcher. We dropped Talin onto it as gently as we could.

 

“Move, people, now! This place is going up in 2 minutes!” Bernecki shouted at everyone. “Everyone not carrying a stretcher, surround those who are and lay down suppressive fire. I don’t want to see one single Exchange head popping up, and if one does, you better take it off.”

 

We dashed out of the building, and streams of blaster bolts started flying all around us. The soldiers on the team laid down such a heavy layer of fire I almost couldn’t see separate bolts anymore. An entire squad of Exchange mercenaries dropped, taken out by the furious shooting, their shouts no longer contributing to all the battle noise. Smoke and dirt plumed in the air as the grenades hit the ground or their targets and exploded.

 

MacFinlay was just setting the shuttle down, and Yutan manned the large guns on the shuttle to provide extra cover fire while we ran across the field.

We clattered onto the shuttle and secured the injured. I went back to the entrance with a blaster to cover the soldiers still pouring into the shuttle. Bernecki was the last to jump up the ramp.

 

“Everyone’s on. Go, go, go!” Bernecki shouted forward to MacFinlay.

 

MacFinlay took off before the hatch had even started to close. Bernecki and I kneeled and stayed at the opening to shoot any Exchange troopers that might try to attack us.

 

The shuttle jerked as MacFinlay dodged a rocket grenade. “Strap in and hold on tight, boys and girls!” he called back to all of us.

 

The shuttle rocked again as MacFinlay banked sharply to avoid another explosion. Bernecki lost his balance and slipped out the hatch opening. The tether caught him, and he swung around furiously in the whipping winds as the shuttle accelerated with the hatch half-closed.

 

“MacFinlay!” I called out. “Lower the hatch! Bernecki can’t get back in!”

 

“Hatch is jammed. I think the tether’s caught. We have to get that thing shut quick."

 

I looked down, and the line keeping Bernecki connected to the shuttle was stuck in the hatch opening. I pulled out my lightsaber, ignited it, and leaned out the opening.

 

“Grab my arm. I have to cut the line!” I yelled, trying to be heard over the wind. My hair whipped around and I could hardly catch my breath because of the speed.

 

“Just let me go! If I grab on, you’ll fly out, too. Just cut it so the hatch can close!”

 

“I am not letting you go. Trust me! If I can take out a Sith Lord, I can haul you back into a shuttle!”

 

He took my arm. I sliced through the cord, and used the Force to pull him up over the opening and back on the ship. The tether released and the hatch was able to shut. We both fell to the deck, breathing hard.

 

The command center blew up a few seconds later. I heard the boom even through the armor of the shuttle. I thought about Miraxton’s body being there in the middle of the fireball, and it brought me no joy. Instead, there was only relief that such a tormented soul could no longer torture anyone else, and that the battle was over.

 

After lying there a minute to catch our breath, Bernecki said, “Ma’am, you can be on my team anytime.”

 

“Thanks, Bernecki.” He helped me up off the deck and then took a hard look at my hands, turning them over briefly to make sure there were no serious injuries.

 

“Fa-meng!” Bernecki called aft.

 

“Sir!”

 

“Make sure you take care of her hands. And don’t take ‘no’ for an answer from her!”

 

“Yes, sir!”

 

Bernecki looked back at me and grinned. “Captain said the Onasi women can be stubborn sometimes, ma’am.”

 

“The Onasi men are just as bad.”

 

“If anyone says I agree with you, I’ll be required to deny it, of course."

 

“As soon as we can get good communication, we have to let Captain know that Miraxton said the fleet’s compromised.”

 

“What?” Bernecki said, face darkening with anger.

 

I told him what Miraxton had said during our duel.

 

“I’ll let him know as soon as we can get a secure line. Now go aft and let Fa-Meng take care of those hands. Ma’am.”

 

Jolee and one of the corpsmen were working on Talin. He looked terrible, blisters still covering the skin, but he was beginning to show signs of healing.

 

“You look a little better, dear” I said to him.

 

“Not enough to escape the kolto tank. I despise the taste of kolto.” His voice was still a bit hoarse, but at least his throat had healed enough to have a voice.

 

“I’m just glad you’re OK. I wanted to help you so bad when Miraxton hit you.”

 

“Jae, you took him out. That was a whole lot more help than anything else. By the way,” he stopped for a moment.

 

“What is it?” I asked, concerned that something was wrong when he stopped talking.

 

“I love you, too.”

 

Jolee smiled at that one and then said, “Talin, I’ve gotten about as far as I can. We’ll get you and Jae back to the ship and then to Telos station where Master Supat is. You two will be up and smooching in no time.”

 

“When you put it that way, Jolee, I’m feeling better already."

 

“You men!” I snorted, sitting down to let Fa-Meng treat my hands.

 

He applied the medpak, and the kolto in it started to heal up the raw areas of skin. Jolee sat down next to me. I rested my head back, closed my eyes, and breathed out a sigh, as much from the pain relief as from the fatigue.

 

“Our ruse worked pretty well, didn’t it?” I smiled. “How did you know he was going to have a holovid like that?”

 

“I didn’t right away. I ran into my ‘double’ in one of the cantinas when I was searching for De’Layn. He didn’t see me, thank goodness, and at the time I thought it just was an odd coincidence. However, I filed that away because ‘odd coincidences’ and the Force working its way usually end up being the same. When the vid of Talin and you showed up at the Jedi Temple, I put two and two together and came up with an educated guess. I would have figured out some other way to get ‘dropped’ if he hadn’t played that vid of ‘me’ sending off the transmission. Maybe a heart attack or something, since I’m so old, you know.”

 

He rolled his eyes, and I smiled again.

 

“I didn’t hurt you, did I?”

 

He made a show of rubbing the back of his head. “Not too bad, but I’ll definitely feel it tomorrow.”

 

“About that stim—I thought I told you I wasn’t going to take it.”

 

“I exercised my prerogative as your master to override your decision. I was the only one in the vision not hit with the Scourge. It made sense for you to get it instead.”

 

“I suppose you were right.”

 

“Of course I was right. I’m the only one running around without any blisters decorating my skin.”

 

“I’m just glad you got that lightsaber throw in perfectly. I thought I was dead.”

 

“Believe me, I was watching very carefully. Vrook would never forgive me if I allowed something to happen to you. Besides, I’ve gotten rather used to having you around. You’re a good fighter and a good friend.”

 

“Thanks. I’ve grown rather fond of you, too.”

 

We enjoyed a few moments in quiet. Fa-meng finished the treatment and went over to see if the corpsmen needed more help.

 

I started to think about the report we’d have to give to the Council. “I don’t know if the Council will ever believe that we play-acted sections of a vision. That has to be a first in Jedi history.”

 

“We’re a ground-breaking team, that’s for sure,” Jolee replied.

 

“Then we have to deal with the relationship between Talin and me.”

 

Jolee gave my shoulder a gentle squeeze as he got up. “There’s plenty of time to think about that after we all get a little rest. Besides, if you can deal with a Sith Lord, taking on the Council will be a piece of cake. And you have me in your corner.”

 

“Refresh my memory—is having you in my corner good or bad?” I grinned.

 

Jolee affected a look of disdain and sniffed. “You young people are never grateful.”

[Diego Varen]

"You young people are never grateful.”

 

The greatest line Jolee has ever said, during this Fic. A great Chapter and I'm looking foward to the remaining Chapters.

[RC-1162]

"Up and smooching"

 

 

that was a very cool chapter once again, Jae. is this the last? or are ther one or two left?

[Snafu7]

Wow, that was fast, wasn't expecting another chapter so soon.

 

Anyways, it was another great one, good job.

[RC-1162]

hey! you crossed the 5000+ views mark

[Jae Onasi]

Thank you all!

 

I was thrilled just to make it to 100 views. I'm kind of blown away by 5000+.

 

There's a couple more chapters left, not many, but enough to tie up the loose ends.

 

@Snafu7--A good chunk ch. 34 was done as part of 33, but I realized it was getting a little too big and would have taken even longer to finish. That would have threatened my ability to regain my 'Cool Points' that Hall said I lost after ch. 32. So, I decided on a good cut-off point in the middle of the battle and shifted the rest into ch 34. Besides, I like my cliffhangers.

[RC-1162]

forget cool points you want them, ask.

and i'll give you a 100 cool points if you can get the next chapter up soon _and_ check out my fic. (yeah, i know. i'm a troublesome guy, please dont kill me )

[Arátoeldar]

"Maybe a heart attack or something, since I’m so old, you know.”

 

 

Excellent chapter Jae. Good plot twist in the story.

[Hallucination]

+10 cool points, have a good day. Remember that there is no limit on cool points, so feel free to earn more by writing or other such activities.

forget cool points you want them, ask.

and i'll give you a 100 cool points

As you can see, RJM's Mojo Points™ and my Hallucinagenic Cool Points™ are by far the most prestigious awards for Mojo, Coolness, and Awesome. Please note the misspelling in the word 'hallucinagenic' where the second 'a' is supposed to be an 'o'.

 

It was a mighty fine chapter, it's good to see Jolee is bindotastic (or is it bindotacular or bindotrocious?) in a fight against a Bith Sith Lord.

[RC-1162]

they may have been prestigious, but for a writer like Jae, only the RC 1162 Commando Points™ are fit. since they uphold the Talent, utmost Creativity of a person and just plain Coolness

[Darkkender]

Okay after finally spending a week or so I've managed to get to chapter 23 and oh my goodness Jae. The depth of the story itself is beyond amazing. I love the build ups to action as well as the tasteful romance scenes.

 

I do have some SW universe Technical hang-ups but I won't complain that Industrial Automatons R4 Astromech series hasn't even been manufactured yet much less the R1. But then I should slap myself for nagging about something like that.

 

I figure you took creative license to help give everybody the vision of an Astromech droid because everybody is familiar with the R series astromech.

[Jae Onasi]

Humor mode way on: Oh, Lordy. Where's my shovel? You all are laying it on thick lately.

 

I'll go work on the next chapter, honest.

 

I am going to put up the revised ch 14 and 15 sometime today. Ch 15 made me want to pull out my hair. It went through 3 big revisions and Jiara's beta, and I think it's finally at a point that I'm satisfied with.

 

@Darkkender--Thanks! I can change that easily enough and make it a T4 droid instead of R4. I picked up the essential chronology, but I haven't picked up any other of the 'essential guides' and I didn't check out the SW database on the droids. The EU stuff I have read has been post ROTJ so I'm not surprised I missed that one, and I don't mind you pointing it out in the least.

 

I don't mind making changes--obvious medical inconsistencies drop me totally out of my suspension of disbelief, so I imagine some glaring errors that I've made will bug others just as much. I'd rather fix them and make things more enjoyable for everyone.

[Darkkender]

Leave it be I would say nobody else has ribbed you and besides who is to say that another astromech series droid never had that designation before Industrial Automaton. We are talking 3000 years here anyways.

[igyman]

Oh man!!! No offence to all you other FanFic writers, but this is the best thing I've read so far! Witty, funny and written with great skill. Keep up the great work Jae and if you have the time check out my ''Heir of Darkness''. It's my first FanFic, but if the audience likes it, there might be more.

[Jae Onasi]

Leave it be I would say nobody else has ribbed you and besides who is to say that another astromech series droid never had that designation before Industrial Automaton. We are talking 3000 years here anyways.

 

I love the "Find all/Replace" feature in Word. 1 button, 4 characters, hit enter, and it's done.

 

There weren't that many to change, anyway. My droid was terribly underutilized.

 

@igy--thanks!

I'll check it out, but it may not be before this weekend.

 

 

Edit: And, because I worked so darned hard on it, the revised version of ch. 15 is up.

And another edit: so is ch. 14--Sorry JM12, but the dress description got cut. It was pointed out to me that most guys wouldn't ooh and aah over embroidery, and, well, that's true. When Jiara mentioned something along the lines of half-expecting Jolee to say at that point 'well, if you got enough time to decorate a dress, I must not be working you hard enough,' I about fell over laughing, because that really was a good Bindo comment.

[Char Ell]

I went back and read the last few chapters again.

"I think bringing their charred bodies to our Lord would make him very happy,” the third one said.

 

The dark master smiled as bolts of electricity snaked from his hands towards all of us. Talin and I repelled the electrical strike with our lightsabers, while Jolee deflected the current back towards the last dark Jedi who spoke, killing him instantly.

This section made me . I can see how you used it as a quick way to reduce our heroes opponent count from three to two but going off of what we observe with victims of Force Lightning attacks in the movies, none die instantly. Just something that made me sit up and take notice.

The link between Talin and me strengthened again

me?

I was surprised at Jae's reaction to the holovid Miraxton showed of Jolee sending video of Jae and Talin to the Jedi Council. Seems like she came to her senses after a bit but I was surprised at her initial anger towards Jolee.

I somehow missed Jae's pronouncement to Miraxton and Talin that Jolee was dead. Once I read this the second time then I knew that Jae was feigning anger. Well, half-feigning maybe because it sure did seem like she didn't have a hard time being angry with her master.

 

Really though, I really like this story. IMO it has a very "Star Warsy" feel to it. For your first fan fic you've done a stupendous job. :thumbsup: Mucho congratulations on a well-written story.

 

I look forward to seeing how things wrap up, especially with the elements of the navy that were loyal to Miraxton.

[Renegade Puma]

Jae Jae. My precious Jae Jae. Where do I begin? My gosh I go MIA for a few weeks and you almost finish up your story. I can't even begin to praise you enough for an excellent, stupendous job. One of the best stories I have ever read. I can't wait to see how things clean up.

 

Now if only I could find a little time to finish the crystal of life.

[Jae Onasi]

My goodness, such praise from everyone. Thanks!

 

Jae Jae. My precious Jae Jae. Where do I begin?

 

Shhh. You'll make JimboFett66 jealous.

 

 

I can see how you used it as a quick way to reduce our heroes opponent count from three to two but going off of what we observe with victims of Force Lightning attacks in the movies, none die instantly. Just something that made me sit up and take notice.

 

That was one of those moments where the whole fight scene was just coming out faster than I could keep up with the writing. I looked back at it and thought, "Wow, I think I got a little impatient there." When I edit it, that's one of the sections I'll expand out just a bit.

I think it's kind of weird that people don't die instantly when hit by Force Lightning, but hey, it's the SW universe, GL can make it whatever he wants.

 

"...the link between Talin and me...."

[boring grammar lesson]....'Me' is the correct word to use there. We've suddenly developed this tremendous fear in the US in the last 15 years of using the word 'me' in both writing and conversation. It seems we go to any length to avoid using it, including substituting 'myself' inappropriately for 'me', which just drives me up a wall. It's 'I' if it's used as a subject and 'me' if it's used as an object. We say 'between you and me', not 'between you and I'. For example, I would write "Talin and I ran to him," and "He ran to Talin and me." In the first little sentence, you have to use 'I' because it's part of the subject 'Talin and I', and the second, you have to use 'me' because it's the object of the prepositional phrase 'to Talin and me.' [/boring grammar lesson]

That being said, at the time I wrote it, I remember thinking that the whole sentence just didn't 'feel' quite right. When I looked at it again I noticed it's an awkward construction, so I'll end up changing that one anyway.

 

I somehow missed Jae's pronouncement to Miraxton and Talin that Jolee was dead. Once I read this the second time then I knew that Jae was feigning anger. Well, half-feigning maybe because it sure did seem like she didn't have a hard time being angry with her master.

 

If Miraxton sensed any deception whatsoever, they were all screwed, so Jae had to act it well to make it believable and, in fact, probably feel it in order for it to work. I'm not sure how much I want to tinker with that--I don't want to make it so obvious that it screams "Jae's faking!" but I don't want it to be totally obscure, either. I went back to make sure I dropped enough hints without being overly obvious--I did want to have a bit of a surprise. I still don't even know if Talin knew about the play-acting going into the fight, though at the moment it doesn't make any difference.

 

Thanks for the comments, btw. When I go back to revise the chapters, I've found them to be very helpful.

[Lord Konohomaru]

Jae, you seem to be an expert writer , could you take a look at my fanfic, Clone

Trooper Jedi, it is still in its first couple chapters. It's not that I didn't like the comments coming from critics, but I want the opinion of a great writer. So if you can, please drop by my thread to take a look at it.

[Jae Onasi]

Lord K, I still have a _lot_ to learn just like any other new writer. I can't promise an expert opinion because I'm not an expert fiction writer. I can promise an honest opinion from my perspective as any other reader. I may not be able to get to it before this weekend and possibly this coming Monday, however.

Thank you for the nice words, too.

[Lord Konohomaru]

Thank You, I can wait for whenever you can get to it. There's only currently two chapeter so it won't take long (it would have more, but I'm trying to find time to write it and read yours )