ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 26, 2006 Author Share Posted January 26, 2006 Muwahahaha! Victory is mine! Die you evil Writter's Block!!! Sorry you had to see that but guess what? I've finished! Lemme repeat that: I'VE FINISHED! Alright, it's a little shorter, and I took a slightly more comic approach towards the end here, but...enough of my babbling. On with the show! Oh, and if the dialouge sucks, not my fault, you pushy pushy fans... ___________________________________________________________ ---Chapter Thirteen--- “C’mon, you have to know something about it!” “Ruins? No, I’m sorry. I haven’t been below the surface in years.” “Well you must have heard something from all the spacers that pass through here!” “Look, Offworlder, I am an antiques dealer, I deal with items that come to me, not the other way around. I’m sorry but I know nothing about this.” “Alright, sorry we bothered you then.” Elron and Visas exited the Manaan antiques shop, into the bright sunlight. Fairly frustrated, the Exile walked to the barrier at the edge of the courtyard, staring out over the waves. Visas joined him and for a few moments, they watched silently as waves lapped up against the metal. “What is it about the Handmaiden?” Elron turned to the Miraluka, who refused to make eye contact. “What?” “Why is she so special to you? What is it about her?” the Jedi asked, picking distractedly at her gloves. “Oh…Visas…” he took her wrist, “Look…” “Exile? Exile, come in.” Elron gave an exasperated sigh, and released Visas. He looked back out across the water, pulling the comm. from his belt. “Exile here.” he said, an annoyed edge slipping into his voice. “It’s Revan. Any luck?” “None so far. Just a few grumpy Fish-people. Not much else. You?” “Pretty much the same here. We’re about to head into the Courts.” “Alright, but we’re beginning to run out of places to check around here.” “Rendezvous at the Ebon Hawk at 1600 hours. We’ll talk more then.” “Understood. Exile out.” More than ready to chuck the tiny bit of metal and circuits into the sea, Elron reattached it to his belt. “Well, we had better…” he turned to where Visas…used to be standing beside him. The Miraluka was gone. Huh? She was right there a second ago… he thought, casting about for her. ~*~*~ “Understood. Exile out.” “Manaan doesn’t like to give up its secrets, does it?” Carth said, shaking his head. “Apparently not.” Bastila answered. Revan sighed. “One of the most beautiful planets I have ever seen…and the most annoying. C’mon, let’s go see what the Ahto Courts have for us.” ~*~*~ “Let the records show that Judges Shelkar,” “Jhosa,” “Naleshekan,” “Kota,” “And Duula,” “Have found the defendant guilty on all charges, and shall be sentenced to three years in the Ahto Rehabilitation Centre--” “B-but you’re Honors--” “Your time to speak is over, Killian. The sentencing stands. Bring in the next plaintiffs.” Revan and his companions sauntered into the Ahto Courts just as the defendant, Killian apparently, was escorted out by two Selkath bailiffs. “What is the case that you bring to us?” the Selkath in the center, Shelkar, asked them. “The case of a set of missing ruins and a civilization that seems to have disappeared.” Revan said, a cocky smile flitting across his face. Each of the judges looked closer at him at the sound of his voice. Their dark, filmy eyes traveled over Carth and Bastila, as well. “I know you, Offworlder.” Jhosa commented. “Yes…has Revan truly returned to Manaan?” Shelkar asked in wonder. “I have.” the Knight replied, proceeding to stand before the judges. “And I was wondering if you could help me with a problem.” “After what you did for us…” Naleshekan began. “Saving the Harakart Rift and our ancestors…” “As well as helping us to root out the Sith lies during the War…” “We’d do anything within our power and right to help you.” Each of the judges spoke in turn, however, Duula stayed silent. “I’m looking for a system of ruins, thousands upon thousands of years old that could be hidden somewhere on Manaan’s surface. Even older than the ones we found in the Harakart Rift.” “Ruins?” Kota asked. “Yeah, anything with inscriptions that may look like…this.” Revan said, pulling up one of the files he had copied onto his datapad from a holocron back in the temple. “Actually…” Shelkar began. He looked down at a computer screen built into his desk. A picture of a hunk of stone with smudgy writings craved onto it came up on the screen, a box below it running runes similar to the ones glowing on Revan’s datapad. “This…was found by one of our exploration teams at the lip of the Harakart rift. We believe it was forced up out of the Rift by the tides. We haven’t had a chance to date it yet, however.” “Can you get us a transport to the spot where it was found?” Carth asked anxiously. This had been the first hit they’d had all day. “We can do better than that.” Jhosa said. “I am head of Ahto City’s research society. I can have a submersible and a guide prepared for your use immediately.” Revan grinned, one of the few times he had in a very long time. “That would work just nicely.” he said. “Very well,” the Selkath said, punching a command on his console, “A sub will be prepared for you at the Republic docking bays in a few moments. Considering it was the way that you descended last time, I trust you know where those are?” ~*~*~ “Exile? Atton?” “Here.” “Yeah?” “Guess what, boys? We’re taking a fabulous vacation to the Harakart Rift!” “I take it you got a hit?” “Indeed I did.” “You owe me twenty credits, Atton.” “Damn!” “Alright, well, keep in touch, guys. We might be out of comm. reach, depending on how deep we go into the Rift.” “Understood.” “Got it.” Revan switched off the comm., flipping the small device in his hand before returning it to his belt. “Well, you seem happy.” Bastila said, a smile playing across her lips. The Knight rounded on her, grabbing her in a bear-hug and spinning round before planting her on the ground again. “Happy? I just got some of the best news yet! I think happy is an understatement.” “Energetic too.” Carth chuckled. “Hey, if we weren’t in a street full of Selkath, I’d do a cartwheel, alright?” ~*~*~ Within the span of ten minutes, Revan, Bastila, and Carth were in the submersible Jhosa had reserved for them, a Selkath guide ready to dive in along side them and guide them to the area where the tablet was found. The Sub had three different cockpits, each with their own separate air bubble. Each leapt into their respective seats, closed off their cockpits, and Revan started the engines. The roar of rushing water filled the sub as the little durasteel vehicle sank beneath the waves. ~*~*~ “Down once more to the dungeon of my black despair!” “Revan!” “Down we plunge to the prison of my mind!” “I didn’t know he could sing, heheh!” “By the Force, you should hear him when he’s in the shower!” “I’m not sure I like the way that sounds, Bastila, ahaha!” “Carth--” “Down that path into darkness deep as--” “Revan, if we weren’t in separate cockpits, I’d hit you.” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 I'm working on it, I'm working on it...though this block of mine is like trying to ride a bike through a swamp...not that i've tried... Forcefight, you're the best writer here, and you have plenty of fans around here, but sometimes I think you write as slow as a herd of turtles stampeding through peanut butter. Enjoy your writing, and don't do drugs (alliterations FTW!). Edit: You did that on purpose didn't you? . Good chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 26, 2006 Author Share Posted January 26, 2006 On purpose? My, whatever would you mean? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 On purpose? My, whatever would you mean? Not the tongue-sticking out smilie, that'll give me cancer of the right nebular! We all know you like posting things one minute before you get a response to something else. :tsk: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 26, 2006 Author Share Posted January 26, 2006 :xp: I've been caught!! :xp: Actually, that one just kind of happened, though I can't say its not fun Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 Yeah, it is pretty fun. Keep up the good work, lock the doors and windows in your house, the stalkers come in the night;). And don't do drugs (I really like alliterations today). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegade Puma Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 Yay! I am so glad to finally get to read a new chapter from FF Great job FF, keep it up. And give us a new chapter within a week ok? Yeah, that should do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 YAAHOOOOOO!!! excellent work, FFWM12, even though you dont like me XP you have heard this i know, but still: Youre the awesomest, superest, bestest writer ive ever seen. (well, LF-talked-with) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MdKnightR Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 FINALLY!!! I was beginning to think you had a fatal case of writers' block. Great chapter! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 26, 2006 Author Share Posted January 26, 2006 Thanks guys For a while, I was thinking along the lines of you, MidKnight. I thought I was going to be dead in the water for...well...ever :'( But I'm back. Back again. even though you dont like me XP Where the heck did you get that idea?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snafu7 Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 Another wonderful chapter FF, definately worth the wait, great job! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 27, 2006 Author Share Posted January 27, 2006 Thanks, Snafu, glad you liked it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 27, 2006 Share Posted January 27, 2006 Yay! I am so glad to finally get to read a new chapter from FF Great job FF, keep it up. And give us a new chapter within a week ok? Yeah, that should do Rule of Fanfics #1: You don't pressure Forcefight or you'll get cancer of the right nebular for Christmas. So Forcefight, any spoilers on the next chapter? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MasterAwder Posted January 27, 2006 Share Posted January 27, 2006 great chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 27, 2006 Author Share Posted January 27, 2006 Thanks guys And you know, Hall's right Spoilers, spoilers...well...I can tell you that **** go ***** *****, **** the ****** ****, ***** **** **** **** *********** that leads them to *********, but before **** *** *** back ** *** *******, Elron and *** ***** **** * **** set up by ******, who ***** *****. They try to **** ***** *** Ba**** *** ****, but *** **** **** ***** ****. *** too late anyway, the **** *** ******, and R**** *** *** ****** find ********** Knee-deep in ***** *** some other ********* ********. Does that sooth your curiosity? Most viewed fic in LF is 4500+ Do I qualify to take that spot yet? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 ^^^ i guess so, seein that you have 4700+ views and BTW, am i writing spanish or did you put me on your ignore list, since you thoroughly ignore my requests to check out my fic. and PS to all in general: whats 'FTW'?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 28, 2006 Author Share Posted January 28, 2006 Omg, Your fic! I totally forgot I never replied!!! I'm sorry, RC! I read your Mace fic a while ago, and apparently I forgot to put up a review : Sorry! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snafu7 Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 and PS to all in general: whats 'FTW'?? Means "for the win" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hallucination Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 Spoilers, spoilers...well...I can tell you that **** go ***** *****, **** the ****** ****, ***** **** **** **** *********** that leads them to *********, but before **** *** *** back ** *** *******, Elron and *** ***** **** * **** set up by ******, who ***** *****. They try to **** ***** *** Ba**** *** ****, but *** **** **** ***** ****. *** too late anyway, the **** *** ******, and R**** *** *** ****** find ********** Knee-deep in ***** *** some other ********* ********. Does that sooth your curiosity? So they go to the unknown regions and get into some trouble? That's a little vague. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Snafu7 Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 That's a little vague. hmmm... I'd say that cleared things right up Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steve-O Kreesh Posted January 28, 2006 Share Posted January 28, 2006 Nice chapter Forcefight. Keep up the good work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 28, 2006 Author Share Posted January 28, 2006 Well, that's part of it But not what's written there. Nice try Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 29, 2006 Share Posted January 29, 2006 Pfft. Horrible chapter. J/King. Don't wanna get killed by the others here. Though, I must say I thought that Brianna and Elron would do something Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 29, 2006 Author Share Posted January 29, 2006 Sick mind, JK, sick mind Who said they wont? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 29, 2006 Share Posted January 29, 2006 Hey! I was just saying that Brianna wasn't even mentioned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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