Christos K Posted June 22, 2012 Share Posted June 22, 2012 This looks REALLY good so far. I can't wait for the release. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Scorge Posted June 22, 2012 Share Posted June 22, 2012 Wow, im impressed. Keep up the work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LDR Posted June 27, 2012 Share Posted June 27, 2012 Looks great! What's your ETA? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J4ngo Posted June 27, 2012 Share Posted June 27, 2012 So, where am I up to now then? New player characters – sorted. New underwear for everyone, including PCs - sorted. New outfit for the male pc – sorted. Planet retextures – Everything finished (about 10 modules needed doing. Not any more.). Movies – About 12 more to go (out of 30). Populating emptier modules – sorted. Creating and adding new placeables to modules – sorted (see pics below). New appearance for chancellor’s guards – sorted. New assassination missions added. Well over a hundred bugs fixed thanks to my beta testers. I think the first half of the game is sorted. Voice actors for all the main parts are now sorted, and many of them sound really good. Time for some pics : The female and male PCs each have new underwear, as do the rest of the party members. Nothing too naughty, just something that looks different and decent. Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) I created some barns/farmhouses and spread them around telos to make it look more like a farming community. Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) Apart from filling up the streets with as many placeables I could find in the game that made sense, I created two entirely new placeables for Coruscant ; A free standing advert (with four variations), and a bridge to cross overhead occasionally. Looks much more 'Coruscanty' to me now, especially when I fill it up with even more people. Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) Remember those dodgy looking Calo Nord based private guards from the orginal? Well, now we have these. Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) As soon as I have a few more voice actors deliver their lines, I should have a cool looking trailer too. Still looking for volunteers for smaller parts of around five to ten lines each! All I need is for you to record some basic mp3s then send them to me. PM me if interested! trex in TJM whenever i enter the rough barricade that leads to the exit to the jungle depths where you meet the shadow the game freezes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted June 29, 2012 Author Share Posted June 29, 2012 trex in TJM whenever i enter the rough barricade that leads to the exit to the jungle depths where you meet the shadow the game freezes. I would suggest redownloading and reinstalling the modules. Beyond that, I would also suggest waiting for the 2.0 of course. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted July 4, 2012 Author Share Posted July 4, 2012 OK, here's a weirder request. I'm putting together the updated version of the opening movie and need someone to proof read my opening crawl. Spellcheck says it's OK, and I've been over it at least ten times, but there still might be something I've missed. If you have a couple of minutes, let me know if you find anything. Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) From the ashes of the Sith triumvirate's devastation, a broken Republic has arisen. Turning to the crime lords, droids, merchants and assassins as new leaders, citizens have seceded from the galactic government, forming their own independent factions. A despairing and weakening senate has outlawed the Jedi. The once revered warriors have fallen into memory. Amidst the chaos, a lone scientist has taken it upon themselves to seek the legendary Jedi general, Revan, a man who's return many hope will change the galaxy for the better. Meanwhile, in the furthest reaches of the galaxy, something lingers. The darkest will ever created by the Force. It bides it's time, nearing the moment it has long anticipated. The moment it will return and remind the galaxy what the power of the dark side truly is... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CptPriceless Posted July 4, 2012 Share Posted July 4, 2012 I'm putting together the updated version of the opening movie and need someone to proof read my opening crawl. The concept is nice, but it's way too long for a Star Wars opening sequence - mostly due to unnecessary addons and somewhat awkward syntax. Since each "paragraph" is commonly 1-2 sentences long, I took the liberty to help you cut. Hope this helps! Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) Amidst the ashes of the Sith triumvirate, a broken Republic remains. Various parties have seceded from the government and forged their own independent factions. Outlawed by the despairing senate, the once revered Jedi peacekeepers are powerless and slowly fade into a distant memory. Within this disarray, a lone scientist seeks to rediscover Revan, the Jedi general who, if found, may very well reverse the galaxy's misfortunes. Meanwhile, in the furthest reaches of the galaxy, a terrible menace lingers, biding time for the moment it reminds the galaxy of the Dark Side's true power... Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) ORIGINAL + EXPLANATION From the ashes of the Sith triumvirate's devastation [ashes already implies devastation, so that word is not needed], a broken Republic has arisen. [not sure if "arisen" is the best word to synergize the word "broken" Republic] Turning to the crime lords, droids, merchants and assassins as new leaders,citizens have seceded from the galactic government, forming their own independent factions. [Too wordy]A despairing and weakening senate has outlawed the Jedi. The once revered warriors have fallen into memory. [sounds better when + can be easily combined] Amidst the chaos [not necessarily the best connotation here], a lone scientist has taken it upon themselves [can be easily avoided if you reword] to seek the legendary Jedi general, Revan, a man [what if I played Revan a woman?] who's return many hope will change the galaxy for the better. [too wordy] Meanwhile, in the furthest reaches of the galaxy, something lingers. The darkest will ever created by the Force. It bides it's time, nearing the moment it has long anticipated. The moment it will return and remind the galaxy what the power of the dark side truly is...[too wordy] You don't necessarily have to use these changes/cuts, but this is just my personal imput. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted July 5, 2012 Author Share Posted July 5, 2012 I feel you make some good points. I've also just had an hour long binge looking through and analysing the actual star wars crawls, so first of all, lets's have some fun statistics. Sizes of opening crawls : EP 1 : TPM - 78 words EP 2 : AOTC - 80 words EP 3 : ROTS - 75 words EP 4 : ANH - 83 words EP 5 : TESB - 81 words EP 6 : ROTJ - 78 words Average word count : 79.17 The crawls also follow a notable pattern based on their paragraphs : Paragraph 1 : Always describes the state of the galaxy/society (there is war, there is a rebellion, there are seperatists etc). Paragraph 2 : Explains how the current plot was instigated, usually via something that has just happened prior to the film (Leia stole the plans, Grevious invaded Coruscant etc). Paragraph 3 : Set up the first scenes we see in the film (Vader is dispatching probes, two Jedi are trying to rescue the Chancellor etc). The only exception to this seems to be ROTJ, where all three paragraphs just seem to state what's going on in a general sense, probably because it follws on so directly from the end of TESB. So, back to the topic : - My original crawl in 1.0 : 111 words ! - My working progress crawl posted above : 132 words ! - CptPriceless' above : 93 words Combining everything together, I now think I'm going to go with this : Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) The Republic is broken. Following the attack of Darth Nihilus, many people have seceded from the government altogether, turning to droids, crime lords and assassins for leadership. The Jedi now outlawed, a lone scientist searches for their legendary general, Revan, who’s return could restore the order. Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest will ever created by the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy what the power of the dark side truly is... Wordcount : 79 It also fits the three paragraph structure. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Christos K Posted July 5, 2012 Share Posted July 5, 2012 That seems to work. Perhaps a few word changes here and there. I bet it will look better within the class Star Wars intro format. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CptPriceless Posted July 6, 2012 Share Posted July 6, 2012 Average word count : 79.17 The crawls also follow a notable pattern based on their paragraphs : Paragraph 1 : Always describes the state of the galaxy/society (there is war, there is a rebellion, there are seperatists etc). Paragraph 2 : Explains how the current plot was instigated, usually via something that has just happened prior to the film (Leia stole the plans, Grevious invaded Coruscant etc). Paragraph 3 : Set up the first scenes we see in the film (Vader is dispatching probes, two Jedi are trying to rescue the Chancellor etc). - My original crawl in 1.0 : 111 words ! - My working progress crawl posted above : 132 words ! - CptPriceless' above : 93 words Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) The Republic is broken. Following the attack of Darth Nihilus, many people have seceded from the government altogether, turning to droids, crime lords and assassins for leadership. The Jedi now outlawed, a lone scientist searches for their legendary general, Revan, who’s return could restore the order. Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest will ever created by the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy what the power of the dark side truly is... Wordcount : 79 It also fits the three paragraph structure. I would say don't limit yourself to the average. However, it does look like it's enough. All that matters now is wording. Let's see what we can do. Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) The Republic is broken. Following the aggressions of the Sith Triumvirate, many officials have seceded from the government, turning to droids, crime lords, assassins and other such means for leadership. The once revered Jedi, now outlawed, are powerless to assist. A lone scientist searches for legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore order to the galaxy. Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest power of the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy of the true power of the Dark Side... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
milestails Posted July 6, 2012 Share Posted July 6, 2012 **whose Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CptPriceless Posted July 6, 2012 Share Posted July 6, 2012 **whose Didn't catch that one, thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Warlord664 Posted July 6, 2012 Share Posted July 6, 2012 there should be a "the" between "for", and "legendary", cause right now it's "A lone scientist searches for legendary general," And you guys did an exelent job of cutting the title crawl down. Looking forward to release for this version of TJM. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth polo Posted July 7, 2012 Share Posted July 7, 2012 Hey Trex if you had to estimate when do you think the mod will be out. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted July 7, 2012 Author Share Posted July 7, 2012 Hey Trex if you had to estimate when do you think the mod will be out. OK, I'll actually jump in and answer this before a mod deletes your post. I'm working on the last three FMV cinematic right now (out of 37). I won't be making any predictions as to when I'll be finished as they're unpredictable, but they are pretty much the last thing I have to do on the mod. I'm also organising and in some cases waiting for actors to get back to me, which can also be very unpredictable. When those two things are sorted, I'll be ready to announce an official date. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zhaboka Posted July 8, 2012 Share Posted July 8, 2012 I like Cpt. Priceless' latest version quite a bit. It's got the right tone and wording, definitely. Great editing jobs on his and Trex's parts, but that last one really nails it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted July 9, 2012 Author Share Posted July 9, 2012 I like the captain's rework enough too, but there's a few parts I'm not as keen on, mainly because they aren't acurate with the content in the mod (you weren't to know of course, you haven't played it ). Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) The Republic is broken. Following the aggressions of the Sith Triumvirate [i took triumvirate out of the original because I felt not enough Kotor fans would know what it meant. I think just refering to Nihilus works, if nothing else he was the one that most civilians will be aware of] , many officials [saying officials sounds a bit weird to me. I think I prefer citizens. It emphasises that it's their choice, not the higher ups] have seceded from the government, turning to droids, crime lords, assassins and other such means for leadership [what other such means? Don't understand why this little bit was added] . The once revered Jedi, now outlawed, are powerless to assist. A lone scientist searches for legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore order to the galaxy [i meant the Jedi order . Also not too keen on the idea of Revan restoring order. Sounds more lie something palpatine would want to do]. Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest power of the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy of the true power of the Dark Side...[think it's just personal preference, but I don't like the word power turning up twice there] So, following on from all that, here's what could be the final crawl that I'm very happy with : Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) The Republic is broken. Following the attack of Darth Nihilus, many citizens have seceded from the government, turning to droids, crime lords and assassins for leadership. The Jedi now outlawed, a lone scientist searches for their legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore the ancient order. Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest power ever created by the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy what the dark side truly is... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
razorxp Posted July 9, 2012 Share Posted July 9, 2012 for me trex last text be good but something missing and i don"t know what is the missing part.but trex final results text is great. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tmandoo Posted July 10, 2012 Share Posted July 10, 2012 The darkest power ever to wield the force lingers A powerful darkness within the force lingers Or somesuch nonsense. I don't know. Throwing things out there lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark-Heart Posted July 10, 2012 Share Posted July 10, 2012 I like the captain's rework enough too, but there's a few parts I'm not as keen on, mainly because they aren't acurate with the content in the mod (you weren't to know of course, you haven't played it ). So, following on from all that, here's what could be the final crawl that I'm very happy with : Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) The Republic is broken. Following the attack of Darth Nihilus, many citizens have seceded from the government, turning to droids, crime lords and assassins for leadership. The Jedi now outlawed, a lone scientist searches for their legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore the ancient order. Meanwhile, on the edge of the galaxy, the darkest power ever created by the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy what the dark side truly is... This really does look great, I just have a small suggestion if I may? (FYI, I've been watching this project for a VERY long time, just never posted till now.) My suggestions are just a few wording alterations... Show spoiler (hidden content - requires Javascript to show) Civilization is crumbling. Following the attacks of Darth Nihilus, many citizens(worlds? Or is the intention that it is isolated citizenry, absent local government?) have seceded from the Republic, turning to droids, crime lords and assassins for help. (I think the word civilization gets the point across much better, than not only is the government on the verge of collapse, but the very nature of the galaxy has taken on a darker, more savage bent). With the Jedi now outlawed, a single man(woman/alien) searches for their legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore the ancient order. (The specification of it being a scientist only brings up unanswerable questions, while a simpler identifier keeps it more open-ended, and this statement creates enough questions already, IMO. And the 'With' at the start presents this as the catalyst for this search, rather than the statement seeming to be unrelated). And on the edge of the galaxy, lingers the Darkest Power(capitalized for effect, and it implies a specific entity, which seems to be the point) The Force has ever created, anxiously awaiting it's return to the galaxy... (The rest of that line seems unnecessary, and this way seems-at least to me-to create greater curiosity and tension over the situation). I hope this is helpful. And if not, simply disregard. But I would love to be able to say that I had an impact on this project And on a more personal note, Trex, you are a god among men. Your work on this is AMAZING! Have you considered applying for a writer/designer position with BioWare, or another Lucas Arts affiliate? Just a thought. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted July 10, 2012 Author Share Posted July 10, 2012 OK, here's a fun little job for someone if they want it. Can anyone tidy this up for me : Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
d3sd0 Posted July 10, 2012 Share Posted July 10, 2012 Trex, this is really great and I'm glad to see all the progress! Thank you so much for all the time and hard work you've put into this. I had already typed something really long, but the site said my token had expired so I had to go back and lost it. But I know more or less what I said concerning your crawl. Very good by the way! Someone already caught whose so credit to them. As someone else mentioned the last part seems a little bare. Well, here are my suggestions for your crawl. Sorry in advanced for my lack of use with a spoiler. My minor changes: The Republic is broken. Following the attack of Darth Nihilus, many citizens have seceded from the government, turning to droids, crime lords, and assassins for leadership. With the Jedi now outlawed, a lone scientist searches for their legendary general, Revan, whose return could restore the ancient order. Meanwhile, at the edge of the galaxy, the darkest power ever created by the Force lingers. Soon, it will return and remind the galaxy just what the dark side truly is... *Very minor changes and what I added to the first paragraph (a comma) is just personal taste and both are correct, unless the crime lords and assassins is one of the factions. Also, I added "With" to the beginning of the second paragraph, just sounds a bit better. Also, to the last paragraph I changed "on" to "at" (just sounds better in my opinion) and then I also added "just" before "what the dark side truly is..." it just sounds better/ makes it sound less bare. I know my changes are very small and minor, and by no stretch of the means do you even have to take my critique into consideration. Sorry I took up so much space to express so little! Thanks again Trex for the massive amount of time, effort, and skill this has required on your part to get this far! Thanks, d3sd0 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
d3sd0 Posted July 10, 2012 Share Posted July 10, 2012 Sorry for a double post guys, but I've been working on the logo Trex, and it's okay so far, but I was wondering, do you want me to remove the random darkness/ blackness around the letters? Specifically the I and the H. Also would you like me to remove the darkness around the letters in Star Wars? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Trex Posted July 10, 2012 Author Share Posted July 10, 2012 Sorry for a double post guys, but I've been working on the logo Trex, and it's okay so far, but I was wondering, do you want me to remove the random darkness/ blackness around the letters? Specifically the I and the H. Also would you like me to remove the darkness around the letters in Star Wars? Not too bothered about the darkness around the letters as I think it'll always be against a black background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
d3sd0 Posted July 10, 2012 Share Posted July 10, 2012 Okay then, is there anything specific you want to be done? I'm trying to get rid of roughness and the random pointy things jabbing out. Hopefully it will look smoother by the time I'm done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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