Renegade Puma Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Hey guys. I just completed the first chapter of my own fanfic. I have never written a story before, ever. So I would appreciate some feedback on it. Forceflight you really inspired me with your story so far. So I thought I would give it a go of my own to see how much fun I could have. If you guys check it out, then thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Diouf Posted December 30, 2005 Share Posted December 30, 2005 Hey guys this and the Mace Windu Fanfics are very well written I was never great at creative writting but well done to you two guys for the great stories and keep it up! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted December 31, 2005 Share Posted December 31, 2005 thanks, man. and Welcome to the Forums. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegade Puma Posted January 3, 2006 Share Posted January 3, 2006 I am anxiously awaiting your next chapter Forcefight. Where are you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 4, 2006 Author Share Posted January 4, 2006 Quote: Originally Posted by ForceFightWMe12 The more feedback, the quicker I'll update. Really? Seems to me that it's the exact opposite. Well....that was also in the beginning when I had almost no other fans besides RC and MidKnight...it also helped that at that point, it wasn't the holidays and there wasn't enough snow for me to ski/snowboard Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fuu Posted January 4, 2006 Share Posted January 4, 2006 ^ Don’t worry about JK, he got banned anyway. As for your fic, take your time We all love your fic, but if TSL has taught us anything: We'd rather wait for an excellently polished product, as opposed to a rushed and unfinished one. Still looking foreword to you next chapter Fuu Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted January 5, 2006 Share Posted January 5, 2006 Don’t worry about JK, he got banned anyway. He got banned? The only reason I could possibly think of is maybe spam... Oh well. So... Do you still have a writers block, ForceFightsWithMe12? Is it a writers block concerning the entire plot, or is it just some block concerning the way you want the events to occur? I'll supply advices on both things: The way you want the events to occur: This is the most common writers block and the one that occurs the most often. Don't worry about it, it happens to everyone; I admit it is an important factor that adds the quality of the events that are described. All you have to do, is sit back, relax and imagine how would it look like. What would cause you to be interested? What would draw your attention? How would it look like? As soon as you find an answer, write it down. The overall plot: This is a less often writers block than the previous one, and don't worry it happens to everyone in the beginning. About this one: Take your time. Don't rush it, think it over, carefully. In the end you will make a quality story and will have great results. I hope this helped. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth333 Posted January 5, 2006 Share Posted January 5, 2006 Spam fest is over And more particularly the following users should consider themselves officially warned for spamming: RC 1162, DarkLord_Revan and Hallucination (Jedi_Knight_707 too but he's already on "forced" vacations) ForceFightWMe12: keep it up! What I saw between the spam posts looked pretty good edit: I did some cleaning in the thread. RH Edit: Apologies are considered spam too! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 5, 2006 Author Share Posted January 5, 2006 The Darth333 likes my story? I feel special now Thanks for the advice, Vlad. The problem with my writter's block is how I want things to occur, and also that fact that I have a certain...well...mood that I have to be in to write. Otherwise, if I try to write...it...er...stinks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 8, 2006 Share Posted January 8, 2006 if i were you, id try and act out what i tink and see if it works out. thatsw what i do for some of my fight scenes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Steve-O Kreesh Posted January 15, 2006 Share Posted January 15, 2006 Forcefight, you are one talented writer for your age. Your style reminds me a lot of Margret Weis, one of my favorite authors. You should really think about writing as a career. You have talent young lady, keep it up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Renegade Puma Posted January 18, 2006 Share Posted January 18, 2006 Wow FF, you must have like MAJOR writer's block. I have written 11 chapters of my own story since the last time you updated. Course mine isn't nearly as good as yours, but still, please please please, give us a new chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 18, 2006 Author Share Posted January 18, 2006 Alright, good and bad news. Which first? Here, I'll let you pick: Bad news: I still have writter's block. Good news: My new chapter is almost finished. I love spoiler tags Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RC-1162 Posted January 19, 2006 Share Posted January 19, 2006 Welcome to the Forums, Master Revan. and its good to know that your chapter is almost finished. although, i think writers block is contagious, since im suffering from it too, and i have a stupid drill to do tomorrow in our annual sports day. talk about cr@p. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Char Ell Posted January 20, 2006 Share Posted January 20, 2006 I've read your "Plight of Darkness", ForceFightWMe12 (btw you picked a great screen name ) or at least all that you've written thus far. With the understanding that you are only thirteen years of age, I, like most everybody, think you've written some great stuff here. FYI, I'm in the 30+ club so I'm sure I'm over the hill as far as you're concerned. But IIRC MDKnightR may give me a run for my money in the age department... PROS I think you demostrate skill with writing live conversation into your story, an area where many other writers struggle. I also enjoy the freshness and innocence you use to portray Revan and Elron. While the romances between the two couples encounter obstacles, as most romances do, you make these obstacles seem so simple to overcome if only the lovers could see it thru your eyes. And most of all I enjoy your creativity and imagination. The plot twist with Revan's heritage is a wonderful surprise, as others have mentioned. CONS - (I feel guilty for including these so I spoilerized them. Read them only if you really want to) You're already aware of your weakness with spelling. I only mention it because IMO if a writer wants to capture her readers' full attention then it's important to eliminate spelling errors as they are potential distractions to the reader. I think the only other con is really mea culpa. I'm an old geezer and I've allowed the vicissitudes of life to strip me of my youthful innocence. While I enjoy seeing Revan and Elron through your eyes I don't really see them that way myself. As I read your story the left side of my brain relentlessly whispered that this isn't how Revan and the Exile really are. Unfortunately, and really I mean unfortunately, I see more complexities and nuances and not so much simpleness in my versions of Revan and the Exile. I offer this feedback only as a means to illustrate the differences in your story's audience. I wish I could borrow The Doctor's time machine and fast forward 10 years, even though that would put me in the *gasp* 40+ club, so I could see what your writing is like then. Keep up the writing girl! The Force does indeed fight with you! I look forward to your next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MdKnightR Posted January 21, 2006 Share Posted January 21, 2006 FYI, I'm in the 30+ club so I'm sure I'm over the hill as far as you're concerned. But IIRC MDKnightR may give me a run for my money in the age department... And just what is that supposed to mean? On the contrary, I did find your take on Revan and the Exile to be quite refreshing. Don't let his "vicissitudes" spoil that. By the way, this is the Webster definition... 2 a : a favorable or unfavorable event or situation that occurs by chance : a fluctuation of state or condition <the vicissitudes of daily life> Hai Wan must be trying to expand his vocabulary because it looks to me as if he just looked that word up and used it today. I had an art professor in college that did the same thing on a daily basis. Always trying to impress you with his intellect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Char Ell Posted January 21, 2006 Share Posted January 21, 2006 Hai Wan must be trying to expand his vocabulary because it looks to me as if he just looked that word up and used it today. I had an art professor in college that did the same thing on a daily basis. Always trying to impress you with his intellect. Awww, come on MdNightR, you can admit it if you were just a wee bit impressed with my diction, o fellow Smallville fan... In all honesty though I do read a lot and I remember words and phrases that resonate with me and I will later use them in my personal writing. Is that considered plagiarism? If it is then consider me guilty as charged. This method is not without its drawbacks though. I remember a Saturday Night Live skit where the SNL cast spoofed Jesse Jackson using the phrase, "The point is moot!" I thought that was a pretty cool phrase and used it until one day I decided to look moot up in the dictionary and to my chagrin discovered that moot used in that manner is an adjective. The moral of the story? Don't let SNL be your English teacher. And I also freely admit to frequent use of dictionary.com when I am unsure of appropriate use of the words I write. You know, trying to remember if the word is an adjective, adverb, or preposition is a real pain and sure does take a lot of time and effort. Ughh! On the contrary, I did find your take on Revan and the Exile to be quite refreshing. Don't let his "vicissitudes" spoil that. @ForceFightWMe12 - PLEASE, PLEASE by all that is good and decent I implore you to not let my "vicissitudes" spoil any of your writing. I would be greatly disappointed if you did. I feel you have great skill at writing. Your writing reflects who you are, what you think, what you feel, and I would not want to detract from that. If you're writing just for the joy of writing then either don't read or ignore my stated cons. If however you're interested in one of your "older" reader's thoughts about your story then please understand that I shared these with only the best intentions. Indeed, did I not say that I felt guilty even posting them? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 22, 2006 Author Share Posted January 22, 2006 You know what, I'm quitting writting for the rest of my life Yeah, right. Thanks for your input, Hai Wan! Hmm...vicissitudes...interesting word... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MasterAwder Posted January 22, 2006 Share Posted January 22, 2006 when is the new chapter coming Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 25, 2006 Share Posted January 25, 2006 Most viewed fic in LF is 4500+ ? Just 200 away! 'Cause I'm nice, I'll get you about 100 of those "checking for updates"... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 25, 2006 Author Share Posted January 25, 2006 Just 200 away *parties* Go me, go me, its my birthday, not really, party anyway... Hmm...perhaps an update would give me those needed 200? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Master Reven Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 Hmm...perhaps an update would give me those needed 200? Duh! Anyway, Superb story so far! Believe me when I say that I have checked this thread everyday since I first saw it. Obsessed I know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ForceFightWMe12 Posted January 26, 2006 Author Share Posted January 26, 2006 I'm working on it, I'm working on it...though this block of mine is like trying to ride a bike through a swamp...not that i've tried... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JediKnight707 Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 Been there done that . But, I'll let you in a secret. Depending on how you finish it, and how long you keep it going (and maybe putting this in your sig will help), this thing will probably go up to 7000+ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vladimir-Vlada Posted January 26, 2006 Share Posted January 26, 2006 I'm working on it, I'm working on it...though this block of mine is like trying to ride a bike through a swamp...not that i've tried... Sounds like that that mood isn't exatcly the type that appears often. Hmm... ...I suggest that if you can't seem to get that mood (or inspiration), then try imaginating it. Proof read, and if the results are like the ones you wanted, carry on. But you have to work really, really, really hard to do that. You will do fine. Believe me. Regretablly, I am not as lucky as you are. When I get some ideas for a potential story, it starts from a mere beginning that features TV shows; after 10 minutes of imagining, the story becomes enormous, long, complex and hard to explain so much, that not even 2 hours are enough for me to write something that will in small part make the story interesting. But, it happens. You have luck and I don't. I hope the advice helped. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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